Wednesday, 3rd March 2021

C/W

Descriptive writing

Objective(s):
1. To explore the techniques of descriptive writing
2. To understand how to structure a descriptive writing piece.
Starter TASK: READ EACH EXAMPLE, AND
CREATE YOUR OWN.
Tool Examples Apply It

From To Your Turn

Using -ing verbs to begin a I left the graveyard, Shivering and shaking, I
sentence shivering and shaking with left the graveyard
fear.

Using ed verbs to begin a Ayesha climbed the wall, Filled with fear, Ayesha
sentence filled with fear. climbed the wall

Begin a sentence with an Sameena walked along the Nervously, Sameena

adverb canal bank nervously walked along the canal
bank.
TASK
• Write a description using the photograph.
• Your description must have five paragraphs.

• Use the next slide to help you plan and write your description.
 What will we include in our description?
Paragraph 4: Zoom/zoom – what
Paragraph 1: Imagine that you tiny detail can you pick out to
are looking at the picture from describe?
far away. What do you see
from a distance? Describe the
setting, the mood and Challenge: Personification.
atmosphere. E.G.
The food was calling us.
Challenge : use interesting
adjectives.
The noisy, vibrant room.

Paragraph 2: Paragraph 5: Change your time of day and link

back to opening paragraph.
What will you ‘zoom in’ on?
Challenge: use a semi colon in your paragraph.
What vocabulary will you use?
A semi-colon can be used to join two
Challenge: use a simile. TOP TIP: If you are struggling on what to ‘zoom clauses when events or ideas in each
clause are closely linked.​
in’ on, divide your picture into 4 parts and
E.G. E.G. The food arrived; it looked
The room was a mess. It was
describe two of the sections in detail eg. The scrumptious

like a tornado had hit it. dinner ladies, the food, the children, etc. ​

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Paragraph 3: What will you Success criteria: Vocabulary bank
​ interesting and ambitious
Add
‘further zoom in’ on? USE SIMILES, METAPHORS, PERSONIFICATION AND A VARIETY OF
DIFFERENT SENTENCES. vocabulary
For example:​
Challenge: use a metaphor I loved watching the new Marvel film; it
was thoroughly entertaining!
E.G.
The room was a pigsty.
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Plenary
• What do you need to write a good description?
• How could you structure a good description?
 Thursday, 4th March 2021
C/W

Learning how to improve my description

Objective(s):
1. To explore the techniques of descriptive writing
2. To understand how to write an effective description.
 Learn new words
20
mi
ns
The following words Word Meaning in your own words Write a sentence with the Synonym of the word
have been taken from word in it

a description about a
Illuminating To light something up A flash of light was Light, light up, brighten,
place. These words illuminating the house. bright
are ambitious.
aimlessly Without a purpose or direction We wondered aimlessly Pointless, useless,
around England. meaningless, worthless
Complete the table.
dormant (of an animal) having normal The dormant butterflies were Asleep, sleeping,
For each word, write physical functions suspended or resting in their nest. slumbering, resting,
slowed down for a period of time; in responding
the meaning in your or as if in a deep sleep.
own words.
encases enclose or cover in a case or close- Close the door encase robbers surround, cover, enfold,
fitting surround. come. enwrap, blanket, swathe,
Write a sentence with swaddle
the word in it.
haphazardly in a manner lacking any obvious a hodgepodge of family Randomly, messily,
Write a synonym for principle of organization. photos haphazardly arranged carelessly
on a table.
each word.
easel a self-supporting wooden frame for The artist was using an easel Stand, frame, tripod,
holding an artist's work while it is while painting. mount
being painted or drawn.

suspended Temporarily prevented from Work on the dam was Refrain, hold back, keep,
continuing or being in force or suspended stop, cease
effect
 A description about a place
Parag
raph
1
Bright mid-morning light streams through the holes in the plain 3 min
s
glass windows, illuminating puffs of dust that floaimlessly at
around the space. The air is frosty and fresh, colder inside than
it is outside, but that doesn’t matter nobody has used this
First paragraph: room for over a year. The heavy iron padlock on the front door
has long lost its key, and a thick, flaky layer of brown rust now
find the adjectives
encases it. The gentle blue paint on the door peels away in
strips, and the once-shiny brass doorknob is tarnished and
worn. Like so many rooms in this city, this one lies dormant and
forgotten.
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raph
2
3 min
s

The grey cloths, spattered with bright splotches of paint, laze

haphazardly over benches, drape themselves over easels, and Second paragraph:
sleep in lumpy piles in the corners of the room. With every
Second paragraph: gentle gust of cold winter wind, the plastic sheeting ripples like Find an adverb

Find three similes waves in an ocean; it has long escaped the thick black tape that
aims to control and constrain it. In harsher weather, these
sheets crack and snap and wave desperately like survivors out
at sea; in the heat of summer, they simply rise and fall like a
sigh.

second paragraph:
Find an example of
personification.
 Parag
raph 3
3
mins

Perched high in the sky at the top of a tower block, the

narrow balcony at the side of the room is heaven for
pigeons. They flutter and coo and peck and nest, safe in
the knowledge that their flock can seek shelter in peace.
Their soft grey and white feathers litter the floor of the
balcony, occasionally catching on the breeze and
fluttering without clear direction.

Third paragraph:
Find interesting
Third paragraph:
adjectives and verbs
Find a metaphor.
 Parag
raph
4 3 min
s

The day passes. Far below, horns honk, phones ring, children
chatter, and music blares. Nestled at the top of the tower block,
the room remains untouched. The bright mid-morning light is
now hiding; the air has turned even cooler, and delicate white
frost decorates the windowpanes like lace. A few pigeon
feathers have made their way through the holes in the plain
glass windows, but that doesn’t matter: the room will remain
untouched for months to come. Dormant. Forgotten. Secret.
One day, a new owner will locate the key for the lock; they will
lift away the cloths; they will shoo the pigeons from the
balcony. But until then, the room lives on, suspended in time.
Dormant. Forgotten. Secret

Fourth paragraph:
Fourth paragraph: Find an example of
personification
Find a simile.
• Read the description again.
• There are sentences of different lengths and types.
• Write different sentences in the table.

Word type example I will add this type of word in my description about the
canteen

Simile As clear as the sky

Metaphor It was a
Personification The scrumptious food was calling them
Interesting Verbs The
Interesting Adjectives The clean, spotless canteen
Interesting Adverbs
When I improve my own description, I must think about: