Nagham
Nagham
ENGL 103A
20 February2024
Angelina Jolie is an American actress, film marketer, humanitarian and she has been
named Hollywood's highest - paid actress multiple times and goodwill ambassador. And those
characteristics make her my role model. Jolie first witnessed the effects of a humanitarian crisis
while filming “ Lara Croft “ (2001) in war-torn Cambodia, an experience she later credited with
having brought her a greater understanding of the world. First, jolie was named a( UNHCR)
Goodwill Ambassador at( UNHCR) headquarters in Geneva in 2001. Secondly, Jolie founded
and continues to fund the National Center for Refugee and Immigrant Children, which provides
free legal aid to young asylum seekers in the United States. She created Kids in Need of Defense,
formed in partnership with Microsoft, which helps children who enter the U.S. immigration
honors:Joliehonors: Jolie has received wide recognition for her humanitarian work. In August
2002, she received the inaugural Humanitarian Award from the Church World Service's
Immigration and Refugee Program, and in October 2003, she was the first recipient of the
Association.jolieAssociation. Jolie with a gold pin reserved for the most long-serving staff, in
Angelina Jolie helped adults, children, refugees, orphans, and black people she is credited with
having brought a greater understanding of the world with her humanitarian work. It makes me
world and make it better , so all of that makes her my role model.
Content & Points
Points
Description Earned
1. Topic Sentence: 1.5 not
Exceptionally engaging introduction that clearly introduces the 2 totally
chosen role model and the purpose of the paragraph. correct
2. Body and Supporting Details:
Rich and detailed supporting examples that effectively illustrate and 6 4
emphasize the role model's positive qualities or actions.
3. Concluding Sentence:
Thoughtful and conclusive summary that reinforces the main points 2 1
and leaves a lasting impression.
4. Language Mechanics and Format:
The paragraph is free from grammatical and mechanical errors. (3)
MLA format (2) 5 3
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7.5