Talk:Man camp

A fact from Man camp appeared on Wikipedia's Main Page in the Did you know column on 2 May 2022 (check views). The text of the entry was as follows:

Did you know... that man camps can overwhelm local infrastructure, including emergency services, and contribute to an epidemic of violence against Indigenous women in North America?

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Did you know nomination

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The result was: promoted by SL93 (talk) 03:49, 24 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

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... that a man camp is temporary housing to accommodate a large influx of workers, frequently located in remote locations, and can overwhelm local infrastructure and emergency services? Source: https://www.nytimes.com/2011/11/26/us/north-dakota-oil-boom-creates-camps-of-men.html
- Reviewed: Template:Did you know nominations/Barbara Maier Gustern

Created by Larataguera (talk). Nominated by Evrik (talk) at 21:27, 5 April 2022 (UTC).[reply]

Alt1: ... that man camps, frequently located in remote locations, can overwhelm local infrastructure and emergency services, and contribute to a North American epidemic of violence against Indigenous women? Source1: https://www.nytimes.com/2011/11/26/us/north-dakota-oil-boom-creates-camps-of-men.html Source2: https://www.mmiwg-ffada.ca/final-report/ (pg 593)

A lot the notability of this topic is related to violence against Indigenous women—especially in the journal literature—so I think it's warranted to mention it. I also think leaving out information about what a man camp is makes it more 'hooky'.Larataguera (talk) 01:20, 6 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Larataguera: I agree. I try to make hooks as concise as possible. What do you think of Alt2?

Mgreason, I think Alt2 is fine, thanks! Larataguera (talk) 20:19, 16 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Alt2: ... that man camps can overwhelm local infrastructure including emergency services and contribute to an epidemic of violence against Indigenous women in North America? Source1: https://www.nytimes.com/2011/11/26/us/north-dakota-oil-boom-creates-camps-of-men.html Source2: https://www.mmiwg-ffada.ca/final-report/ (pg 593) — Preceding unsigned comment added by Mgreason (talk • contribs) 13:13, April 15, 2022 (UTC)

General: Article is new enough and long enough
New enough: Long enough:

Policy: Article is sourced, neutral, and free of copyright problems
Adequate sourcing: Neutral: Free of copyright violations, plagiarism, and close paraphrasing:

Hook: Hook has been verified by provided inline citation
Cited: Interesting:

QPQ: Done.

Overall: Mgrē@sŏn (Talk) 15:34, 15 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Mgreason: I'm unsure the status of your review. --evrik ^(talk) 22:47, 15 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Evrik: I am presently reviewing the article, checking cited sources, etc. I should be finished tomorrow. Mgrē@sŏn (Talk) 18:12, 16 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

@Evrik: I've finished the review, and everything passes. I'd like to suggest Alt2 as the hook? Shorter hooks grab attention, and it looks like the violence issue is the most important point of the article. Mgrē@sŏn (Talk) 00:14, 18 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Sounds good. Go ahead and give this a green check! Thanks.--evrik ^(talk) 02:38, 18 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

I want to add some commas to this hook, as shown in ALT2a below:

ALT2a ... that man camps can overwhelm local infrastructure, including emergency services, and contribute to an epidemic of violence against Indigenous women in North America?

@Evrik and Mgreason: Thoughts? Z1720 (talk) 01:30, 21 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Okay by me. --evrik ^(talk) 01:36, 21 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]

Fine. Mgrē@sŏn (Talk) 17:06, 22 April 2022 (UTC)[reply]