UNIT 2 , PART 3
DEVELOPING
YOUR IDEAS
IN THIS PART YOU WILL ...
. LEARN TO USE SPECIFIC LANGUAGE IN YOUR
WRITITING
. WRITE A FIRST DRAFT OF YOUR DESCRIPTIVE
PARAGRAPH
Exercise 1 :
.Read the paragraph, how does the "treasure" make the author feel?!
My special treasure
My special treasure is a picture of my mother on her fifteenth
birthday. This picture was always in my house when I was growing
up. Years later, when I got married and moved to Montreal, my
mother gave it to me so that I would always remember her. Now it
sits on the table next to my bed. I look at it and imagine my
mother's life on the table next to my bed. I look at it and imagine
my mother's life on that day. I think she was excited because her
eyes are shining with happiness. Her smile is shy as if she were
thinking about a secret. She is standing next to a rose bush, and the
roses are taller than she is. She is wearing a beautiful white lace
dress and black shoes. Her hair is long and curly. She looks lovely in
this peaceful place, and I feel calm when I gaze into her eyes at the
end of my busy day. This picture of my mother is my most valuable
possession.
Anwar Khalaf
Exercise 2 :
A- Respond to the paragraph by answering the questions
below in full sentences.
1- what is the author’s special treasure?
2-why does the author like this possession?
3- who gave it to the author?
4- what words does the author use to describe the
possession ?
Arwa Hazam
Exercise 3:
B- Examine the organization of the paragraph by answering the
question below. then compare your answers
with a partner.
1- Underline the topic sentence. What will the writer describe?
1 DESCRIBES A PICTURE OF HIS MOTHER
Describes a picture of his sister
3 Describes a picture of his father
Noir Abdi
2-Does the writer give details about how she got
the picture in the...?
1- first part of the paragraph
2- the middle part of the paragraph
3- does the writer describe what the picture
looks like in the ....?
1- the first part of the 2- the last part of the
paragraph. paragraph
Noir Abdi
4- Does the writer describe her thoughts and feelings about the
picture in the ...?
1- in the first part
2- in the middel part
in the last part
3-
5- Underline the concluding sentence twice. Does it
restate the idea in the topic sentence?
1- yes, he did or 2- no, he didn't
6- How many sentences are in the paragraph ..?
1- 11 sentences or 2- 12 sentences
Noir Abdi
Language Focus
Using Specific Language
Using specific language in descriptive writing helps give the reader a
clear mental image of what something looks, feels, sounds, or smells
like. Read the following examples. Which set of sentences has a
strönger effect?
General Sentences Sentences with Specific Language
He bought a vehicle He bought a 1965 Cadillac.
We heard a noise. We heard the sound of breaking glass.
Suddenly, 1 smelled food. Suddenly, I smelled steak and onions.
Amal Khaled
40
30
In the first column, the words are general and could be used to
,describe a variety of vehicles, noises, or food. In the second column 20
the writer has replaced the general terms with more specific words
for the topics being described. By doing this, the writer has made the 10
topic specific and clearer for the reader.
0
Item 4 Item 3 Item 2 Item 1
Amal Khaled
Exercise 3 Identifying Specific Language
Read the following pairs of sentences. Put a check (Right ) next to
.the sentence that is more specific
1.
a. I like to wear my grandmother's jewelry.
b. I like to wear my grandmother's pearl necklace. 2.
a. My best friend gave me a novel by Chang-Rae Lee for my birthday
3. .b. My best friend gave me a book for my birthday
.a. Someone lent her an umbrella
.b. Her father lent her an umbrella 4-
.a. I inherited some furniture
5- h. I inherited my grandmother's chair
a. Steve has a new laptop.
6-
.b. Steve has a new computer
,a. Jordan received a toy
Amina Faihan & Raeda Massad .b. Jordan received a teddy bear
Exercise 4 : adding specific details
Rewrite the following sentences. Replace the underlined
phrases with words that are more specific.
1- I bought a pair of running shoes.
I bought a pair of running shoes.
2. Maria found some jewelry in the basement. Manayer Noor &
Randa matar
3. My mother gave me some money
4. I like my desk.
5. My father enjoyed making things.
6. My grandparents collected souvenirs.
7. We always have yegetables with dinner
Exercise 5
Editing a paragraph for the specific language
A. Read the following paragraph. Underline five words or phrases that
,could be more specific. Then for each underlined word or phrase
write one question below that you could ask the writer to help him
.or her be more specific
My Lost Treasure Box
When I left my home town, my relative gave me a special box.
She said I could use the box to keep my special treasures. The box was
made of a special material, and it was painted a bright color. When I
opened it, it played a pretty song. I kept this box on my dresser and
I used it to store my things. Unfortunately, I lost my beautiful box
when I moved to a different city, but I will always remember it and my
.relative who gave it to me
Amani Sneed
1. What town did you come from?
2.
3.
4.
5.
6.
Falha Mflah
thank you for your follow-up
أنوار خلف 202103021 /
رائده مسعد202107398 /
اماني سنيد 202100911 /
class: 471 مناير نور 202103132 /
نوير العبدي202107364/
اروى حزام202101199 /
رنـدامطر 202106011 /
امل خالد202105347 /
امينه فيحان 202105629 /
فلحاء مفلح 202106184/
Dr. Hind
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