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I've listed this article for peer review because I just want to improve the article, hopefully to FA status.

As requested, I'll have a look at the article, keeping in mind a potential FAC nomination.

Few too many section headers for my taste (MOS:OVERSECTION). The "History" section is five paragraphs long; it does not need four subsections. The infrastructure section is one chunky paragraph long, and yet it has three subsections. One subheading in "Network and operations" is literally just a table. I have written FAs almost three times as long with half the section headers.

The WP:LEAD should look to fully summarise the article. In my opinion, the "history" section is undervalued and the "infrastructure" section is not covered at all (even considering its minimal length—perhaps it should be made a subsection of "Network and operations" or "History"?).

Couple of prose tweaks needed: "4-car formation ... are operated"; note MOS:NUM saying numbers less than ten should be spelled out in letters; "was installed in the line".

- "Due to the line being single-tracked and being one of the only unelectrified railway lines in Aichi Prefecture prior to the electrification of the line, despite the fact that the line was the closest JR-owned line to Chubu Centrair International Airport, local residents and municipalities requested the modernization of Taketoyo line. In response to demands, JR Central began work in March 2010 to electrify the line. is very clunky, especially the "being one of the only unelectrified railway lines prior to the electrification of the line" bit.

- There is also some duplication: the work to elevate Handa station is mentioned twice.

There is an uncited sentence at the end of "History", and in the "Route" subsection".

Didn't notice this until now - whoops. Thanks for the review. ABG (Talk/Report any mistakes here) 00:39, 20 November 2024 (UTC)[reply]