0500 NarrativeStructure TP
0500 NarrativeStructure TP
0500 NarrativeStructure TP
Narrative Structure
Cambridge IGCSE™
First Language English 0500
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Contents
Lesson plan
Teacher’s notes
Lesson resources
This Teaching Pack focuses on supporting learners to develop the skills they will need in order to
write engaging and effective narratives in which the ideas are organised and structured for
deliberate effect.
The lessons presented here are designed for learners that have some understanding of narrative
writing. This means they will be expected to have some knowledge and understanding of the
narrative terms: genre, character, plot, setting, tension, beginning, middle and end.
Learners are also expected to have prior knowledge of the terms: characterisation, setting,
range of sentences, appropriate vocabulary, and punctuation for specific effect.
Learners will be familiar with writing in Standard English and should also have an understanding of
how to write for different audiences and purposes.
In this Teaching Pack we have suggested resources you may like to use as well as some
worksheets and teacher notes to print off and use in the classroom with your learners.
Timings Activity
Starter / Introduction
Task: In pairs, learners discuss the following question: What makes an interesting and
engaging opening to a story?
Encourage learners to share their ideas with the rest of the class. An effective way to
do this might be to use mini-whiteboards and have learners show you these so that
you can quickly assess learner’s prior knowledge.
Optional AfL: Individually, learners RAG rate their confidence levels about writing a
good opening for a story (red = not confident, amber = some confidence, green =
confident).
Main lesson
Task: As a class, learners watch Video 1 which explains the Narrative Arc and how
this is used to structure writing.
Remind learners that today’s focus is going to be on narrative hooks and effective
story openings.
Divide the class into five groups and give each group a copy of Worksheet 1 (A–E). It
would be useful for these worksheets to be printed on A3 paper so that there is
enough space for learners to write their responses. Alternatively, you could print two
copies per group. Each group should have a different copy to the other groups. In their
groups, learners complete the A3 worksheet to analyse the opening of a story.
When the groups have completed their worksheet, learners stick the worksheets at
intervals around the walls of the classroom. Alternatively, learners could leave their
work on their desks and learners could circulate to look at each other’s work.
Each group of learners then moves around the room to look at the responses of the
other groups. Encourage learners to discuss the comments and decisions made by
others and to decide whether they agree or disagree. They should also be prepared to
justify (explain why) they agree or disagree, using evidence from the narrative hooks.
Give learners time to share their comments with the whole class. Groups can select a
representative to explain their analysis by using evidence from the work they have
seen on the A3 posters.
Timings Activity
Plenary
Task: Introduce the task to learners that they are going to write a narrative hook of
their own for a story titled ‘Stolen’.
Using Worksheet 2 learners need to complete the first two sections of the
worksheet to plan their opening and hook.
Optional AfL: Learners could reflect on their RAG confidence levels about writing a
narrative hook to now consider how confident they feel about writing narrative hooks.
Homework:
Using their ideas from the plan, learners should write the opening and narrative hook
for their story and bring their work to the next lesson. It could be in the style of one of
the narrative hooks they have seen during the lesson but learners can of course be as
creative as they like. It may be useful for you to give learners a copy of Worksheet 3
so that they can see the different styles of narrative hook they could use.
Key words / concepts you could highlight during lesson 1, or have pre-taught before the lesson:
Starter:
The starter is an opportunity for learners to think about their own knowledge of story openings or
narrative hooks and reflect on what they think makes an effective story opening. This could be a
useful time to define the term exposition and explain that a narrative hook is the start of a story and
that an exposition can be a longer, more extended introduction to the story as a whole. You could
do this activity as a flipped learning task where learners prepare or research their answer or ideas
before the lesson.
The AfL (Assessment for Learning) activity is an opportunity for you to see how confident your
learners are at this stage in the lesson. They can either use a red, amber, green (RAG) rating or you
could use any other method to quickly assess your learners’ confidence.
Video
The video focuses on five key terms: exposition, rising action, climax, falling action, resolution. It
explains each of these terms and why they are useful for planning narrative writing. Learners may
also be familiar with other terms such as ‘beginning’ instead of ‘exposition’ and ‘end’ instead of
‘resolution’. It is fine to use both terms so long as learners understand how they relate to the structure
of a narrative. The video describes the five stages of a narrative and explains how each stage is
important for writing an effective story.
The video compares the structure of a story (narrative arc) to a mountain and sometimes uses the
term ‘the story mountain’. The word ‘narrative’ and ‘story’ are both used in this video and have the
same meaning in this context.
It may be useful for you to pause the video after each stage of the narrative so that you can allow
your learners to ask questions or make notes. Alternatively, you may only want to watch the first part
of the video (until rising action) so that learners only need to focus on narrative openings in this
lesson.
Texts
Worksheet 1 (A-E) has a selection of short narrative openings from a range of different novels of
different genres. The summaries below give a short overview of what each text is about.
1984 is a dystopian novel (a novel set in a future that shows a society where the people are controlled
by an oppressive government or political regime) and is set in the year 1984. In this novel, the world
population have become victims of surveillance, propaganda and constant war.
Worksheet 2
Worksheet 2 is a planning table with prompt questions and spaces for learners to record their
answers. Learners need to complete the first two sections to make decisions about the type of story
they are going to write. This is a useful activity for learners to reflect on their choices before they
begin to draft their extended response. The writing task asks learners to write a narrative opening to
a story titled ‘Stolen’ and learners are free to make their own decisions about the type of story they
are going to write.
Glossary
The Glossary is designed to be used with all three of the lessons in this Teaching Pack and gives
some accessible definitions for key words or vocabulary that your learners may find challenging or
need to revise. You can give your learners a copy of this glossary before the lessons as a pre-
learning activity.
Timings Activity
Starter
Task: In pairs, assign learners one of the following questions to consider:
1. What are the five stages of the narrative arc?
2. Why do writers use narrative arcs to structure their stories?
3. What is the purpose of the narrative hook?
When learners have discussed their ideas, ask learners to share their answers with the
rest of the class and encourage learners to offer any alternative suggestions or
comments on the answers if needed.
Main lesson
Divide the class into pairs and give each pair a copy of Worksheet 4.
Explain to your learners that this narrative has been written by a student in response to
the task: ‘Write a story which involves breaking a rule’ and that the texts in the boxes
are the first six paragraphs of a story.
Learners should read the text in the boxes and decide:
1. Which order do the paragraphs go in? What features made you think this?
2. Which paragraph/s form the exposition, rising action and climax?
Learners rank order or number the text in the order they think the paragraphs might
appear in the story and then share their thoughts with the whole class.
Encourage learners to consider:
Which paragraphs explained the background of the characters?
Which paragraphs described the scene?
In which paragraph was the tension highest?
Which features helped you to understand the structure of the text?
During this discussion, encourage learners to explain why they have made their
decisions by referring to evidence from the text. When learners have discussed their
ideas, you should give out Worksheet 5 and encourage learners to read the text as a
whole.
Development: Ask learners to swap the exposition that they wrote for homework with a
partner to peer-assess their work. Learners should find evidence in their partner’s work
to support the statements below and answer the question in the third bullet point.
Timings Activity
Your partner has written an interesting narrative hook that makes you want
to know what happens in the rest of the story.
Your partner has started to write an exposition which begins to develop the
story. They introduce the setting and/or characters.
Do you think that your partner’s work is leading towards the climax that they
have planned? Why/why not?
Alternatively, learners could use the self and peer assessment grids from the Figurative
Language Teaching Packs. When learners have reflected on their own writing and their
partner’s writing, they should redraft their opening to make this more effective.
Using Worksheet 2 from Lesson 1 (Narrative Writing plan) learners should complete
the next two sections of their plans which are about ‘rising action’ and ‘climax’.
Encourage learners to apply their knowledge from this lesson.
When this is completed, learners could continue writing the story from the narrative
hook that they produced for their homework for Lesson 1.
Plenary
Task: Ask learners the following two questions. Learners could either respond using
post-its that they post to the board or they could use mini-whiteboards. Encourage
learners to justify and explain their ideas with evidence from the text.
1. What do you think happens next? Why?
2. What do you think happens at the end of the story? Why?
Homework
If learners did not continue writing their rising action and climax part of the story then
they could do this for homework. If learners did complete this in the lesson then they
could revise and edit their ‘rising action’ and ‘climax’ sections that they wrote in class to
redraft these pieces. They should bring their ideas to the next lesson. It might be useful
to set a word limit for this task.
Key words / concepts you could highlight during Lesson 2, or have pre-taught before the lesson:
Characterisation
Climax
setting
range of sentences
appropriate vocabulary
punctuation for specific effect
Starter
This starter is an opportunity for learners to revise their knowledge of the narrative arc and to reflect
on why this makes stories effective. They can do this verbally, on mini-whiteboards or using any
other AfL techniques that you use for quick revision.
Main lesson
The text that this lesson focuses on, ‘Oh how I regret it!’, is a response written by a student to the
task: ‘Write a story which involves breaking a rule’. This story describes two learners who decide to
take revenge on a particularly nasty teacher that they both hold a grudge against. The narrator
describes how he and his best friend Harry attempt to break into Mr. Tom’s classroom but we have
paused the narrative at the point where they appear to have been caught. This is the climax or the
most tense part of the story. We have provided the second half of the story in Lesson 3 but it would
be useful if you didn’t share this with your learners until Lesson 3 so that they have a chance to focus
on the structure of each half independently.
The first task in this part of the lesson asks learners to put the paragraphs in the correct order thinking
about how they might be able to identify the exposition, rising action and climax from clues in the
text. This activity should allow learners to reflect on why structure is important and how this can be
done effectively. You could also ask learners to consider other features of the narrative such the
sentence types or the characterisation.
The next part of the lesson provides learners with the opportunity to peer assess each other’s work
and offer feedback to one another. You could use the self and peer assessment grids from the
Figurative Language Teaching Pack to do this peer assessment activity.
Plenary
The plenary is based around developing prediction skills and should maintain your learners’ interest
in finding out what is going to happen next in the story.
Timings Activity
Starter
Task: Give out Worksheet 7 (Oh how I regret it! Part 2) and ask learners to read this.
You could select learners to read this aloud to the whole class or learners could read
this independently.
In pairs, learners think about what they learnt in Lesson 2 to answer the following
questions:
What sort of characterisation can you identify in the rest of the story?
What do you think it shows about the relationship between the two boys?
Why do you think this?
Do you like Foley? Why?
Do you like Harry? Why?
Main lesson
Task: In pairs, learners read the five examples of story endings on Worksheet 8.
They then decide which ending matches which text (e.g. Epiphany and Text C).
Encourage learners to pay attention to the details in the text so that they can justify
their ideas.
When learners have completed their worksheet, they can share their ideas with the
rest of the class.
Development: Learners revisit their plan for their narrative (Worksheet 2 from
Lesson 1 ‘Plan for narrative writing’) and complete the final two boxes (‘falling action’,
‘resolution’) of their plans.
Write the three bullet points below on the whiteboard. In pairs, learners peer assess
each other’s plans and adapt or edit their work depending on the feedback given by
their partner. Peer assessment can be given verbally or written down.
Find evidence in your partner’s work to support the statements below and answer the
question in the third bullet point.
Your partner has planned falling action that will develop the story and move
the reader towards a resolution.
Your partner has planned an effective ending that will satisfy the reader.
Can you suggest ways of improving the plan even further?
After reflecting on their planning, learners could then write the falling action and
resolution of their story.
Timings Activity
If learners complete their initial draft then they should check and edit their work to
redraft some sections and make their writing more effective. Learners can also identify
in their own work which parts of the narrative arc they’ve included and developed well
and which parts need more attention.
Plenary
In pairs learners should discuss the following questions and share their thoughts on
their narrative writing.
Which part of your narrative do you feel is most effective?
Which sentence are you most proud of and why?
Learners could share their ideas with the rest of the class.
Homework
If learners have not completed their narratives and/or proofreading and editing during
the lesson they should complete this for homework.
They hand in the completed narratives to you for feedback.
If learners have completed their narrative they can complete the following extension
task to find an example of an effective opening and an effective ending to a short story
or novel and identify some of the features of narrative structure that they have looked
at over the last three lessons.
Next Steps
Learners could now write their own narrative using the tips and techniques they have
learnt in this Teaching Pack and some of the language techniques from the Figurative
Language Teaching Packs.
Alternatively, you could give learners one of the narratives from the Developing ideas
and Opinions in a text Teaching Pack and ask learners to analyse the structure of the
text, considering the exposition, rising action, climax, falling action and resolution.
Key words / concepts you could highlight during Lesson 3, or have pre-taught before the lesson:
characterisation
falling action
climax
resolution.
Starter
Worksheet 7 (summarised below) is the second part of the text that learners will have read in
Lesson 2. This part of the story happens just after the boys seem to have been caught and
describes them running away from the guards that are pursuing them. At the end of the story, we
find out that Harry has left his backpack at the school and the reader is left guessing as to what
might happen to the two boys.
In this narrative, the writer has chosen not to just end the story with the boys outrunning the guards
and getting away with their crime. The writer could have ended the story in that way, but to make
their story more interesting and to maintain the attention of the reader for a little longer, the writer
has chosen to end the story with a cliff-hanger. This leaves the reader wondering what happens to
the boys and if they were eventually caught and punished.
It is important that learners understand that there are many ways in which writers choose to end a
story. After reading the rest of the story, learners may think that the action and tension in this story
continue for a short time after the climax. They may also think the action and tension starts to rise
again at the end when Harry realises he has left his backpack and the boys understand that they
are likely to be found out.
A definite ending to the story happens in the single short paragraph in which the narrator exclaims,
“Oh how I regret my actions!” This phrase is very similar to the title and reminds the reader of how
the story started. So although a reader not know what eventually happens to the boys, they do
understand that the character Foley regrets his actions of going along with Harry’s plans and
realises that he has made a mistake.
This example of a narrative ending illustrates how the resolution to a story does not necessarily
have to come at the end of a story and that it can be structured to occur at the end of the falling
action instead.
Main lesson
Worksheet 8 gives learners a range of different types of story endings. Learners need to match the
story endings to the type of ending that is described. For example, Text A is a cliff-hanger. This helps
learners to see a range of different styles of story endings and how they are different from one
another, but it also allows learners to use some of these texts as models for their own writing.
After this activity, learners should plan their own falling action and resolution and can of course us
the texts from Worksheet 8 as inspiration for their own. Learners then need to peer assess their
partner’s plan before learners write to offer some positive feedback and some areas for development.
Following this peer assessment, learners then write their own ending to their story.
Text summaries
The Bermuda Triangle – short story written by a student for the narrative assignment of their
coursework portfolio.
The narrator of this short story is experiencing the holiday of a lifetime on a luxury cruise ship. At
first, all goes well but the action starts to rise as the ship enters the Bermuda Triangle. The tension
continues to rise to the climax of the story when there is an explosion and the narrator is knocked
unconscious and sustains a serious leg injury. The narrator eventually wakes up and is able to make
his way to the ship’s bridge. However, the writer here chooses not to tell the reader whether the
narrator survives or not, but instead leaves us guessing by ending with a cliff-hanger which leaves
the narrator in a serious and worrying situation.
The Search – short story written by a student for the narrative assignment of their coursework
portfolio.
This short story follows the narrator’s experiences of searching in a wood for what the reader thinks
is the narrator’s lost brother or child. The action and tension rises as time passes and the woods get
darker. The climax comes when the narrator begins to think that they will never find their loved one
and they decide to give up their search. At the very end of the story, the resolution is provided when
the narrator finds who they’ve been searching for and we find out that the loved one is in fact a puppy
and not a human being.
Secrets of the Deep – short story written by a student for the narrative assignment of their coursework
portfolio.
In this short story the narrator describes their experience of falling out of a sailing boat in a storm.
As the action rises, the reader is led to believe that narrator is going to drown, but then the storm
passes and the narrator survives. Throughout the story the narrator repeatedly mentions a turtle and
the reader begins to understand that the turtle is an important part of the story. The resolution comes
with the ending of the storm and the narrator’s survival. In the last paragraph the reader is left
guessing as to whether the narrator’s survival was because of luck, or because of the spirit of the
sea in the shape of the turtle.
Next steps
Learners could now write their own narrative using the tips and techniques they have learnt in this
Teaching Pack and some of the language techniques from the Figurative Language Teaching Packs.
Alternatively, you could give learners one of the narratives from the Developing ideas and Opinions
in a text Teaching Pack and ask learners to analyse the structure of the text, considering the
exposition, rising action, climax, falling action and resolution.
Lesson resources
This is a narrative hook from a well-known novel. Use the prompts to analyse why this is an
effective opening to a story.
Last night I dreamt I went to Manderley again. It seemed to me I stood by the iron gate leading
to the drive, and for a while I could not enter, for the way was barred to me. There was a padlock
and a chain upon the gate. I called in my dream to the lodge-keeper, and had no answer, and
peering closer through the rusted spokes of the gate I saw that the lodge was uninhabited.
Write down the evidence from the text that makes you think this and justify your choices.
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First person narrative. Unusual imagery. Figurative language. Third person narrative.
Dialogue. Setting. Introduction to character(s). Humour. Reported speech. Introduction to
themes. Sense of danger. Supernatural elements. Flashback. Tension.
Choose three of the features you have identified that you think will make a reader want to read
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Explain why you think this. Give suggestions for improvement if you have given the narrative
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This is a narrative hook from a well-known novel. Use the prompts to analyse why this is an
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It was a bright cold day in April, and the clocks were striking thirteen.
Write down the evidence from the text that makes you think this and justify your choices.
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First person narrative. Unusual imagery. Figurative language. Third person narrative.
Dialogue. Setting. Introduction to character(s). Humour. Reported speech. Introduction to
themes. Sense of danger. Supernatural elements. Flashback. Tension.
Choose three of the features you have identified that you think will make a reader want to read
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Explain why you think this. Give suggestions for improvement if you have given the narrative
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This is a narrative hook from a well-known novel. Use the prompts to analyse why this is an
effective opening to a story.
To Sherlock Holmes she was always the woman. I have seldom heard him mention her under
any other name.
What genre do you think this book is?
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Write down the evidence from the text that makes you think this and justify your choices.
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First person narrative. Unusual imagery. Figurative language. Third person narrative.
Dialogue. Setting. Introduction to character(s). Humour. Reported speech. Introduction to
themes. Sense of danger. Supernatural elements. Flashback. Tension.
Choose three of the features you have identified that you think will make a reader want to read
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This is a narrative hook from a well-known novel. Use the prompts to analyse why this is an
effective opening to a story.
In my younger and more vulnerable years my father gave me some advice that I’ve been turning
over in my mind ever since.
“Whenever you feel like criticising anyone,” he told me, “just remember that all the people in this
world haven’t had the advantages that you’ve had.”
What genre do you think this book is?
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Write down the evidence from the text that makes you think this and justify your choices.
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First person narrative. Unusual imagery. Figurative language. Third person narrative.
Dialogue. Setting. Introduction to character(s). Humour. Reported speech. Introduction to
themes. Sense of danger. Supernatural elements. Flashback. Tension.
Choose three of the features you have identified that you think will make a reader want to read
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Explain why you think this. Give suggestions for improvement if you have given the narrative
hook a low mark.
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This is a narrative hook from a well-known novel. Use the prompts to analyse why this is an
effective opening to a story.
The boy with fair hair lowered himself down the last few feet of rock and began to pick his way
towards the lagoon. Though he had taken off his school sweater and trailed it now from one
hand, his grey shirt stuck to him and his hair was plastered to his forehead. All around him the
long scar smashed into the jungle was a bath of heat. He was clambering heavily among the
creepers and broken trunks when a bird, a vision of red and yellow, flashed upwards with a
witch-like cry; and this cry was echoed by another.
What genre do you think this book is?
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Write down the evidence from the text that makes you think this and justify your choices.
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First person narrative. Unusual imagery. Figurative language. Third person narrative.
Dialogue. Setting. Introduction to character(s). Humour. Reported speech. Introduction to
themes. Sense of danger. Supernatural elements. Flashback. Tension.
Choose three of the features you have identified that you think will make a reader want to read
more of the story.
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What is the overall effect of this narrative hook on you?
Explain why you think this. Give suggestions for improvement if you have given the narrative
hook a low mark.
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Genre
Exposition (beginning)
Last night I dreamt I went to Manderley again. It seemed to me I stood by the iron gate leading to
the drive, and for a while I could not enter, for the way was barred to me. There was a padlock and
a chain upon the gate. I called in my dream to the lodge-keeper, and had no answer, and peering
closer through the rusted spokes of the gate I saw that the lodge was uninhabited.
It was a bright cold day in April, and the clocks were striking thirteen.
1984, George Orwell
To Sherlock Holmes she was always the woman. I have seldom heard him mention her under any
other name.
In my younger and more vulnerable years my father gave me some advice that I’ve been turning
over in my mind ever since.
“Whenever you feel like criticising anyone,” he told me, “just remember that all the people in this
world haven’t had the advantages that you’ve had.”
The Great Gatsby, F. Scott Fitzgerald
The boy with fair hair lowered himself down the last few feet of rock and began to pick his way
towards the lagoon. Though he had taken off his school sweater and trailed it now from one hand,
his grey shirt stuck to him and his hair was plastered to his forehead. All around him the long scar
smashed into the jungle was a bath of heat. He was clambering heavily among the creepers and
broken trunks when a bird, a vision of red and yellow, flashed upwards with a witch-like cry; and
this cry was echoed by another.
The Lord of the Flies, William Golding
The man in question was Mr Tom. He was a terrible man who always wore a disgusted frown on his
face. We considered it our great misfortune that he was our form teacher. Every day we had to see him;
a tall man with a hunched back watching and waiting to make sure we arrived to school on time, taking
great pleasure if we were so much as a few seconds late. His whole demeanour was one of anger and
irritation, which he took out on all of his learners, but particularly on Harry and I.
As we walked out of the examination hall having just finished our last exam Harry, my best friend, had
the most brilliant idea. He had decided it was time to get revenge on the man who had made our lives a
misery for the last twelve months.
Although it was pitch black we didn’t dare to use our torches because we would be spotted by the school
guards who continuously monitored the school grounds. It took some time, and a few falls, to navigate
our way across the dark muddy playing fields towards our goal; Mr Tom’s classroom. This was
conveniently situated at the far end of the school away from the other classrooms and out of sight of the
guards. Harry looked at the half glass, half wood classroom door which bore Mr Tom’s name in bold gold
letters across the top. The evil grin he wore on his face was one that even I had never seen before. I
watched in fascination, and then with growing horror as he pulled out a hammer from his backpack,
raised it high above his head and brought it down on the door with a force I would have never thought
possible from anyone, let alone a skinny 16-year-old boy! My heart thumped and I gulped as he gained
momentum with his destruction. Pieces of innocent glass shattered and scattered across the floor and a
hole big enough for both of us to pass through into the classroom appeared.
“Come on Foley! Don’t be a wimp!” Harry whispered three hours later as he leapt over the school fence
into the darkened grounds of the deserted school. I had begun to reconsider the wisdom of carrying out
the plan and was contemplating calling the whole thing off. But Harry’s urgent exclamation of “Come on
man, you only live once!” spurred me into action. I took a deep breath and leapt over the fence to land
panting and gasping on the other side; much to Harry’s great amusement. This was it. It was time for us
to carry out our plan.
Harry disliked Mr Tom even more than I did. He had never got over Mr Tom telling his parents about the
incident with the bread rolls in the canteen (that is another story!). Harry’s parents had been furious and
he was grounded for over two weeks. Ever since then Harry had been plotting his revenge against Mr
Tom and now seemed to be the time for action. As usual, he convinced me that his plan was fool proof. I
reluctantly, then with enthusiasm, joined Harry in carrying out his devilish plan.
As we walked out of the examination hall having just finished our last exam Harry, my best friend,
had the most brilliant idea. He had decided it was time to get revenge on the man who had made
our lives a misery for the last twelve months.
The man in question was Mr Tom. He was a terrible man who always wore a disgusted frown on his
face. We considered it our great misfortune that he was our form teacher. Every day we had to see
him; a tall man with a hunched back watching and waiting to make sure we arrived to school on time,
taking great pleasure if we were so much as a few seconds late. His whole demeanour was one of
anger and irritation, which he took out on all of his learners, but particularly on Harry and I.
Harry disliked Mr Tom even more than I did. He had never got over Mr Tom telling his parents about
the incident with the bread rolls in the canteen (that is another story!). Harry’s parents had been
furious and he was grounded for over two weeks. Ever since then Harry had been plotting his
revenge against Mr Tom and now seemed to be the time for action. As usual, he convinced me that
his plan was fool proof. I reluctantly, then with enthusiasm, joined Harry in carrying out his devilish
plan.
“Come on Foley! Don’t be a wimp!” Harry whispered three hours later as he leapt over the school
fence into the darkened grounds of the deserted school. I had begun to reconsider the wisdom of
carrying out the plan and was contemplating calling the whole thing off. But Harry’s urgent
exclamation of “Come on man, you only live once!” spurred me into action. I took a deep breath and
leapt over the fence to land panting and gasping on the other side; much to Harry’s great amusement.
This was it. It was time for us to carry out our plan.
Although it was pitch black we didn’t dare to use our torches because we would be spotted by the
school guards who continuously monitored the school grounds. It took some time, and a few falls, to
navigate our way across the dark muddy playing fields towards our goal; Mr Tom’s classroom. This
was conveniently situated at the far end of the school away from the other classrooms and out of
sight of the guards. Harry looked at the half glass, half wood classroom door which bore Mr Tom’s
name in bold gold letters across the top. The evil grin he wore on his face was one that even I had
never seen before. I watched in fascination, and then with growing horror as he pulled out a hammer
from his backpack, raised it high above his head and brought it down on the door with a force I would
have never thought possible from anyone, let alone a skinny 16-year-old boy! My heart thumped and
I gulped as he gained momentum with his destruction. Pieces of innocent glass shattered and
scattered across the floor and a hole big enough for both of us to pass through into the classroom
appeared.
We both froze for a second, then Harry dropped the hammer and made for a run for it. Feeling
absolutely terrified, I bolted straight after him. We blindly ran back across the darkened grounds,
desperately hoping we were going in the direction of the fence that we had so fearlessly crossed
what seemed like only moments earlier. The fence loomed up out of the darkness. Adrenaline surged
through my body as I took the biggest jump of my life and vaulted over the fence with only inches to
spare. Harry was already on the other side gasping for breath; but we weren’t out of danger yet. The
guards had slipped through a nearby gate and their booted feet shook the ground as they ran towards
us. Fortunately for us their older, heavier, frames were no match for us lithe, fast youngsters; within
minutes we had successfully evaded capture and had run off into the distance.
Panting like animals we stopped to catch our breath. Unexpectedly, Harry started to laugh. He
seemed to have had a good time! “Are you crazy! We almost got caught there!” I shouted at the top
of my voice.
“Not a chance.” he laughed, “They didn’t see our faces. They have no idea who we are.” This calmed
me a little and we started our long trek home.
As we turned the corner into our street, Harry suddenly stopped dead. “The backpack!” he exclaimed.
My heart sank. We were doomed! Both Harry and I knew that his backpack had his name on it, and
wherever Harry went, everybody knew I was always close behind. The guards were sure to find the
bag. They would know it was us. Gloomily I thought to myself: what could save us now? A prayer?
Definitely not after what we had done.