Talk:Athena/GA1

Latest comment: 6 years ago by Katolophyromai in topic GA Review

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Reviewer: TonyBallioni (talk · contribs) 00:44, 18 December 2017 (UTC)Reply

I'll try to get at this one this week. It is an in-depth article on a vital topic, so it might take some time, but I'll do my best. TonyBallioni (talk) 00:44, 18 December 2017 (UTC)Reply

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria

  1. Is it well written?
    A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:  
    she presided over her sisterhood, the Athenai is a bit unclear. I'm not sure what her sisterhood is.
    I have revised the phrase in question to better explain what the Athenai sisterhood was. --Katolophyromai (talk) 20:07, 20 December 2017 (UTC)Reply
    and thus perhaps the Lady of Athens. perhaps seems out of place and speculative. If it is a possible translation, there is probably a better way of phrasing it.
    I have reworded this passage. "The Mistress of Athens" is a probable translation of "Athana Potnia." It is not speculative; it is used in most works on the subject. In fact, in more recent works, "the Mistress of Athens" seems to be the more common translation; "Athena of Athens" still occurs, but is generally more prevalent in older writings. --Katolophyromai (talk) 18:33, 20 December 2017 (UTC)Reply
    In this aspect, Athena was also known as Parthenos, which means "virgin", because she was believed to have never married or taken a lover How does this connect to the previous sentence about war? The phrasing seems to link the virginity to it.
    Athena Parthenos was envisioned as a warrior maiden; this aspect of her emphasized her status as a virgin and also her status as a warrior. I have amended the passage to try to make this more self-evident. --Katolophyromai (talk) 19:06, 20 December 2017 (UTC)Reply
    B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:  
  2. Is it verifiable with no original research?
    A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:  
    B. All in-line citations are from reliable sources, including those for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons—science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines:  
    C. It contains no original research:  
    D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:  
    Nothing coming up in Earwig.
  3. Is it broad in its coverage?
    A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:  
    B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):  
  4. Is it neutral?
    It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:  
  5. Is it stable?
    It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:  
    No edit wars
  6. Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
    A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:  
    All good
    B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:  
    Looks fine
  7. Overall:
    Pass or Fail:  
    Looks good overall. The only issues I found were those with clarity early in the article, and you've corrected them. I'm passing this now. TonyBallioni (talk) 03:44, 22 December 2017 (UTC)Reply

Thank you for agreeing to review this article. I really appreciate it. If you happen to notice any problems at all, I am more than willing to address them. --Katolophyromai (talk) 03:54, 20 December 2017 (UTC)Reply

@TonyBallioni: Thank you so much! This is the third article I have nominated for GA that has been reviewed and the first one that has passed. I really appreciate you taking the time to review this article. I do still have five articles in the "Philosophy and religion" category that are still currently awaiting review. These are: Inanna, Enlil, Anunnaki, Jonah, and Pythagoras. I also have several other articles I am currently working on trying to bring to GA. In the meantime, I will continue reviewing your article Papal conclave, 1655. --Katolophyromai (talk) 04:13, 22 December 2017 (UTC)Reply