The maps show improvements that have been made to a university campus between

2006 and the present day. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main
features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The given illustrations show the university campus's improvements have been made since 2006 to present day.

Overall, the university campus is changed a bit much from its origin (original) layout. More accommodates
(accommodations) has (have) been built up since they will be hold an considerably (for serving a larger) amount
(number) of students and also renewable contributions (?).

To begin, it is clear that the accommodations for students has (have) been expanded. They removed some
contributions (facilities) in order to have some spaces for the new accommodations. It is clearly to see that in the
present map, they built (build) more housing (houses) for students behind the old ones, and also replaced the
restaurant and shops with new houses. The lawn and seating area was have been deleted, just left some trees around
it. There is a new university's office on the north of the now second map.

Moving on the facility (facilities) and teaching blocks: the new facilities have (have) been built up after they
remove(d) the accommodation (which one) and place it somewhere else (where is it?); the teaching block now is
separated into two blocks, one as Science and the other for Arts.

Grammati The essay demonstrates some ability to address the task and present relevant
cal range ideas, but there are notable issues with coherence, vocabulary usage, and
and grammatical accuracy as listed above for your information. There is a lack of
accuracy specific details in covering the changes. Also, organization, sequencing, and
(GRA) connections between ideas are not highlighted due to the absence of some
linking devices (furthermore, however, ...). Some grammatical errors and lack
of sentence variety are also spotted.

Newspapers are less important nowadays because we have up-to-date access to the
news on the internet. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In recent days, the Internet is the best and most convenient ways to access to news, from regular news to the latest
ones. Many people agree that the Internet may replace newspaper(s) in providing news all around the world. From
my point of view, it is definitely (It is certain that) that the amount of people (the number of people) who read
newspapers, mostly elderly, is less common than the Internet (is less common than reading news on the Internet).

To begin with, not everyone is able to buy a newspaper immediately or because of their needs (due to their needs);
therefore, between choosing which via to access the news (which way to access the news) at the moment, the
Internet will be the better choice over newspaper(s). For example, it is clearly (clear) to see that a majority of
teenagers and adults usually use the Internet (the majority of teenagers and adults usually use the Internet) to search
for information or read news from some social websites. As a result, Internet has created a favourable condition to
access the news for us, way faster than newspapers (much faster than newspapers).

In addition, due to their financial does not similar to each other (due to their dissimilar financial situations), some
individuals have a luxuriance (luxurious) lifestyle can be able to afford weekly newspapers but for the rest who just
earn enough to live is an obstacle for them (poses an obstacle for them). For instance, since the Internet provide(s)
free information, they prefer taking advantage of social media (taking advantage of social media) to wasting money
buying a newspaper. As a consequence (As a consequence), in order to be provided news, most of ages they
consider the Internet (most people consider the Internet) as an economical and convenient way to look for news.

In conclusion, the Internet has been improved and because of its special features, people start using it to approve the
news instead of the newspaper. For these reasons, newspapers might be replaced in the near future.

In many societies in the world, the population is ageing rapidly and this is leading to an
unsustainable increase in the cost of public healthcare. A nation’s population should pay
for their healthcare provision in the future.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The debate on choosing between public and private healthcare system, which will bring more benefits to users, is
ongoing and complex (grammar) since both of them do have their unique advantages and disadvantages sides, and
this essay will analyze them.

To begin with, the primary benefit of publicly funded health service is that ensures that every citizens, despite
their out-of-pocket or heath status, will be provided with the same heath treatments whenever they got themselves
sickness (word choice) and not covered by health insurance. For instance, some public hospital organize
inexpensive vaccine sessions, allowing people easy access to healthcare.

However, there are some issues associated with government provided health service. First, public healthcare is
provided for a large amount number of patients, meaning that getting to wait for treatment in queues is unavoidable,
causing annoying and time-consuming (cause + N). Besides, dependence on the funds from governments may
deprive patients of their right to choose how they will be treated. Another problem is that some people will overuse
the healthcare facilities; thereby, placing more pressure on taxpayer.

Moving on the private system of healthcare, from my perspective, this type of treatment is more efficient and
well-being caring as qualified facilities. Patients who use private services have various choice on which type of
healthcare they will take. In addition, its waiting lists is shorter than the public one and get more advances from
experts.

Nevertheless, private service is extremely expensive for the poor to accessible, which may lead to health
disparities and unequal treatments.

In conclusion, public service can be afforded by most pockets users??? but it provides limited treatments. By
contrast, the private system can be much more expensive although it can offer faster service and specialized care.

Grammatic The essay addresses the prompt by stating a clear opinion and providing
al range reasons to support it. The arguments are somewhat developed, but they lack
and depth and thorough analysis. There are grammatical errors throughout the
 accuracy essay, including verb tense errors, subject-verb agreement issues, and
(GRA) incorrect word choices, which have been illustrated in the essay above.

In many societies in the world, the population is ageing rapidly and this is leading to an
unsustainable increase in the cost of public healthcare. A nation’s population should pay
for their healthcare provision in the future.
To what extent do you agree or disagree?

The debate on choosing between public and private healthcare system, which will bring more benefits to users, is
ongoing and complex (grammar) since both of them do have their unique advantages and disadvantages, and this
essay will analyze them.

To begin with, the primary benefit of publicly funded health service is that it ensures that every citizen, despite
their out-of-pocket or health status, will be provided with the same heath treatments whenever they got themselves
sickness (word choice) and not covered by health insurance. For instance, some public hospitals organize
inexpensive vaccine sessions, allowing people easy access to healthcare.

However, there are some issues associated with government provided health service. First, public healthcare is
provided for a large amount number of patients, meaning that getting to wait for treatment in queues is unavoidable,
causing annoying and time-consuming (cause + N). Besides, dependence on the funds from governments may
deprive patients of their right to choose how they will be treated. Another problem is that some people will overuse
the healthcare facilities; thereby, placing more pressure on taxpayers.

Moving on the private system of healthcare, from my perspective, this type of treatment is more efficient and
well-being caring as qualified facilities. Patients who use private services have various choices on which type of
healthcare they will take. In addition, its waiting list is shorter than the public one and gets more advances from
experts.

Nevertheless, private service is extremely expensive for the poor to access, which may lead to health disparities
and unequal treatments.

In conclusion, public service can be afforded by most pockets users??? but it provides limited treatments. By
contrast, the private system can be much more expensive although it can offer faster service and specialized care.

The chart below shows the movement of people from rural to urban areas in three
countries and predictions for 2025.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make
comparisons where relevant.
The given line charts illustrated the amount number of people who migrated from rural to urban areas in three
countries between 2000 and 2025, including future predictions.

Overall, it is evident that country A and country C do have had the most the most significant increase in the number
of people who is moving to cities in the period of 25 years from 2000 while the country B has a steadily raising rise.

According to the graph, country A hold a beneficial start point started at … and through over 20 years, its
percentages??? of migrants grew significantly, reaching …. Although the predictable and rapidly results??? from
country A, country C has proved from year to year that its percentages of people migrated were dramatically rising
and end up with an unpredictable outcome that reach nearly the country A in 2020. In addition, the predictions
indicated that in the year of 2025, country C will surpass country A in the race.

Moving on to country B which has the lowest rates of migrants since its rising modestly through years and can be
easily predicted the slight results in 2025.

The maps below show the changes that took place at a science and technology museum
between 1996 and 2016.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make
comparisons where relevant.
 The given illustrations show the development of a science and technology museum from 1996 to 2016.

Overall, it is clear that the places and facilities has changed considerably throughout the years.

To begin with, a new parking lot for bicycles has been built up behind the car park. Above In front of the parking
lots, while there used to be a blank courtyard for trees, it had been flattened and added two new facilities, a VR
room and an area for solar wind had been added by 2016. On the top left corner, although there was a the
demolition of the writing desks had made room for the construction of a zone for computers has been put up, next to
a The library had been relocated to the right to the computer room.

Moreover, an Another significant alteration to the museum was the has been applied to the replacement of the old
print room with a digital technology room which full-filled of modern gadgets and a located 3D cinema in front of
it. Although there are also some renovations for the cafe and the diesel engine exhibition, the steam engine
exhibition still remains unchanged.

Task achievement/ Task you have addressed the key changes to the museum, but it
response (TA/TR) is better to group these into categories

The bar chart below illustrates five different industries’ percentage share of Country B’s
economy in 2005 and 2015 with a forecast for 2025.
Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make
comparisons where relevant.
 The given bar chart presents percentages of five economical industries individually in the period of 10 years from
2005, coming with a prediction for the year 2025.

Overall, a clear trend in the figures is that the finance industrial has the most contribution over the others
industries; therefore, a prediction about its rising in 2025 is made.

To begin with, what stands out is the noticeable proportion of distribution of the finance industrial since its
steadily rising over decade. Turning next to the industry of manufacturing, there is a decreasing from 20% to 15%
and will continue to reach lower than 10%. By contrast, the industry of tourism has declined to 20% in 2015 and
will rise steadily for another decade.

Moving on, in terms of food processing and oil, coal and gas, although there is an analogy about the development
of contribution between the two industries, the oil, coal and gas industrial has more significant percentage when it
has reached 30% since 2015.

Suggestions to Improve the Writing:

Introduction Improvement:

Original: "The given bar chart presents percentages of five economical industries individually in the period of
10 years from 2005, coming with a prediction for the year 2025."
Improved: "The bar chart illustrates the percentage contribution of five economic industries to Country B's
economy in 2005 and 2015, along with a forecast for 2025."
Overall Trends:

Original: "Overall, a clear trend in the figures is that the finance industrial has the most contribution over the
others industries; therefore, a prediction about its rising in 2025 is made."
Improved: "Overall, the finance industry consistently contributes the most to the economy and is projected to
increase further by 2025."
Detailed Observations:

Original: "To begin with, what stands out is the noticeable propotion of distribution of the finance industrial
since its steadily rising over decade."
Improved: "The finance industry stands out with its steady increase over the decades, rising from 31% in 2005
to 36% in 2015, and is projected to reach 41% by 2025."
Declines and Comparisons:

Original: "Turning next to the industry of manufacturing, there is a decreasing from 20% to 15% and will
continue to reach lower than 10%."
Improved: "The manufacturing industry decreased from around 21% in 2005 to 16% in 2015 and is expected to
drop further to 5% by 2025."
Tourism Sector:

Original: "By contrast, the industry of tourism has declined to 20% in 2015 and will rise steadily for another
decade."
Improved: "By contrast, tourism declined from 26% in 2005 to 21% in 2015, with a forecast to remain at this
level in 2025."
Other Sectors:

Original: "Moving on, in terms of food processing and oil, coal and gas, although there is an analogy about the
development of contribution between the two industries, the oil, coal and gas industrial has more significant
percentage when it has reached 30% since 2015."
Improved: "Both the food processing and oil, coal, and gas industries show similar trends. Food processing
started at 10% in 2005, peaked at 21% in 2015, and is projected to return to 10% by 2025. The oil, coal, and
gas sector started at 25%, peaked at 31% in 2015, and is expected to revert to 25% by 2025."

Coherence and Band 6 The structure is logical, but transitions between ideas need
cohesion (CC) improvement. The writing has some unclear sentences and awkward
phrasing.

Task Band 6 The candidate summarizes the main features but lacks detail and
achievement/ specific data points. Some points are not accurately described, and the
Task response forecast for 2025 is not fully detailed.
(TA/TR)

Lexical resource Band 6 Vocabulary is adequate but repetitive. Some phrases are unclear
(LR) or incorrect, such as "finance industrial" and "an analogy about the
development."

Grammatical Band 6 There are several grammatical errors and awkward sentence
range and structures. More complex sentence structures are needed for a higher
accuracy (GRA) band score.

Fewer students are studying science at school and university, favouring more computer-
based subjects instead.
Is this a positive or negative development? What are the reasons for this?

In terms of education, science has no longer been favored by most students, instead, they are interested in
computer-based subjects. I believe this development brings more positive effects than its negative sides and the
reasons for this issue will be explained in these paragraphs below.

One of the main reasons leading to the prefer of computing subject to science is the changing of interest at young
generation. Being able to access conveniently to computer-based field, they are influenced by recent technology and
found it more appealing and relevant than science. In addition, applying for computer-based careers often comes
along with high salaries and job security since throughout years, technology has developed and become one of the
necessaries of life and cannot be dismissed easily.

From my perspective, although there are some drawbacks of this development, many positive aspects are exposed
in our life. For instance, students who choose this field is required professional skills in computer science, data
analysis and other information technology knowledges. Although most of them are difficult to acknowledge,
students will get themselves satisfying with future and current job market trends and ensuring about employment
because of the equipment of hard skills. Moreover, computer-based subject has reared many professions who plays
an important role in contribution with their noticeable innovations, modernizing our world to be better.

In conclusion, despite the lack of interest in science that appears recently and students are more fond of
computer-based subject, it is still a positive development, our world has been modernized and turned into more
convenient by computer's technology.

Assessment of the Student's Essay

Band Score: 5.5

Task Response: 6.0

Strengths:
The essay provides a clear opinion that the shift towards computer-based subjects is more positive than
negative.
It discusses reasons for this trend and provides some examples.
Weaknesses:
The response lacks depth in discussing both the positive and negative aspects of the trend. The essay
mentions drawbacks but does not elaborate on them.
The examples provided are somewhat general and could be more specific to strengthen the argument.

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.5

Strengths:
The essay has a basic structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
Weaknesses:
There are issues with cohesion, particularly in sentence transitions and linking ideas. The flow of the
essay is hindered by awkward phrasing and a lack of varied linking words.
Some sentences are disjointed, making it difficult to follow the argument clearly.

Lexical Resource: 5.5

Strengths:
The essay demonstrates an attempt to use topic-related vocabulary.
Weaknesses:
There are several word choice errors and awkward phrases (e.g., "the prefer of computing subject,"
"necessaries of life," "students will get themselves satisfying").
The vocabulary is limited and lacks precision, with some repetition and incorrect word forms (e.g.,
"knowledges" should be "knowledge").

Grammatical Range and Accuracy: 5.0

Strengths:
The essay includes a mix of simple and compound sentences.
Weaknesses:
There are frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-verb agreement ("students... they
interested"), article usage ("a positive development, our world"), and incorrect sentence structures.
These errors often impede clarity and understanding.
Suggestions to Upgrade to Band 7.0:

Task Response:

Develop Both Sides: To achieve a higher band score, ensure that both the positive and negative aspects of the
trend are discussed in more depth. Provide specific examples and explain how these developments impact
different fields.
Expand the Introduction: Clarify the introduction by clearly stating what will be discussed in the essay. This
will set up the reader's expectations more effectively.
Coherence and Cohesion:

Improve Transitions: Use a wider range of linking words and phrases to improve the flow between sentences
and paragraphs. For example, use "On the other hand," "Moreover," "As a result," to connect ideas more
smoothly.
Avoid Repetition: Work on avoiding repetitive phrases and sentence structures. Varying your sentence
beginnings and using synonyms can help with this.
Lexical Resource:

Expand Vocabulary: Focus on using more varied and precise vocabulary. For example, instead of "necessaries
of life," you could say "essentials of modern life." Also, correct any incorrect word forms (e.g.,
"knowledges" should be "knowledge").
Use Collocations: Practice using more natural collocations (e.g., "job security," "professional skills") to make
your writing sound more fluent.
Grammatical Range and Accuracy:

Review Basic Grammar: Focus on improving subject-verb agreement, article usage, and sentence structure. For
instance, "students are interested" instead of "students... they interested" and "it is still a positive
development" instead of "it still a positive development."
Proofread for Errors: After writing, carefully proofread your essay to catch and correct grammatical mistakes.
This will help improve clarity and reduce errors.

Coherence 5.5 Strengths: The essay has a basic structure with an introduction, body paragraphs,
and and a conclusion. Weaknesses: There are issues with cohesion, particularly in
cohesion sentence transitions and linking ideas. The flow of the essay is hindered by awkward
(CC) phrasing and a lack of varied linking words. Some sentences are disjointed, making it
difficult to follow the argument clearly.

Task 6.0 Strengths: The essay provides a clear opinion that the shift towards computer-
achieveme based subjects is more positive than negative. It discusses reasons for this trend and
nt/ Task provides some examples. Weaknesses: The response lacks depth in discussing both
response the positive and negative aspects of the trend. The essay mentions drawbacks but
(TA/TR) does not elaborate on them. The examples provided are somewhat general and could
be more specific to strengthen the argument.

Lexical 5.5 Strengths: The essay demonstrates an attempt to use topic-related vocabulary.
resource Weaknesses: There are several word choice errors and awkward phrases (e.g., "the
(LR) prefer of computing subject," "necessaries of life," "students will get themselves
satisfying"). The vocabulary is limited and lacks precision, with some repetition and
incorrect word forms (e.g., "knowledges" should be "knowledge").
Grammatic 5.0 Strengths: The essay includes a mix of simple and compound sentences.
al range Weaknesses: There are frequent grammatical errors, including issues with subject-
and verb agreement ("students... they interested"), article usage ("a positive
accuracy development, our world"), and incorrect sentence structures. These errors often
(GRA) impede clarity and understanding.