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Uplevelling Descriptive Writing Adventure

The author provides a concise summary of the descriptive writing passage in 3 sentences: The passage describes a boy named Alex climbing a mountain in heavy rain and wind to reach the top where a lost emerald was rumored to be located. As he climbs, the clouds begin to thin and Alex sees an amazing castle balancing at the very top of the mountain, exceeding anything he expected to find. The summary highlights the key details about the protagonist, setting, and discovery described in the passage.

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Uplevelling Descriptive Writing Adventure

The author provides a concise summary of the descriptive writing passage in 3 sentences: The passage describes a boy named Alex climbing a mountain in heavy rain and wind to reach the top where a lost emerald was rumored to be located. As he climbs, the clouds begin to thin and Alex sees an amazing castle balancing at the very top of the mountain, exceeding anything he expected to find. The summary highlights the key details about the protagonist, setting, and discovery described in the passage.

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Mylie Roberts
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Uplevelling Descriptive Writing: Adventure

Read through the descriptive writing below and use the checklist to
Has the author included…
see which features the author has managed to include. When you have
a description of what can be seen? finished, give the author feedback on their writing using the boxes below.
a description of what can be heard?
Features that I really liked:
a description of what can be felt?
1.
a description of the weather?

powerful adjectives to describe the atmosphere?

a variety of sentence structures? 2.

Alex felt as though he had been climbing for years. The heavy
rain and strong wind were making it really difficult. He was
still determined to reach the top. That was where the lost
Features that I would improve:
emerald was rumoured to be. All around him were rocks, sharp
edges and thick clouds. If he fell now, it could be the last thing 1.
he ever did.
As he climbed, Alex noticed that the cloud was beginning to
thin. Suddenly, he could see what was ahead of him. It was 2.
amazing. When he set out to find the lost emerald, Alex knew
that he was going to see new things but he didn’t expect this.
What he could see was a castle that was balancing at the very
3.
top of the mountain. It was great.

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