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Headline: City’s Water Supply to be Interrupted on Tuesday

Lead:
Residents in several parts of the city will experience water service interruptions on
Tuesday due to scheduled maintenance on the main water pipeline, according to the
City Water Department. The affected areas include Barangay 5, Barangay 6, and parts
of Barangay 7. The water service interruption will begin at 9 AM and is expected to
last until 3 PM.

Body:
The water service interruptions are part of the City Water Department's regular
maintenance plan. Residents are advised to store sufficient water before the
interruption. The city government has also set up water stations where affected
residents can get clean water for essential use. City officials emphasized the
importance of the maintenance to prevent future disruptions and ensure the quality of
the water supply.

Water department representative Maria Gomez said, “These maintenance activities


are necessary to maintain the city's aging pipeline system. We apologize for the
inconvenience but believe this work will help avoid bigger problems down the line.”

Last year, the city faced a similar water interruption during pipeline repairs, and the
residents are advised to prepare accordingly.

Copy Reading Guide Applied:

1. Ensure Accuracy:

 Fact-check:
o Ensure that the timing of the water interruption (9 AM to 3 PM on Tuesday) is
accurate.
o Verify the affected areas (Barangay 5, Barangay 6, and parts of Barangay 7) with the
official notice from the City Water Department.
o Confirm Maria Gomez’s title and the accuracy of her quote.
 Answer: All facts (time, areas, and water service interruptions) match the official water
department notice, and Maria Gomez is confirmed as the representative. No changes
needed.

2. Review for Clarity:

Lead: The lead is clear and provides essential details about the event.
However, it could benefit from specifying which Tuesday to avoid confusion
(for example, whether it’s this week or next week).



Answer: Change the lead to: Residents in several parts of the city will
experience water service interruptions this coming Tuesday, October 25, due
to scheduled maintenance... Adding the date clarifies which Tuesday is being
referenced.

3. Correct Grammar and Punctuation:

Tense Consistency: The article uses the correct future tense to describe the
scheduled interruption.


Punctuation: The sentence “The city government has also set up water
stations where affected residents can get clean water for essential use.” could
benefit from a comma before the clause “where affected residents can get
clean water...” for readability.


Answer: Change to: “The city government has also set up water stations,
where affected residents can get clean water for essential use.”

4. Style Consistency:

Numbers: The article uses both "5" and "6" for barangays. According to AP
Style, spell out numbers under 10.


Answer: Change “Barangay 5” and “Barangay 6” to “Barangay Five” and


“Barangay Six” for consistency.


Quotes: The article handles quotes correctly, placing punctuation inside the
quotation marks. No changes needed here.


5. Correct and Verify Quotes:

Verification: The quote from Maria Gomez is confirmed and accurately


reflects the context of the story.


Answer: The quote is correct and adds value to the article. No changes
required.

6. Structure and Balance:

The article follows a standard news structure (inverted pyramid). The lead
provides the essential information, followed by the body with more details
about the water interruption and the quote from the representative.


Answer: The article flows well. No additional restructuring needed.

7. Check for Redundancies:

The sentence “Residents are advised to store sufficient water before the
interruption” is repeated in similar terms later: “The residents are advised to
prepare accordingly.” These two sentences could be merged for conciseness.


Answer: Merge the sentences: "Residents are advised to store sufficient water
and prepare accordingly before the interruption."

8. Ensure Proper Flow:


The article transitions smoothly from the lead into details about the water
interruption and then offers solutions (such as water stations). No abrupt
jumps or gaps.


Answer: No changes needed. Flow is good.

9. Ethical Considerations:

The article is straightforward and contains no defamatory statements or


unnecessary sensationalism. It is purely informational and neutral.


Answer: No ethical concerns are present.

10. Double-Check Headlines, Subheadings, and Captions:

Headline: The headline could be more specific about the reason for the water
interruption.


Answer: Suggested headline: Water Supply to be Interrupted in Three


Barangays Due to Pipeline Maintenance on Tuesday

11. Review for Length and Space:

The article is concise and provides the necessary details without excess
information.



Answer: No trimming needed; the article is well within word limits for a
standard news piece.

12. Proofread:

The article is free from spelling errors, and capitalization is used correctly
throughout (e.g., “City Water Department”).


Answer: The article passes proofreading.

Edited Version of the Article:

Headline:
Water Supply to be Interrupted in Three Barangays Due to Pipeline Maintenance on
Tuesday

Lead:
Residents in several parts of the city will experience water service interruptions this
coming Tuesday, October 25, due to scheduled maintenance on the main water
pipeline, according to the City Water Department. The affected areas include
Barangay Five, Barangay Six, and parts of Barangay Seven. The water service
interruption will begin at 9 AM and is expected to last until 3 PM.

Body:
The water service interruptions are part of the City Water Department's regular
maintenance plan. Residents are advised to store sufficient water and prepare
accordingly before the interruption. The city government has also set up water
stations, where affected residents can get clean water for essential use. City officials
emphasized the importance of the maintenance to prevent future disruptions and
ensure the quality of the water supply.

City Water Department representative Maria Gomez said, “These maintenance


activities are necessary to maintain the city's aging pipeline system. We apologize for
the inconvenience but believe this work will help avoid bigger problems down the
line.”

Last year, the city faced a similar water interruption during pipeline repairs, and
residents are advised to prepare accordingly.

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