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Scope and sequence

Unit Title & Academic Topic Vocabulary  Models

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Academic Vocabulary • Writing in the Real World:
Introduction to the Academic Collocations “Going Off the Grid: Why More People
Essay Are Choosing to Live Life Unplugged”
• Student Model:
Environmental Studies: Green “The Positive Impact of Bike-Share
Living  page 13 Programs”

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Academic Vocabulary • Writing in the Real World:
 omparison and
C Academic Phrases “The Trouble with Talent: Are We Born
Contrast Essays 1 Smart or Do We Get Smart?”
• Student Model:
Education: Approaches to “Learning Two Skills”
Learning  page 43

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Academic Vocabulary • Writing in the Real World:
Comparison and Academic Collocations “Resilience Is About Relationships, Not Just
Contrast Essays 2 Infrastructure”
• Student Model:
Sociology: Communities and “Changes in My Community”
Relationships  page 73

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Academic Vocabulary • Writing in the Real World:
Cause and Effect Essays Academic Phrases “Generation Overshare”
• Student Model:
Technology: Sharing
“The Positive Side of Online Sharing”
Online  page 103

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Academic Vocabulary • Writing in the Real World:
Summary Essays Academic Collocations “Mindful Eating: How to Think More and
Eat Less”
Health: Balanced Lifestyles 
• Student Model:
page 137
“Summary of ‘A Tax on Unhealthy Foods’”

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Academic Vocabulary • Writing in the Real World:
Summary–Response Academic Phrases “Bilingualism Good for the Brain,
Essays Researchers Say”
• Student Model:
Behavioral Science: Language “Assimilation Does Not Mean Losing My
and Culture  page 163 Culture”

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Academic Vocabulary • Writing in the Real World:
Argumentative Essays 1 Academic Collocations “Diversity Leads to Economic Growth”
• Student Model:
Economics: Demographics and
“Why We Need More Women in
the Economy  page 197
Technology Jobs”

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Academic Vocabulary • Writing in the Real World:
Argumentative Essays 2 Academic Phrases “Unrelenting Population Growth Driving
Global Warming, Mass Extinction”
Global Studies: Issues in
• Student Model:
Globalization  page 229
“Time to Rethink Our Consumer Society”

All academic vocabulary words appear on the Academic Word List (AWL) or the General Service List (GSL). All academic
collocations, academic phrases, and common grammar mistakes are based on the Cambridge Academic Corpus.

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Writing Skills Grammar for Writing  Avoiding Plagiarism
Thesis statements and writing prompts Infinitives Recognizing plagiarism

Words and phrases that show differences That clauses Strategies for paraphrasing

Words and phrases that show comparison Identifying relative clauses What is common
Avoiding sentence fragments knowledge?

Phrases that show cause and effect Real conditionals Citing sources
Parallel structure
Paragraph unity

Purpose, audience, and tone Reporting verbs Evaluating Internet sources

Coherence 1: Transition words and Passive voice Taking effective notes


phrases
Coherence 2: Ways to connect ideas
across sentences

Avoiding run-ons and comma splices Reduced relative clauses Strategies for managing
your time

Avoiding faulty logic Modals for hedging Synthesizing information


Sentence variety

Scope and Sequence 5


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Introduction to
the Essay
Environmental Studies: Green Living

“I feel more confident


than ever that the
power to save the
planet rests with the
individual consumer.”
Denis Hayes (1944–)

About the Author:


Denis Hayes is an
Work with a partner. Read the quotation about protecting the environmental activist. He
environment. Then answer the questions. was the main organizer of
the first Earth Day in 1970.
1 What does Hayes mean when he says that the individual consumer
can save the planet?
2 What are some things that people do every day that are harmful to
the environment?
3 What is something that you could do to help the environment?

Introduction to the Essay 13


1 prEpArE your IDEAS

A Connect to Academic Writing


In this unit, you will learn skills for writing clear, well-organized academic essays. While some
of the skills you will use may be new, others are not. Writing essays requires you to explain and
organize your ideas in a clear and logical way. You do this in everyday life, too. For example,
you use similar skills to consider the advantages and disadvantages of two different careers or to
describe an experience you have had in your life.

B Reflect on the Topic


In this section, you will choose a writing prompt and reflect on it. You will develop these ideas
throughout the unit and use them to practice skills that are necessary to write your essay.
The writing prompt below was used for the Student Model essay on pages 20–21. After
reflecting on her topic, the student decided to make a list to generate ideas. This helped her
think of a possible thesis statement.

WRITING PROMPT: There are many programs and laws that cities have introduced to reduce
pollution. These include banning plastic bags, starting bike-share programs, and creating green
spaces. Choose one program or law that you are familiar with and give reasons why it is good
for people and communities.

Reasons for a Bike-Share Program

more freedom
no looking for parking!
never get stuck in traffic
save money
convenient to travel around city
feel safer because more people everywhere
fun – I go more places

Possible thesis statement: A bike-share program is good for a city and people because it
saves money and the city is safer and more fun.

1.1 Notice
Work with a partner. Discuss how someone’s life would change if he or she rode a bike
rather than drove a car.

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1.2 Apply It to Your Writing
Follow the directions to reflect on your topic.

A Choose a prompt:
• Choose a product that is not good for the environment, such as plastic bags or paper
towels. Write three reasons why people should stop using them.
• Describe a green place, such as a park, where you live. Describe how people use
the space.
• Imagine that your town or city wants to start a program to improve the city, such as a
bike-sharing program, a car-sharing program, or a program to create more green spaces.
Choose one and tell how it would affect the quality of life.
• A topic approved by your instructor

B Complete the following tasks:


1 Reflect on the topic and make a list.
2 Write a possible thesis statement.
3 Compare lists and possible thesis statements with a partner.

Possible thesis statement:

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2 EXPAND YOUR KNOWLEDGE

In this section, you will learn academic language that you can use in your academic essay.
You will also notice how a professional writer uses this language.

A Academic Vocabulary
The words below appear throughout the unit. Many are from the Academic Word List. Using
these words in your writing will make your ideas clearer and your writing more academic.

basis (n) cooperation (n) source (n) supply (n)


community (n) scope (n) sufficient (adj) transition (n)

2.1 Focus on Meaning


Match the words in bold with their definitions. Write the letters.

A
1 The scope of a problem such as pollution is large. a the people in a particular
It involves many complex social, economic, and area or who share interests
scientific issues. or background
2 We want the recycling program to succeed, so b enough
the entire community must participate.
3 The government and the citizens are working on c the range or area of
ways to solve the problem of air pollution. This something
cooperation is necessary.
4 There is sufficient research that recycling is d the process of people
effective. It is has been shown to reduce negative working together
effects on the environment.

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B
1 Making the transition from oil to solar energy a origin
is expensive because people have to buy
equipment.
2 Solar energy is a good source of power because it b the process of change
comes from the sun.
3 The supply of oil in the world is limited, and we c the facts or beliefs that
will run out of it one day. support a claim or idea
4 The basis for the argument is that recycling d the amount of something
reduces land pollution. that is available for use

B Academic Collocations
Collocations are words that are frequently used together. Research tells us that the academic
vocabulary in Part A is commonly used in the collocations in bold below.

2.2 Focus on Meaning


Work with a partner. Circle the correct meanings.
1 “Simple living” includes a wide scope of actions. These actions range from recycling to
growing your own food. Wide scope means
a a small range. b a large range.
2 Car sharing helps people in a community get to know each other better, and it gives them a
sense of community. A sense of community is
a the feeling of being connected to others. b the feeling of pride.
3 The water supply in the community has improved in recent years. However, many people
still do not have enough clean, safe water. The water supply is
a the water available to a community. b the water that is sold in stores.
4 There is a limited supply of oil in the world. However, there is plenty of solar energy because
it comes from the sun. A limited supply is
a poor quality of something. b an amount of something that is not large.
5 We can improve the environment every day. For example, we can save energy on a daily
basis if we unplug appliances and turn off lights when we leave the house each day. On a
daily basis means
a occasionally. b every day.

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C Writing in the Real World
The author of “Going Off the Grid: Why People Are Choosing to Live Life Unplugged” uses
features of academic essays to present his ideas in an organized way that is convincing and
interesting.
Before you read, answer these questions: Look at the title. What do you think it means to “live
life unplugged”? Why do you think some people want to live very simply?
Now read the article. Think about your answers to the questions above as you read.

by John Platt

goIng oFF thE grID:


Why More people Are Choosing to
Live Life unplugged (adapted)

1 Imagine living off the land. See yourself 2 Although a desire to go green isn’t always
growing your own food, producing your the top reason for people going off-grid, the
own energy, and getting away from the lifestyle has many environmental benefits.
consumption economy1 that influences so For one thing, most off-grid homes or
many of our decisions. For more and more communities are in places where nature
people, this simple lifestyle, called off-grid plays an important part of their everyday
living, has become a real option. Although lives. Many people in these communities
statistics on Americans who choose off-grid want to make sure they treat their
living are unavailable, trends suggest that environment with respect. And they want
the number is increasing. Some people do the choices that they make on a daily basis
it to be self-reliant2 or more in touch with to help the environment rather than hurt it.
nature. Others do it on the basis that there In these communities, people often convert
is a limited supply of traditional energy, from oil to solar power for regular home
such as oil. Still others do it because it is heating or bike rather than drive to reduce
the best financial option available to them. the use of gasoline. Making the transition
For people who want to get away from from traditional energy to a renewable
today’s consumerist society or help protect source may take getting used to at first,
the environment, living off-grid can be an but many in off-grid communities are
attractive option. willing to sacrifice for the chance to make a
positive impact on the environment.
1
consumption economy: economy that relies on consumer
spending
2
self-reliant: capable of relying on oneself rather than
others

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3 For others, living off-grid is a rejection of on eBay and moved themselves into a trailer.
consumerism.3 “Going off the grid is not a game,” And they find themselves living a more
says Nick Rosen, founder of the Off-Grid website. ecological lifestyle just by the fact that they’re
“It is real life and a real choice for real people.” generating their own electricity and growing
And many of these people are starting to ask their own food, but they were motivated by
themselves, “How much do we really need?” financial matters rather than by a more pure
They reject overly large homes in favor of small desire to tread more lightly6 on the planet.”
homes based on the idea that we are less happy So, financial concerns also play a role in
when we have a lot more than we need. They many people’s decision to live off the grid.
feel overconsumption leads to being less grateful
5 The scope of the off-grid movement is
for what we do have. And doing something
not fully known. However, we do know
like buying a smaller home also fits into the
what motivates many off-grid community
environmentally friendly lifestyle because smaller
members – the desire to protect the
homes require less energy for heating and cooling.
environment, to be self-reliant, to embrace
4 For others, going off-grid is an economic simple living, and sometimes to live more
necessity because they have faced economic economically. For many of these members,
hardships,4 and many have lost their own homes. the benefits outweigh the inconveniences of
They end up living a more eco-friendly5 lifestyle giving up some of the features of a modern
because they need to reduce electric bills or grow life – using as much oil and electricity as you
their own food to survive. Rosen reports, “A lot of want or buying prepackaged food. Living off
the people I met when I was traveling around the the grid might not be for everyone, but the
States writing my book were people who had to lifestyle of people who do so certainly gives
hand back the keys to their properties and find a us all something to consider.
new lifestyle. In one case they bought some land
3
consumerism: culture where people focus a lot on buying things tread more lightly: speak or behave carefully to avoid
6
4
economic hardships: economic suffering upsetting anyone or causing harm
5
eco-friendly: good for the environment

2.3 Check Your Understanding


Answer the questions.
1 What are the main reasons people want to live in off-grid communities?
2 How would you explain the benefits of off-grid living to someone who has never heard of
it before?
3 How would you feel about living in an off-grid community?

2.4 Notice the Features of Essay Writing


Answer the questions.
1 Look at the first two sentences in the introductory paragraph. How does the author get the
reader’s attention?
2 In which sentence in the introductory paragraph does the writer tell us what he will discuss
in the rest of the essay?
3 Look at paragraphs 2, 3, and 4. What is their purpose?

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3 STUDY ACADEMIC WRITING

In Section 1, you saw how the writer of the Student Model essay reflected on her topic. In this
section, you will analyze the final draft of her academic essay. You will learn how to structure
your ideas for your own essay.

A Student Model
Read the writing prompt again and answer the questions.
WRITING PROMPT: There are many programs and laws that cities have introduced to reduce
pollution. These include banning plastic bags, starting bike-share programs, and creating green
spaces. Choose one program or law that you are familiar with and give reasons why it is good
for people and communities.
1 Read the title of the essay. What will the writer discuss?
2 What reasons might the writer mention?

Read the essay twice. The first time, think about your answers to the questions above.
The second time, answer the questions in the Analyze Writing Skills boxes. This will help
you notice key features of academic essays.

1 Analyze Writing Skills


The Positive Impact of Bike-Share Programs
In paragraph 1, the first
1 In my community, people talk about the smog1 more than they talk sentence gets the reader
interested in the topic of
about the weather. Recently, the mayor urged people to give up their cars the essay. Circle the type
of sentence that it is.
and use public transportation or the new bike-share program to decrease
a a question
air pollution. I use the bike-share program a lot to get to school and b an interesting
statement
work, and I really like it. I heard on the news that it is working well and
c a quotation
that there are fewer cars on the streets. I know that sometimes cars are
a necessity, but the problem of smog is serious because it has a negative 2 Analyze Writing Skills
In paragraph 1, underline
effect on people’s health and the quality of life2 in the city. A bike-share the sentence that gives
program is good for cities and the people who live there because it is the three ideas, or points,
that the writer will discuss
a convenient way to travel, it improves life in the city, and it makes in the essay.
people healthier.
2 First, a bike-share program is easy for people to use. Commuters who
travel to the city can ride around and go wherever they want. They do
3 Analyze Writing Skills
not have to rely on the schedules of buses and trains. Driving a car is also
In paragraph 2, underline
difficult because of traffic. In addition, bike stations are everywhere, so it the two sentences that
explain and support why
is usually easy to find and park a bike. One problem sometimes is that the a bike-share is easy for
people to use.
supply of bikes is less than the demand3 for them. That was a problem in
my city. However, we now have an app that tells where there are available
1
smog: smoke that is mixed with fog (thick cloud)
2
quality of life: amount of comfort and satisfaction that someone feels about their life
3
demand: number of people who want to have something

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bikes, so people do not have to spend time searching for one. Therefore,
the bike-share program is more convenient than buses and other kinds of
transportation.
3 In addition, a bike-share program makes a city more enjoyable and 4 Analyze Writing Skills
safer. If many people use bikes, there are fewer cars and less traffic and In paragraph 3, underline
the two words that
noise. People feel comfortable when they travel around, so they spend more introduce the idea that
the writer will discuss in
time enjoying the city. Maybe it will attract more tourists, and this is good the paragraph. Then
for the city, too. Also, when there are many people around, the city feels circle the purpose of the
two words.
less dangerous. I come home from work late at night. When there was no a to introduce an opinion
bike-share, I felt a little scared when I walked home. Now I see more people b to explain an idea

riding bikes in my neighborhood, and I feel less afraid. The bike-share has c to introduce the next
idea
made the city more comfortable and fun.
5 Analyze Writing Skills
4 The best reason for having a bike-share is its positive effects on people’s
Circle the sentence below
health. When people bike on a daily basis, they exercise their whole that best expresses the
topic of paragraph 4.
body every day. I ride at least five miles a day, so I know my heart
a Biking gives people
and lungs are strong. Also, biking is a good source of energy. energy.
b Some people lose
I work and go to school, but I still feel energetic. I think it is
weight when they
because I use the bike-share. Finally, exercise can reduce stress, use the bike-share
regularly.
too, and students who work and go to college often feel a lot of
c Biking improves
stress. Clearly, a bike-share improves people’s health. people’s health.

5 In conclusion, a bike-share program not only helps the 6 Analyze Writing Skills
environment, it makes a city easier to get around, makes a city more What is the purpose
of the first sentence in
pleasant, and makes people feel and look better. I think that paragraph 5?
bike-share programs are an amazing way to get back our blue skies a to introduce a new
idea
and to enjoy our lives. b to give the writer’s
opinion
c to remind the reader
of the writer’s main
points in the essay

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3.1 Check Your Understanding
Answer the questions.
1 What is the essay about?
2 Which reason is the most convincing or important in your opinion? Explain.
3 How do you feel about bike-share programs?

3.2 Outline the Writer’s Ideas


Complete the outline for “The Positive Impact of Bike-Share Programs.” Write the thesis
statement. Then use the phrases in the box.

coming home from work – feel safer exercises whole body


easy to find and park a bike fewer cars, less traffic and noise
easy to use reduces stress

ESSAY OUTLINE

I. Introductory paragraph

Thesis
Statement

Body
Paragraph 1 II.

Supporting
Idea 1
A. Commuters – can ride and go everywhere

Detail 1. Do not have to rely on bus/train schedules

Detail 2. Car – too much traffic

Supporting
Idea 2
B. Bike stations are everywhere

Detail 1.

Detail 2. One problem – supply

Detail 3. App – to find bikes

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Body
Paragraph 2
III. City more enjoyable and safer

Supporting
Idea 1 A.

Detail 1. Feel comfortable traveling

Detail 2. Spend more time enjoying city

Detail 3. Attract tourists

Supporting
Idea 2
B. City feels less dangerous

Detail 1.

Body
Paragraph 3
IV. Positive effects on health

Supporting
Idea 1
A.

Detail 1. I ride 5 miles a day

Supporting
Idea 2
B. Good source of energy

Detail 1. My experience – feel energetic

Supporting
Idea 3
C.

V. Concluding paragraph

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B The Essay in Academic Writing
Writers use the essay structure to communicate their ideas clearly and convincingly. There are
several types of essays that you will review in this book, including comparison and contrast,
cause-effect, and argumentative. Academic essays typically have the following structure:
1 An introductory paragraph that explains the topic and the writer’s purpose in writing.
It includes:
• a hook
• background information
• a thesis statement
2 Body paragraphs (usually 2–4 paragraphs) that develop the writer’s main points. Each body
paragraph includes:
• a topic sentence
• supporting sentences and details
• a concluding sentence
3 A concluding paragraph that restates the thesis statement and provides a final comment.
It includes:
• a restatement of the thesis
• an insight, an opinion, a recommendation, a prediction, or a call to action

3.3 Notice
Circle the answers.
1 Which of the following does an introductory paragraph include?
a a topic sentence b a prediction c a thesis statement
2 In which paragraph(s) does the writer explain the main points of the essay?
a introductory paragraph b body paragraphs c concluding paragraph
3 In which paragraph(s) does the writer say something he or she has learned or wants the
reader to do?
a introductory paragraph b body paragraphs c concluding paragraph

thE IntroDuCtory pArAgrAph


The hook is usually the first one or two sentences in an introductory paragraph. It makes the
reader interested in reading the essay. Writers use different types of hooks.
Hooks can be:
• A thought-provoking question
What’s more important, having the convenience of plastic water bottles or having a healthy,
clean environment?
• A request to reflect on or visualize a situation to help the reader make a personal
connection to the issue
Think about how much paper and plastic you throw away in one day. Multiply that amount by
365 days in the year. Think about how many rooms it all would fill.

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• A relevant or memorable quotation
Former U.S. President Franklin D. Roosevelt once said, “A nation that destroys its soils destroys
itself. Forests are the lungs of our land, purifying the air and giving fresh strength to our people.”
• A surprising statistic
According to the Environmental Protection Agency, Americans throw away roughly 32 million tons
of plastic each year.
• An interesting and relevant observation
On every college campus, you see many students walking around with plastic water bottles.

3.4 Notice
Work with a partner. Discuss these questions.
1 Look at the professional author’s essay on pages 18–19. What kind of hook did the author
use? Do you think it was effective? Why or why not?
2 Look at the Student Model essay on pages 20–21. What kind of hook did the writer use?
Do you think it was effective? Why or why not?

BACKgrounD InForMAtIon
In an introductory paragraph, background information is information on the topic that sets
up the reader for the thesis statement. It explains the topic in a way that makes the thesis
statement seem logical. For example, if a writer’s thesis is “A bike-share program is good for
cities and the people who live there because it is a convenient way to travel, it improves life in
the city, and it makes people healthier,” then the background information should introduce
bike-share programs in a way that shows that bike-share programs have advantages.
Some types of background information are:
• a general explanation of the topic
• historical information on the topic
• a personal story that relates to the topic
• relevant data and statistics

Read the following student paragraphs. Notice the type of background information each
one contains.

Student Paragraph 1

What’s more important, having the convenience of plastic water bottles


or having a healthy, clean environment? According to the Environmental
Protection Agency, Americans threw away roughly 32 million tons of plastic Relevant data and
statistics
in 2012. This has a large impact on the environment. It takes more than 17
million barrels of oil to produce the energy to make and deliver these bottles.
Furthermore, burning oil and other fossil fuels is a main cause of pollution.

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Student Paragraph 2

Did you know that shipping an apple 3,000 miles from California to New
York hurts the environment? Most of the produce we buy in grocery stores
is not grown locally. Instead, it is produced in one area and then shipped
hundreds and often thousands of miles to another area. The trucks that carry General
explanation of the
the produce use a lot of oil for fuel. This oil causes carbon emissions that topic
pollute our air. Buying produce that comes from local farmers is an effective
way to use less oil and create less pollution.

3.5 Notice
Work with a partner. Discuss these questions.
1 Look at the introductory paragraph of the professional author’s essay on pages 18–19.
What kind of background information did the author use? Do you think it was effective?
Why or why not?
2 Look at the introductory paragraph of the Student Model essay on pages 20–21. What kind
of background information did the writer use? Do you think it was effective? Why or why not?

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3.6 Apply It to Your Writing
Look at the list that you created in Section 1 on page 15. Use your brainstorm
ideas to write some background information for your topic.

thE thESIS StAtEMEnt


The thesis statement in an essay:
• is usually the last sentence in the introductory paragraph
• tells the reader what ideas will be developed in the body of the essay
The thesis statement has two parts: a topic and a point of view. The point of view often states
the individual ideas or points that the writer will develop in the essay. Below is an example of a
thesis statement that states the points. The points are numbered.
POINT OF VIEW

TOPIC 1 2 3
Bringing your own bag to the store saves trees, reduces waste, and saves money.
Sometimes the thesis statement is more general. This means that the writer does not actually
state the individual points. However, it is still clear what he or she will write about. The thesis
statement below is an example of this. We know the writer will discuss benefits related to the
environment and to riders, but we do not know the exact benefits.
POINT OF VIEW
TOPIC
Taking public transportation benefits both the environment and riders.

3.7 Notice
Look at the professional author’s essay on pages 18–19 and the Student Model essay on
pages 20–21. Find the thesis statement for each one. Do the thesis statements state the
points that will be developed?

FACtS VS. poIntS oF VIEW


It is important to remember that a thesis is not a statement of fact that everyone agrees on.
A point of view is debatable. People may not agree with the specific ideas. They may have a
different point of view. Compare the two thesis statements for the following prompt:
WRITING PROMPT: What are the benefits of using solar power?
Thesis Statement 1: Solar power saves money, is a renewable source of energy, and reduces
global warming.
Thesis Statement 2: Solar power is an important part of photosynthesis and the water
cycle process.
Note that Thesis Statement 1 is debatable. The writer must support the point of view with
explanation, facts, and examples. Thesis Statement 2 is a fact. It is not debatable, so it cannot
be developed further like a point of view can. As a result, it is not a good thesis statement.

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3.8 Evaluate Thesis Statements
Work with a partner. Read the topics. Circle the thesis statements that include a
debatable point of view.
1 Topic: Prefabricated homes
a Prefabricated homes are built in one location and then moved to another location.
b Prefabricated homes benefit the environment and the people who live in them.
2 Topic: Solar power
a Solar power can reduce our use of dangerous sources of power, such as nuclear energy.
b The supply of power from the sun is unlimited.
3 Topic: Community gardens in city neighborhoods
a Community gardens benefit the environment and help build a sense of community.
b Many cities have community gardens.
4 Topic: Car sharing
a Car sharing should be mandatory in cities in order to reduce air pollution.
b Car sharing is one way to share the cost of gasoline.

3.9 Apply It to Your Writing


Think about what you have learned. Revise the possible thesis statement that you
wrote on page 15. Then share it with a partner.

BoDy pArAgrAphS
Body paragraphs present the main points of an essay. Each body paragraph logically and
thoroughly explains, describes, or argues one aspect of the thesis statement.
A body paragraph includes:
• a topic sentence that states one aspect of the thesis. A good topic sentence clearly connects
to the thesis by reusing or paraphrasing key words. The underlined words below connect to
the words “makes people healthier” in the thesis statement of the Student Model essay.
The best reason for having a bike-share is its positive effects on people’s health.
• supporting sentences that give specific information about the main idea. Writers also
include sentences that offer details, or more information about the ideas in the supporting
sentences. The information that writers give in their supporting sentences and details
includes explanations, examples, and facts.
When people bike on a daily basis, they exercise their whole body every day. I ride at least 5
miles a day, so I know my heart and lungs are strong. Also, biking is a good source of energy.

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• a concluding sentence that ties all the ideas in the paragraph together. Writers signal the
conclusion by starting this sentence with a word or phrase such as clearly, for these reasons,
therefore, or in brief.
Clearly, a bike-share program improves people’s health.

3.10 Notice
Read the body paragraph from the Student Model essay on pages 20–21. Double
underline the topic sentence. Underline the supporting sentences. Circle the concluding
sentence.

First, a bike-share program is easy for people to use. Commuters who travel to the city
can ride around and go wherever they want. They do not have to rely on the schedules of
buses and trains. Driving a car is also difficult because of traffic. In addition, bike stations are
everywhere, so it is usually easy to find and park a bike. One problem sometimes is that the
supply of bikes is less than the demand for them. That was a problem in my city. However, we
now have an app that tells where there are available bikes, so people do not have to spend
time searching for one. Therefore, the bike-share program is more convenient than buses and
other kinds of transportation.

3.11 Practice Writing Topic Sentences


Read the thesis statements. Write topic sentences for the body paragraphs.
1 Thesis statement: Community gardens benefit cities by improving air quality, providing
healthy food, and teaching children valuable skills.

. Many urban areas have pollution


because of the carbon emissions from cars. This pollution can cause asthma and other
breathing problems. The green plants in gardens make oxygen. This oxygen makes it easier
for everyone to breathe. Clearly, cleaner air is one benefit of community gardens.
2 Thesis statement: Biking to work instead of driving reduces air pollution, saves money, and
makes people healthier.

. Cars are very expensive to maintain,


while bikes are easy to maintain. For example, if a car engine breaks, it can cost hundreds
of dollars to repair. On the other hand, if the chain on a bike breaks, it costs a lot less to fix.
Gas and insurance for cars are expensive, too, but bikes do not need them. Bikers often have
to register their bikes, but this does not usually cost very much. There is no doubt that biking
to work costs less.

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3.12 Apply It to Your Writing
Look at the thesis statement that you revised in Activity 3.9 on page 28. Write a
topic sentence for one of the body paragraphs. Then share it with a partner.

3.13 Practice Writing Supporting Sentences


Work with a partner. Read the essay prompt. Write three drawbacks of bike-share
programs.
WRITING PROMPT: Many communities in the United States have started bike-share programs.
People use the bikes to get around and return them to bike lots that are located in convenient
places around town. What are the possible drawbacks of using a bike from a bike share
program?
Advantage 1:
Advantage 2:
Advantage 3:

3.14 Practice Writing a Thesis Statement


Write a thesis statement based on your ideas from Activity 3.13.

Thesis statement:

3.15 Practice Writing Topic Sentences


Write topic sentences for three body paragraphs based on your thesis statement in
Activity 3.14 and your ideas from Activity 3.13. Use the expressions in the box.

another drawback is first, finally,

Body Paragraph 1 Topic Sentence:

Body Paragraph 2 Topic Sentence:

Body Paragraph 3 Topic Sentence:

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3.16 Write Supporting Sentences
Work with a partner. Choose one of your topic sentences from Activity 3.14. Think of
supporting sentences and details for it and write a paragraph.

ConCLuDIng pArAgrAph
The concluding paragraph reminds the reader of your thesis by restating it and then ends
with an interesting comment, recommendation, or prediction. A conclusion never adds new
information or ideas to your essay.
The first sentence in the concluding paragraph usually begins with a transition phrase such as
the following: in conclusion, in short, in sum, and to conclude.
In conclusion, biking instead of driving has many benefits.
The final comment is often:
• an insight or opinion: I have more respect for people who choose off-grid living because they
are committed to it even though it is difficult and inconvenient sometimes.
• a prediction: These changes require cooperation, but if everyone biked or took public
transportation just three days a week, most communities would be cleaner and healthier places
to live.
• a recommendation: Instead of spending money on new roads and buildings, communities
should create more parks and green spaces.
• a call to action: Consumers must demand that their city officials pass laws banning plastic bags.

3.17 Notice
Read the concluding paragraph of the Student Model essay on pages 20–21. What kind
of comment is it?

hoW to rEStAtE thE thESIS StAtEMEnt


Good writers paraphrase their thesis statement in the conclusion instead of repeating it word
for word. Notice how the writer of the Student Model essay used synonyms for “convenient,”
“improves life,” and “makes people healthier” in restating the thesis statement:
Thesis statement: A bike-share program is good for cities and the people who live there because it
is a convenient way to travel, it improves life in the city, and it makes people healthier.
Concluding sentence: In conclusion, a bike-share program not only helps the environment, it makes
a city easier to get around, makes a city more pleasant, and makes people feel and look better.
Remember to restate the points in the same order as they appeared in the thesis statement.

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3.18 Practice Choosing Restatements of the Thesis Statement
Work with a partner. Choose the best restatement for each thesis statement.
1 Thesis statement: Consumers can reduce their use of energy on a daily basis by unplugging
appliances, turning off lights when not in a room, and washing clothes with warm water.
a In short, unplugging appliances, turning off lights when not in a room, and washing
clothes in warm water are three ways that consumers can reduce their use of energy on a
daily basis.
b In conclusion, shutting off lights when no one is there, unplugging appliances when
you’re not using them, and using warm water to wash clothes are ways we can all help to
cut down on energy use.
c To conclude, disconnecting appliances, shutting off lights in rooms when no one is
there, and using warm water to wash clothes are ways that everyone can reduce energy
consumption.
2 Thesis statement: Eliminating plastic bags reduces water pollution, produces less garbage,
and saves communities money.
a In short, if there were no plastic bags, there would be less water pollution, less litter, and
more money for communities.
b In conclusion, if plastic bags are eliminated, it would save communities money, reduce
litter, and decrease water pollution.
c To conclude, eliminating plastic bags reduces water pollution, produces less garbage, and
saves communities money.

3.19 Practice Restating a Thesis Statement


Restate the thesis statement below. Keep the original meaning, but use different words.
Thesis statement: Biking rather than driving to work helps people to get in shape, save
money, and reduce stress.

Restatement:

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4 ShArpEn your SKILLS

In this section, you will learn the writing and grammar skills that will help make your writing
more sophisticated and accurate.

A Writing Skill: Thesis Statements and Writing Prompts


A good thesis statement answers the writing prompt. That may seem obvious, but sometimes
writers can become confused if they do not fully understand the prompt. As a result, their thesis
statements do not match the writing prompt.
One way to make sure that your thesis statement answers the writing prompt is to repeat key
words from the prompt in your thesis statement. Read the examples below. Notice how Thesis
Statement 2 repeats key words, making it a better thesis statement.
WRITING PROMPT: Consumers spend thousands of dollars each year on bottled water even
though they know plastic is damaging the environment. What are some ways to persuade
the public to use fewer plastic products?
Thesis Statement 1: People could use fewer plastic products if the government taxed plastic
and talked to people about the negative effects of it.
Thesis Statement 2: Taxing plastic bottles, explaining how plastic damages the
environment, and offering consumers alternatives to plastic products will persuade the
public to use fewer of them.

4.1 Choose Thesis Statements


Work with a partner. Choose the best thesis statements. Discuss the reasons for
your choices.
1 WRITING PROMPT: Green spaces, such as parks and community gardens, are considered
good for cities for many reasons. How do they improve the lives of residents in a city?
a Green spaces are nice for cities because people can enjoy nature, they can relax and play
games, and they can hear concerts and go to other events.
b Green spaces improve the lives of residents in a city because these spaces help people
enjoy nature, they reduce air pollution, and they build a sense of community
among people.
c Green spaces are good for people because these places are relaxing and beautiful, they are
fun to go with friends and family, and they reduce air pollution in the city.

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2 WRITING PROMPT: Many people have habits that are bad for the environment.
For example, they drive everywhere, they keep the lights on even when they leave a room,
they keep the TV on even when they are not watching it, or they use paper towels or
sponges instead of reusable cloth towels for cleaning. Choose a habit that you have that you
know is not very good for the environment and give three reasons why it would be difficult
to give it up.
a I use a lot of electricity every day because I often keep the TV on, I usually keep electric
appliances plugged in all the time, and I usually keep lights on in rooms when I am not
in them.
b I know driving everywhere is bad for the environment but it would be difficult for me to
give it up because I hate to walk, I love driving, and I hate taking public transportation.
c Buying bottled water is bad, but I cannot stop it because I do not like carrying bottles
around, I like fresh water, and I recycle the bottles so it is not damaging the environment.

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B Grammar for Writing: Infinitives
An infinitive is to + the base form of a verb. It can follow verbs, nouns, or adjectives.
Below are some common structures with infinitives.

CoMMon StruCturES WIth InFInItIVES

1 An infinitive follows verbs such as the VERB + INFINITIVE


They want to protect the environment.
following:
attempt, decide, need, plan, want

2 To make an infinitive negative, put The city is asking the public not to use plastic
not before it. bags for groceries.

NOUN + INFINITIVE
3 An infinitive can also follow certain
Off-grid living is a good way to live simply.
nouns such as the following:
ability, chance, energy, opportunity,
time, way

4 An infinitive of purpose answers the Some people go off the grid to save money.
question why. (Why do some people go off the grid? To save
money.)
Some people go off the grid to help the
environment.
(Why do some people go off the grid? To help
the environment.)

4.2 Practice Infinitive Forms


Work with a partner. Complete the sentences with the infinitive forms of the verbs in
the box.

be create heat
cost enjoy protect

1 Many people use green cleaning products their health.


2 Community gardens help a sense of belonging.
3 Solar power uses the sun homes.
4 Organic fruits and vegetables tend more than regular produce.
5 Parks in cities give residents the chance the beauty of nature.
6 Off-grid living gives people a way more connected to nature.

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Avoiding Common Mistakes
Research tells us that these are the most common mistakes that students make when using
infinitives in academic writing. Avoid these mistakes when you write your essay in Section 5.

1 Use correct word order with the negative form of an infinitive.


not to
The city decided to not switch to a renewable energy source.
2 Remember that some verbs – for example, avoid, require, finish, keep, discuss, and
consider – require a gerund.
exploring
Many governments avoid to explore new energy sources because of financial concerns.
3 Do not confuse the preposition for with the infinitive to when the meaning is
“in order to.”
to
Cooperation is necessary for ensure the success of zero-waste programs.

4.3 Editing Task


Find and correct five more mistakes in the paragraph below.
to live
Some people want living in very small houses because these homes use fewer natural
resources. Because they are small, it costs less for heat these homes. Also, they use less
electricity than large houses because it costs much less per month for supply electricity to
a small house than to a large house. This is because small houses have fewer rooms, fewer
electrical outlets, and less need for light fixtures than larger houses. Small houses use less water,
too. Finally, they tend to not be on large lots. Therefore, they do not have large gardens that
require to water. The decision to not have a lot of space means that owners of small homes not
only reduce energy consumption, but save valuable resources and money as well.

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C Avoiding Plagiarism
Academic writing has special challenges. One of the challenges for
writers is recognizing and avoiding plagiarism.

I got my first essay back from my instructor. I worked really


hard on it, so I thought I’d get a good grade. I was so surprised
when I saw a big, red X at the top of the paper! When I asked
my instructor about it, she said I had plagiarized it. I don’t
understand what I did wrong! Help! What is plagiarism?
Gitta

Dear Gitta,
Plagiarism is using someone else’s exact words or ideas in your writing, and not naming
the original writer or book, magazine, video, podcast, or website where you found them.
Maybe you copied the exact words or images from some of these places and didn’t
include the source references.
Most schools in North America have an academic integrity policy. This policy is an
agreement that members of an academic community sign. When you sign this agreement,
you promise to be honest in how you present your ideas. That means you promise that
you won’t plagiarize another person’s work.
Yours truly,
Professor Wright

rECognIzIng pLAgIArISM
In order to avoid plagiarizing, you must first recognize it. Read the original text from author
Emily Sohn’s article “Revving Up Green Machines.”

ORIGINAL TEXT: “In the United States alone, 17 million new cars hit the road in 2004. But the
freedom to travel anywhere, anytime in a car or truck comes at a price. It’s not just the cost
of gasoline, insurance, and repairs. Automobiles are a major source of pollution. Most cars
burn gasoline, which releases carbon dioxide gas into the air, along with other particles and
pollutants.”

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Now read the paragraphs by students who used the information in the original text. Student A
plagiarized it, and Student B did not.

Student A (plagiarized text) Student B (did not plagiarize text)


I believe that we need to reduce the Use of gasoline-powered cars is a
number of cars. In the United States problem in the world. According to Emily
alone, 17 million new cars hit the road in Sohn, there were 17 million new cars in
2004. Automobiles are a major source of America. She says there is a price to
pollution. Most cars burn gasoline, and it traveling freely in cars. She states, “It’s
releases carbon dioxide into the air. not just the cost of gasoline, insurance,
and repairs.” Pollution is also a cost.
This student: This student:
• copied and pasted the underlined • wrote the ideas in her own words.
sentences from the original source. • cited her source, in other words, gave the
• did not cite, in other words, give the name of the author of the article in which
author’s name or title and page number she found the information.
(if there is one) of the article from which • used quotation marks when she used the
the information came. author’s exact words.

4.4 Practice
Read the original text. Then read the paragraphs by Student A and Student B. Check (✓)
the student who plagiarized. Discuss your reasons with a partner.
ORIGINAL TEXT: “Landfills and garbage dumps are full of plastic. But scientists are working on
a new generation of plastics that are better for the environment. Some are made from natural
materials, like parts of corn or sugar plants. These are called bioplastics. Already, Earth-friendlier
plastics are being used to make water bottles, gift cards, forks, and more.” (Adapted from the
article “Planting Seeds for Better Plastic,” by Emily Sohn)
Student A: According to Sohn, scientists can use plants to make special new plastics.
That means they are natural, so they are not so bad for the environment. Now, many
common products are being made from these new plastics.
Student B: There is a lot of plastic in garbage dumps. Scientists are working on a new
generation of plastics that are better for the environment. Some are made from natural
materials. These are called bioplastics. They are being used to make many new products.

4.5 Practice
Rewrite one of the plagiarized sentences from Activity 4.4 in your own words.

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5 WrItE your ESSAy

In this section, you will follow the writing process to complete the final draft of your essay.

StEp 1: BrAInStorM
Work with a partner. Follow the steps below to brainstorm ideas for your essay.
1 Before you start, notice how the writer of the Student Model essay brainstormed. She wrote
a lot of ideas. She included some of the ideas from the list that she made in Section 1 on
page 14. Then she circled the three points that she thought were the strongest.

Reasons for a Bike-Share Program

more freedom
no looking for parking
never get stuck in traffic
save money
convenient to travel around city
get more exercise
feel safer because more people everywhere
city – more fun
no worry about bus schedules
BUT supply can be a problem – app!
can go anywhere
fun – I go more places
reduce stress
better health

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2 Write the ideas that you wrote in Section 1 on page 15 in the space below. Include ideas
from the Your Turns throughout the unit. Brainstorm more ideas.

3 Circle the three strongest points in support of your thesis and write them below.

StEp 2: Do rESEArCh
If your topic requires research, see page 261 for advice on how to find information.

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Step 3: Make an Outline
Making an outline helps you organize your ideas. Complete the outline below with your
ideas from the previous steps.

ESSAY Outline

I. Introductory paragraph
Thesis
Statement

Body
Paragraph 1
II.
Supporting
Idea 1
A.

Detail 1.

Supporting
Idea 2
B.

Detail 1.
Body
Paragraph 2
III.
Supporting
Idea 1
A.

Detail 1.

Supporting
Idea 2
B.

Detail 1.
Body
Paragraph 3
IV.
Supporting
Idea 1
A.

Detail 1.

Supporting
Idea 2
B.

Detail 1.

V. Concluding paragraph

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StEp 4: WrItE your FIrSt DrAFt
Now it is time to write your first draft. Here are some suggestions on how to get started:
1 Use your outline, notes, and the sentences you wrote in the Your Turns and in Step 3 on
page 41.
2 Focus on making your ideas as clear as possible.
3 Remember to add a title.

After you finish, read your essay and check for basic errors:
1 Check that all sentences have subjects and verbs.
2 Go through and look at every comma. Is it correct? Should it be a period?
3 Check that you have used a comma after dependent clauses with Although/While/Because,
etc., when they start a sentence.
4 Make sure your thesis statement and topic sentences are clear.

StEp 5: WrItE your FInAL DrAFt


Before you write your final draft, do the following:
1 After you receive feedback on your first draft, review it carefully. Fix any errors.
2 Make a note of errors that were most frequent (wrong verb tense, using commas instead of
periods, etc.). Try to avoid them as you write.
3 Review the Academic Vocabulary and Collocations from this unit. Are there any that you can
add to your essay?
4 Turn to page 262 and use the Self-Editing Review to check your work one more time.
5 Write your final draft and hand it in.

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