This document contains a student's writing assignment on whether it is better for college students to live in schools or at home with their parents. It includes the student's initial draft, a self-assessment checklist, feedback from a peer editor using a checklist, and the student's final revised version addressing the feedback. The draft discusses the benefits of living in schools such as meeting new people from different cultures, developing communication skills, and gaining experience for future jobs. The peer editor suggests discussing both views as asked and improving grammar and punctuation.
This document contains a student's writing assignment on whether it is better for college students to live in schools or at home with their parents. It includes the student's initial draft, a self-assessment checklist, feedback from a peer editor using a checklist, and the student's final revised version addressing the feedback. The draft discusses the benefits of living in schools such as meeting new people from different cultures, developing communication skills, and gaining experience for future jobs. The peer editor suggests discussing both views as asked and improving grammar and punctuation.
This document contains a student's writing assignment on whether it is better for college students to live in schools or at home with their parents. It includes the student's initial draft, a self-assessment checklist, feedback from a peer editor using a checklist, and the student's final revised version addressing the feedback. The draft discusses the benefits of living in schools such as meeting new people from different cultures, developing communication skills, and gaining experience for future jobs. The peer editor suggests discussing both views as asked and improving grammar and punctuation.
This document contains a student's writing assignment on whether it is better for college students to live in schools or at home with their parents. It includes the student's initial draft, a self-assessment checklist, feedback from a peer editor using a checklist, and the student's final revised version addressing the feedback. The draft discusses the benefits of living in schools such as meeting new people from different cultures, developing communication skills, and gaining experience for future jobs. The peer editor suggests discussing both views as asked and improving grammar and punctuation.
It is better for college students to live in schools than live at home with their parents. Do you agree or disagree?
• 1st draft
College is an important part of any student's life. These college students have to live in a hostel and far away from home and parents. From my experience, I completely agree with this opinion for the following reasons. Firstly, there are various reasons why college students want to move out and live their own life. If they live in a college hostel, they will meet a lot of new relationships from different country. In addition, they will be exposed to many cultures and languages which will benefit them in the future. Secondly, developing their soft skills is very important to college students. The students who live in schools not only participate in many college activities but also claim more communication and interaction skills. To summarize, I believe that parents should let their children to live in college school instead of living at home because they can develop their mind set and give them more opportunities to learn new skills.
• Self-assessment (checklist)
Content SELF- ASSESSMENT Task Response
Is the essay at least 250 words? N
Is the topic identified in the introduction? Y Does the thesis statement discuss both views as being asked? N Is each paragraph related to the topic? Y Does the conclusion summarize both views and state the writer’s opinion? Y Coherence & Cohesion
Are there one introduction, two body paragraphs, and one conclusion in the Y essay? Is there a clear topic sentence in each paragraph? Y Are relevant examples and/or other supporting details (explanation, reasons, Y …) included? Are the sentences well linked together using appropriate cohesive devices? Y Lexical Resource
Has the question been suitably paraphrased? Y
Has consistent repetition of vocabulary been avoided? N Have spelling and word-choice errors been checked? Y Is there sufficient use of academic vocabulary? N Does the essay contain vocabulary specific to the topic? Y Grammar Range and Accuracy
Has a range of simple, compound, and complex sentences been used? Y
Have the verb tenses and subject-verb agreement been checked? Y Are most sentences error-free? N Has correct punctuation been used? N
• Peer assessment (checklist)
Content PEER Comments/
ASSESSMENT Suggestions Task Response
Is the essay at least 250 words? Y
Is the topic identified in the introduction? Y Does the thesis statement discuss both views as N being asked? Is each paragraph related to the topic? Y Does the conclusion summarize both views and N state the writer’s opinion? Coherence & Cohesion
Are there one introduction, two body paragraphs, Y
and one conclusion in the essay? Is there a clear topic sentence in each Y paragraph? Are relevant examples and/or other supporting Y details (explanation, reasons, …) included? Are the sentences well linked together using Y appropriate cohesive devices? Lexical Resource
Has the question been suitably paraphrased? Y
Has consistent repetition of vocabulary been N avoided? Have spelling and word-choice errors been Y checked? Is there sufficient use of academic vocabulary? Y Does the essay contain vocabulary specific to Y the topic? Grammar Range and Accuracy
Has a range of simple, compound, and complex Y
sentences been used? Have the verb tenses and subject-verb N agreement been checked? Are most sentences error-free? N Has correct punctuation been used? Y
• Final version
College is an important part of any student's life. These college students have to live in a hostel and far away from home and parents. Many students said that live in hostel is better and more comfortable than live at home. From my experience, I completely agree with this opinion for the following reasons. Firstly, there are various reasons why college students want to move out and live their own life. If they live in a college hostel, they will meet a lot of new relationships from different country. In addition, they will be exposed to many cultures and languages which will benefit them in the future. Secondly, developing their soft skills is very important to college students. The students who live in schools not only participate in many college activities but also claim more communication and interaction skills. Furthermore, living far away from parents will train students to balance their work and control their time. Thirdly, College is the place in which they can earn the skills and experiences they will need for the future job. Although students who are new to college, still ask their parents for money, they must know the value of money. Students can do a part-time job which help them earn more money and know how to use money effectively. To summarize, I believe that parents should let their children to live in college school instead of living at home because they can develop their mind set and give them more opportunities to learn new skills.
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