Y6 Letter Writing: Formal Example Text

Sparkhouse Primary School,

Sellorswood Road,
Derby,
Derbyshire,
DE8 5LF

C.R.E.S.T. Recruitment Office,

PO Box 543,
New York,
USA

13th November 2016

Dear Agent Coulson,

I am writing to you to kindly offer my services as part of your C.R.E.S.T. team. Recently,
I know things have been difficult for you with some of your agents having differences of
opinions leading to some separation within your team. To strengthen your department, I
would like to put myself forward as your organisation’s newest member.

Firstly, I would like to discuss my physical qualities with you. As a ten-year-old girl, you may
underestimate my strength and physical presence – you would be wrong to do so. Having
won the prize of ‘fastest girl’ every year at our school sports day competition, my speed is
one of my unquestionable strengths. In addition, my throwing abilities would definitely be
another asset to C.R.E.S.T. I train weekly with a cricket team and my coach (Mr Slight) says
that I am a born fielder. Once, the stumps were almost destroyed by my throwing power:
they actually had a ball-shaped hole through the middle. Mr Slight certainly thinks that I
could play for England Ladies when I’m older. However, I can think of another squad that
could benefit from my abilities far more.

Whilst physical strength is important, any prestigious C.R.E.S.T. agent must also possess
incredible intelligence. My mathematical abilities are excellent. Maths is an essential agent
skill: it is the key to everything! In my mind, life is just one big mathematical equation after
another. I’ll let you into a secret - my miraculous throwing skills are all due to arithmetic. In
order to make the perfect throw, I work out the following: the angle of the bounce; the speed
of the ball; the strength of the wind and the point of release from my hand. It’s a strike!

If I were to be an agent in the future, I have also thought through a secret identity to
keep my loved ones safe and give me anonymity outside of the C.R.E.S.T. organisation. I
would call myself Mathematics Master, for obvious reasons. Some people may think that
mathematics is not an impressive quality; others, like myself, know what a truly invaluable
skill maths can be. I am hoping that any potential enemies would underestimate me and
my mathematical expertise, which would give me a definite advantage and allow me to
skilfully defeat them.

In conclusion, I hope you can see that I would be a marvellous asset to your team. I would
relish the opportunity to join you at C.R.E.S.T. I hope to discuss this further with you and I
eagerly await a positive response.

Yours sincerely,

Charlotte Monroe
AKA Mathematics Master
Y6 Letter Writing: Formal Example Text
Annotated Genre Features
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sender’s address Sparkhouse Primary School,
in the top right- Sellorswood Road,
hand corner
Derby,
Derbyshire,
2
recipient’s DE8 5LF1
address on the
left hand side C.R.E.S.T. Recruitment Office,
PO Box 543,
3
the date New York,
USA2
4
a greeting –
‘Dear Sir/Madam’
if the recipient 13th November 20163
is not known or
‘Dear Mr/Mrs/ Dear Agent Coulson,4
Miss (surname)’
if the recipient is
known I am writing to you10 to kindly offer my services as part of your C.R.E.S.T. team. Recently,
I know things have been difficult for you with some of your agents having differences of
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an introduction opinions leading to some separation within your team. To strengthen your department, I
to show the would like to put myself forward as your organisation’s newest member.5
purpose of the
letter 5
Firstly, I would like to discuss10 my physical qualities with you. As a ten-year-old girl, you
may underestimate my strength and physical presence – you would be wrong to do so. Having
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more details
won the prize of ‘fastest girl’ every year at our school sports day competition, my speed is
organised into
one of my unquestionable strengths. In addition, my throwing abilities would definitely be
paragraphs
another asset to C.R.E.S.T. I train weekly with a cricket team and my coach (Mr Slight) says
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a conclusion that I am a born fielder. Once, the stumps were almost destroyed by my throwing power:
saying what they actually had a ball-shaped hole through the middle. Mr Slight certainly thinks that I
needs to happen could play for England Ladies when I’m older. However, I can think of another squad that
next could benefit from my abilities far more.
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a formal sign off Whilst physical strength is important, any prestigious C.R.E.S.T. agent must also possess
- ‘Yours faithfully’
incredible intelligence. My mathematical abilities are excellent. Maths is an essential agent
if the recipient is
not known or skill: it is the key to everything! In my mind, life is just one big mathematical equation after
‘Yours sincerely’ another. I’ll let you into a secret - my miraculous throwing skills are all due to arithmetic. In
if the recipient is order to make the perfect throw, I work out the following: the angle of the bounce; the speed
known of the ball; the strength of the wind and the point of release from my hand. It’s a strike!

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the sender’s If I were to be an agent in the future, I have also thought through10 a secret identity to
name at the end keep my loved ones safe and give me anonymity outside of the C.R.E.S.T. organisation. I
would call myself Mathematics Master, for obvious reasons. Some people may think that
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use formal mathematics is not an impressive quality; others, like myself, know what a truly invaluable
sentence starters
skill maths can be. I am hoping that10 any potential enemies would underestimate me and
such as ‘I am
writing to inform my mathematical expertise, which would give me a definite advantage and allow me to
you’ or ‘I would skilfully defeat them.
like to express’
In conclusion, I hope you can see that10 I would be a marvellous asset to your team. I would
relish the opportunity to10 join you at C.R.E.S.T. I hope to discuss this further with you and
I eagerly await a positive response.10,7

Yours sincerely,8

Charlotte Monroe
AKA Mathematics Master9
 Y6 Letter Writing: Formal Example Text
Annotated Grammar, Punctuation and Spelling Features
All text: 8
preposition
Sparkhouse Primary School,
appropriate phrases to add
level of formality Sellorswood Road,
detail and clarity
shown Derby,
(e.g. under the
throughout the Derbyshire,
floorboards,
text: formal DE8 5LF across the room,
vocabulary and C.R.E.S.T. Recruitment Office, etc.)
sentence PO Box 543,
structure that New York,
matches the
9
adverbs and
USA
formality of the adverbials to add
text detail and clarity
(e.g. bravely,
2
a range of 13th November 2016 often, repeatedly,
linking words/ in the blink of an
phrases, Dear Agent Coulson, eye, etc.)
including
adverbials, to I am writing to you to kindly9 offer my services as part of your C.R.E.S.T. team. Recently2&9, 10
expanded noun
join sentences I know things have been difficult for you with some of your agents having differences of phrases to add
and paragraphs opinions leading to some separation within your team8. To strengthen your department2, I detail and clarity
together (e.g.
would like to put myself forward as your organisation’s newest member12. (e. g. a state-of-
first, then,
the-art computer
after, while,
Firstly2&9, I would like to discuss my physical qualities with you8. As a ten-year-old15 girl2, or a hideous,
significantly,
you may4 underestimate my strength and physical presence – you would be wrong to do green alien with
likewise, for
a pointy nose.)
instance etc.) as so13&14. Having won the prize of ‘fastest girl’ every year at our school sports day competition16,
well as repetition my speed is one of my unquestionable strengths.5 In addition2&8, my throwing abilities
and ellipsis would4 definitely9 be another asset to C.R.E.S.T. I train weekly9 with a cricket team8 and my
11
commas for
clarity
coach (Mr Slight)13 says that I am a born fielder.7 Once2&9, the stumps were almost destroyed
3
passive verbs by my throwing power 3&8:14 they actually9 had a ball-shaped15 hole through the middle.10 Mr
(e.g. The Spanish 12
apostrophes for
Slight certainly9 thinks that I could play for England Ladies when I’m older.5 However,2 I can
team were beaten possession
by France or The think of another squad that could4 benefit from my abilities far more.
sweets were eaten
Whilst physical strength is important, any prestigious C.R.E.S.T. agent10 must4 also possess brackets, dashes
13
by the children.)
and commas for
incredible intelligence.5 My mathematical abilities are excellent16.6 Maths is an essential
parenthesis
4
modal verbs agent skill:14 it is the key to everything! In my mind2, life is just one big mathematical
(e.g. can, could, equation after another8. I’ll let you into a secret -13 my miraculous throwing skills are all
should, would,
14
semi-colons,
due to9 arithmetic. In order to make the perfect throw, I work out the following:17 the angle
etc.) dashes and
of the bounce;17 the speed of the ball;17 the strength of the wind and the point of release from colons to separate
my hand5. It’s a strike!6 clauses
5
multi-clause
sentences
If I were to be an agent in the future, I have also thought through a secret identity16 to hyphens to
15
6
single clause keep my loved ones safe and give me anonymity outside of the C.R.E.S.T. organisation8. avoid ambiguity
sentence for I would4 call myself Mathematics Master, for obvious reasons8. Some people may4 think
effect - short and that mathematics is not an impressive quality;14 others, like myself8,11&13 know what a truly9
snappy sentence
16
Y5/Y6 statutory
invaluable skill maths can be. I am hoping that any potential enemies would4 underestimate spelling words
me and my mathematical expertise, which7 would4 give me a definite advantage and allow
7
relative clauses
me to skilfully9 defeat them.
within sentences 17
colon to
starting with introduce a list
who, which, In conclusion , I hope you can see that I would be a marvellous asset to your team . I
2 4 16 8
and semi-colons
where, when, would4 relish the opportunity16 to join you at C.R.E.S.T. I hope to discuss this further with you within lists
whose and that. and I eagerly9 await a positive response.5
(e.g. My mum,
who is a great Yours sincerely16,
chef, cooked
dinner for me.) Charlotte Monroe
etc.
AKA Mathematics Master
 Y6 Letter Writing: Formal Example Text
Annotated Grammar, Punctuation and Spelling Features
All text: 8
preposition
Sparkhouse Primary School,
appropriate phrases to add
level of formality Sellorswood Road,
detail and clarity
shown Derby,
(e.g. under the
throughout the Derbyshire,
floorboards,
text: formal DE8 5LF across the room,
vocabulary and C.R.E.S.T. Recruitment Office, etc.)
sentence PO Box 543,
structure that New York,
matches the 9
adverbs and
USA
formality of the adverbials to add
text detail and clarity
(e.g. bravely,
2
a range of 13th November 2016 often, repeatedly,
linking words/ in the blink of an
phrases, Dear Agent Coulson, eye, etc.)
including
adverbials, to I am writing to you to kindly9 offer my services as part of your C.R.E.S.T. team. Recently2&9, 10
expanded noun
join sentences I know things have been difficult for you with some of your agents having differences of phrases to add
and paragraphs opinions leading to some separation within your team8. To strengthen your department2, I detail and clarity
together (e.g.
would like to put myself forward as your organisation’s newest member12. (e. g. a state-of-
first, then,
the-art computer
after, while,
Firstly2&9, I would like to discuss my physical qualities with you8. As a ten-year-old15 girl2, or a hideous,
significantly,
you may4 underestimate my strength and physical presence – you would be wrong to do green alien with
likewise, for
a pointy nose.)
instance etc.) as so13&14. Having won the prize of ‘fastest girl’ every year at our school sports day competition16,
well as repetition my speed is one of my unquestionable strengths.5 In addition2&8, my throwing abilities
and ellipsis would4 definitely9 be another asset to C.R.E.S.T. I train weekly9 with a cricket team8 and my
11
commas for
coach (Mr Slight)13 says that I am a born fielder.7 Once2&9, the stumps were almost destroyed clarity
3
passive verbs
(e.g. The Spanish by my throwing power 3&8:14 they actually9 had a ball-shaped15 hole through the middle.10 Mr
team were beaten Slight certainly9 thinks that I could play for England Ladies when I’m older.5 However,2 I can 12
apostrophes for
by France or The think of another squad that could4 benefit from my abilities far more. possession
sweets were eaten
by the children.) Whilst physical strength is important, any prestigious C.R.E.S.T. agent10 must4 also possess brackets, dashes
13

incredible intelligence.5 My mathematical abilities are excellent16.6 Maths is an essential and commas for
4
modal verbs agent skill:14 it is the key to everything! In my mind2, life is just one big mathematical parenthesis
(e.g. can, could, equation after another8. I’ll let you into a secret -13 my miraculous throwing skills are all
should, would, due to9 arithmetic. In order to make the perfect throw, I work out the following:17 the angle
14
semi-colons,
etc.) dashes and
of the bounce;17 the speed of the ball;17 the strength of the wind and the point of release from
colons to separate
my hand5. It’s a strike!6
5
multi-clause clauses
sentences
If I were to be an agent in the future, I have also thought through a secret identity16 to
hyphens to
15
6
single clause keep my loved ones safe and give me anonymity outside of the C.R.E.S.T. organisation8. I
avoid ambiguity
sentence for would4 call myself Mathematics Master, for obvious reasons8. Some people may4 think that
effect - short and mathematics is not an impressive quality;14 others, like myself8,11&13 know what a truly9
snappy sentence invaluable skill maths can be. I am hoping that any potential enemies would4 underestimate
16
Y5/Y6 statutory
spelling words
me and my mathematical expertise, which7 would4 give me a definite advantage and allow
7
relative clauses me to skilfully9 defeat them.
within sentences 17
colon to
starting with In conclusion , I hope you can see that I would be a marvellous asset to your team . I
2 4 16 8 introduce a list
who, which, would4 relish the opportunity16 to join you at C.R.E.S.T. I hope to discuss this further with and semi-colons
where, when, within lists
you and I eagerly9 await a positive response.5
whose and that.
(e.g. My mum,
who is a great Yours sincerely16,
chef, cooked
dinner for me.) Charlotte Monroe
etc. AKA Mathematics Master