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Questions 1-5: Write a sentence based on a picture

Directions: In this part of the test, you will write ONE sentence that is based on a picture. With
each picture, you will be given TWO words or phrases that you must use in your sentence. You
can change the forms of the words and you can use the words in any order. Your sentences
will be scored on
• the appropriate use of grammar and
• the relevance of the sentence to the picture.
In this part, you can move to the next question by clicking on Next. If you want to return to a
previous question, click on Back. You will have 8 minutes to complete this part of the test.
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Directions: Write ONE sentence based on the picture. Use the TWO words or phrases under the picture.
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machine / key

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Question 1 Score, response, and examiner's comments

Score Point 3

He is using a machine to make keys.

This response is a 3 because it consists of one sentence that uses both key words
appropriately, has no grammatical errors, and is consistent with the picture.

Score Point 2

A man is looking into with his machine to find his keys.

This response is a 2 because it consists of one sentence that uses both words
correctly and that is consistent with the picture. However, it cannot receive a
higher score because there is a grammatical error: "looking into with his".

Score Point 1

There is a man reparimg

This response is a 1 because it omits both key words. In addition, it does not
complete the task of writing a grammatically correct sentence that is consistent
with the picture.

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 Question 2: Write a sentence based on a picture
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uniform / beside

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Question 2 Score, response, and examiner's comments

Score Point 3

A man is walking beside a lady wearing a uniform.

This response is a 3 because it has no grammatical errors, it contains both key

words used appropriately, and it is consistent with the picture.

Score Point 2

The man is walking beside a woman wear uniform.

This response is a 2 because it consists of one sentence that uses both words
correctly and is consistent with the picture. However, it cannot receive a higher
score because there is a grammatical error: " ... a woman wear ... ".

Score Point 1

Woman who work fligt center check garbages.

This response is a 1 because it omits both of the key words. In addition, it

contains several errors that interfere with meaning.

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Directions: Write ONE sentence based on the picture. Use the TWO words or phrases under the picture.
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Question 3 Score, response, and examiner's comments

Score Point 3

the street is blocked because of the construction.

This response is a 3 because it has no grammatical errors, it contains both key
words used appropriately, and it is consistent with the picture.

Score Point 2

The street seem crowded because of many pipes.

This response is a 2 because it consists of one sentence that uses both words
correctly and is consistent with the picture. However, it cannot receive a higher
score because there is a grammatical error: "The street seem ... ".

Score Point 1

IN NEWYORK,THE STREETS ARE MATERIAL

This response is a 1 because it omits one of the key words and contains errors
that interfere with meaning.

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Question 4: Write a sentence based on a picture
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Directions: Write ONE sentence based on the picture. Use the TWO words or phrases under the picture.
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Question 4 Score, response, and examiner's comments

Score Point 3

he is putting a flower on his desk for himself.

This response is a 3 because it has no grammatical errors, it contains both key

words used appropriately, and it is consistent with the picture.

Score Point 2

The man in the office is looking a small flower. He uses this for
arrangement of his office.

This response is a 2 because, although it contains both key words, they are not
used in the same sentence. In addition, the word "for" is not used properly.
Both sentences contain grammatical errors: " ... is looking a small ... " and" ... for
arrangement of his office".

Score Point 1

She like flower.

This response is a 1 because it omits one of the key words.

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 Question 5: Write a sentence based on a picture

Directions: Write ONE sentence based on the picture. Use the TWO words or phrases under the picture.
You may change the forms of the words and you may use them in any order.

whenever / hit

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Question 5 Score, response, and examiner's comments

Score Point 3

whenever she plays tennis, she hits many balls.

This response is a 3 because it has no grammatical errors, it contains both key

words used appropriately, and it is consistent with the picture.

Score Point 2

Whenever the person try to hit the ball, his racket wouldn't hit the ball.

This response is a 2 because it consists of one sentence that uses both words
correctly and is consistent with the picture. However, it cannot receive a higher
score because there is a grammatical error: " ... the person try ... ".

Score Point 1

whenever hit the ball, he lacket

This response is a 1 because it contains errors that interfere with meaning.

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Questions 1-5: Write a sentence based on a picture

Scoring Guidelines
3 The response consists of ONE sentence that:
• has no grammatical errors; AND
• contains forms of both key words used appropriately; AND
• is consistent with the picture.

2 The response may consist of one or more sentences that:

• have one or more grammatical errors that do not obscure the meaning; AND
• contain BOTH key words, but they may not be in the same sentence and
the form of the word(s) may not be accurate; AND
• are consistent with the picture.

The response:
• has errors that interfere with meaning; OR
• omits one or both key words; OR
• is not consistent with the picture.

o The response is blank, written in a foreign language, or consists of keystroke

characters.

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 Question 6: Respond to a written request

Questions 6-7: Respond to a written request

Directions: In this part of the test, you will show how well you can
write a response to an e-mail.

Your response will be scored on

• the quailty and variety of your sentences,

• vocabulary, and
• organization.

You will have 10 minutes to read and answer each e-mail.

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From: Monroe County Job Bureau

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Subject: Job Search Results: June 12
Sent: June 12. 8:32 A.M.

Good morning. The job posting for today is:

Job Title Company Contact Information
Strategic MEH Financial Angela Hewitt. Human Resources.
Marketing Planning [email protected]
Analyst Services

For more information, or to apply, please contact the company directly.

Directions: Respond to the e-mail as if you have received the e-mail from the Monroe County Job
Bureau. In your e-mail to Angela Hewitt, write at least ONE statement about your previous work
experience, and make at least TWO requests for information about the job.
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 Question 6 Score, response, and examiner's comments

Score Point 4

Dear Ms. Angela Hewitt,

I am interested in your company. I used to work in MNO Financial Group
as a strategic marketing analyst for 5 years.
Please send me your company's profile in details. And please tell me the
due date of the application.
I'm looking forward to your quick reply.
Thank you and best regards,

This response is a 4. It effectively addresses all the tasks in the prompt using
multiple sentences that clearly convey the information required by the prompt.
The response uses organizational logic, and the tone and register of the
response are appropriate.

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 Score Point 3

Hello Ms.Angela Hewitt,

Thank you for your information about a job. It seems suitable for me.
Because I had been working as a manager of marketing section for Syears.
Then I'd like to receive this job.
I have 2 more questions about the job.
When the job as the post start if I have been employed? And,
how much the salary for it?
I will be glad if I can have your answer by tomorrow.
Thank you, and best regards,

This response is a 3. It is mostly successful but falls short in addressing one of the
tasks required by the prompt. The response gives at least one statement about
the writer's previous working experience and makes one successful request for
information about the job. However, the other request for information about
the job is unsuccessful due to errors in grammar and usage: "When the job as
the post start if I have been employed?" The errors in this sentence obscure
the writer's meaning and therefore, the task is unsuccessful.

Score Point 2

Thanks you to make me a chance to request for a new job.

I want to make a request to a strategic Marketing Analyst for MEH Financial
Planning Services.
I have expereinced the same job for ABC Financial company in Tokyo.
I want to have an appointment to Angela, Human Resources whenever she want.

This response is a 2. It successfully addresses only one of the tasks required by the
prompt in that it makes a statement about previous work experience. It does not
however, make two requests for information about the new job. The meaning of
the first stated request is unclear; it uses the language of requesting and then
merely inserts the title of the job from the stimulus e-mail. The second attempt
at making a request concerns making an appointment; no request for
information about the job is made. In addition, the response shows a limited
awareness of audience, and errors in grammar and usage obscure meaning in the
first two sentences.

Score Point 1

Good morning.My job is Strategic Marketing Analyst,isn't it?

I'm to go the MEH Financial Planning Services by 10:00 P.M.
Is this time OK?lf I have something not to kown,1 send a e-mail to that
company.

This response is a 1. It addresses none of the required tasks, the connections

between ideas are missing, and the errors in grammar and usage obscure the
writer's meaning.

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Question 7: Respond to a written request

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Directions: Read the e-mail.

From: Carlton Peck, Director Technical Services

To: All engineering staff
Subject: Recent problems
Sent: March 9, 2:46 P.M.

I was recently informed that there have been a number of technical problems in
the engineering department recently, from telephone disturbances to computer
failures. To fix these problems, I must have a complete list of ALL of the problems,
the affected employees, and their locations. Please send this information to me as
soon as possible.

Directions: Respond to the e-mail as if you work at a company where Carlton Peck is the director
of technical services. In your e-mail, respond to his request, and tell him about ONE problem you
have been experiencing.
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Question 7 Score, response, and examiner's comments

Score Point 4

I have found some technical problems in the engineering department since I

worked the site.
There are total 4 problems to fix, and here is the list of them.
1. Telephone disturbances.
2. Computer Failures.
3. Network Connecting Failures.
4. Interphone Disturbances.
I have been often experiencing Network Connecting Failures since I work at
Information Center at 7th floor.
Whenever I need to connect lines between 7th floor and 4th floor, it didn't
work.
Please fix it right away.
Information Center at 7th floor is the most affected by these technical
problems, but all of offices at the 7th floor are known t

This response is a 4. It effectively addressesall the tasks required by the prompt.

It usesorganizational logic to create coherence among sentences.Although the
writer does not address Mr. Peck in the e-mail, the tone and register are
appropriate to the intended audience. Isolated errors in usage do not interfere
with meaning.

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 Score Point 3

Dear Mr. Carlton Peck.

Regarding your e-mail about the problems, I have several things to tell you.
There have been frequent black-out in my office - Human Resources
Department. I remember it's three times only in this month, so we had lost
lots of important data.
You should have informed the black-out in advance.
There many be some miscommunication.
Please, let this happen again.

This response is a 3. It is mostly successful,but falls short in addressing one of

the tasks required by the prompt. Two of the required tasks are successfully
completed: telling Mr. Peckabout one problem the writer is experiencing and
the location ("my office - Human ResourcesDepartment"). However, one of the
required tasks, indicating which employees are affected, is not completed. The
writer notes that "we had lost ... data" but does not elaborate on who "we"
are. In addition, noticeable errors in grammar and usage are present. The
response shows some awareness of the audience and usesorganizational logic.

Score Point 2

dear Carlton Peck

I have a troble on my personal computer distributed from my company to
apply the work. My pc does not reach a condition to use it. In some case
afer swithing on It can not start windows OSrestart by himself,again and
again

This response is a 2. It addressesonly one of the tasks required by the prompt:

telling Mr. Peckabout one problem the writer is experiencing. The response
does not include information about other employees affected or their locations
In addition, errors in grammar and usage obscure meaning in the first two
sentences and then again at the very end.

Score Point 1

In my department, A number of technical problems have occur recently.

The problem's cause is very complex. But

This response is a 1. It addressesnone of the required tasks, although it include

some content relevant to the stimulus.

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Questions 6-7: Respond to a written request
Scoring Guidelines
4 The response e-mail effectively addresses all the tasks in the prompt using
multiple sentences that clearly convey the information, instructions,
questions, etc., required by the prompt.

• the response uses organizational logic or appropriate connecting words or

both to create coherence among sentences
• the tone and register of the response is appropriate for the intended
audience
• a few isolated errors in grammar or usage may be present but do not
obscure the writer's meaning

3 The response e-mail is mostly successful but falls short in addressing one of
the tasks required by the prompt.

• the response may omit, respond unsuccessfully, or respond incompletely to

ONE of the required tasks
• the response uses organizational logic or appropriate connecting words in
at least part of the response
• the response shows some awareness of audience
• noticeable errors in grammar and usage may be present; ONE sentence
may contain errors that obscure meaning

2 The response e-mail is marked by several weaknesses:

• the response may address only ONE of the required tasks or may
unsuccessfully or incompletely address TWO OR THREE of the required
tasks
• connections between ideas may be missing or obscure
• the response may show little awareness of audience
• errors in grammar and usage may obscure meaning in MORE THAN ONE
sentence

The response e-mail is seriously flawed and conveys little or no information,

instructions, questions, etc., required by the prompt.

• the response addresses NONE of the required tasks, although it may

include some content relevant to stimulus
• connections between ideas are missing or obscure
• the tone or register may be inappropriate for the audience
• frequent errors in grammar and usage obscure the writer's meaning most
of the time

o A response at this level merely copies words from the prompt or stimulus,
rejects the topic or is otherwise not connected to the topic, is written in a
language other than English, consists of keystroke characters that convey no
meaning, or is blank.

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