01 Paraphrasing - UTS - Sts
01 Paraphrasing - UTS - Sts
01 Paraphrasing - UTS - Sts
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C Decide which paraphrase is better. (NB! Remember, your essay should not
just be one long paraphrase, even a good paraphrase!)
2. Adverts for the soft drink, Tango, have recently been banned for possibly
encouraging playground bullying.
Paraphrase 1
Advertising for the fizzy drink, Tango, have been disallowed recently for potentially
leading to school bullying.
Paraphrase 2
A ban on Tango adverts has been implemented recently, as some felt the content
could encourage school bullies.
3. Opinion is divided over what impact, if any, advertising has on children. What is
beyond question is that many people, parents in particular are worried about its
effects. 88% of Swedes supported their government’s ban on children’s TV adverts
in 1991 (Willows, 2009) while 36% of adults in the UK thought that advertising was
damaging to their children (Sidle, 2011).
Paraphrase 1
There is little agreement on the effect of advertising on children, though it is
undoubtedly a concern, especially for parents. When Sweden banned children’s TV
adverts in 1991, 88% of the population supported the decision (Willows, 2009),
while in the UK, over a third of adults thought advertising could damage their
children (Sidle, 2011).
Paraphrase 2
Views vary on what possible effect advertising can have on the young. What is
without doubt is that most people, especially parents, are concerned about the
impact. 88% of Swedish people were in favour of their government’s ban on
advertising on children’s television (Willows, 2009), and in the UK, 36% of adults
believed adverts were harmful to their offspring (Sidle, 2011).
The United States, Germany, Japan and other industrial powers are being
transformed from industrial economies to knowledge and information based service
economies, whilst manufacturing has been moving to low wage countries. In a
knowledge and information based economy, knowledge and information are the key
ingredients in creating wealth.
(Source: Laudon & Laudon 2002, Management information systems: managing the digital firm, Prentice Hall, New Jersey.)
ACTIVITY 2
Read the two paraphrases of the original text below. Select the statement that describes the
most appropriate paraphrase.
Paraphrase 1
The United States, Germany, Japan and other economies are being dramatically
changed from industrial economies to knowledge and information based service
economies as manufacturing shifts to countries where the wages are low cost. In a
knowledge and information based economies, knowledge and information are the
focus in economic growth (Laudon & Laudon 2002).
Paraphrase 2
There has been a dramatic change in economies such as the United States, Japan and
Germany from industrial to service economies involved in knowledge and
information. As manufacturing shifts to countries where wages are low, economic
growth and information economies must focus on knowledge and information
production (Laudon & Laudon 2002).
(a) Paraphrase 1 is acceptable because it closely follows the sentence structure of the
original.
(b) Both paraphrases are acceptable because some of the keywords have been changed.
(c) Paraphrase 2 is not acceptable because the sentence structure has been changed.
(d) Paraphrase 2 is acceptable because both the sentence structure and the keywords have
been changed.
(e) Paraphrase 2 is unacceptable because the subject of the first sentence is different from
the original, i.e. ‘dramatic change’ rather than ‘the United States, Germany and Japan’.
ACTIVITY 3
Find the words in Paraphrase 2 that replace the key words in the original text highlighted in
blue below.
Paraphrase 2
The United States, Germany, Japan and other industrial powers are being
transformed from industrial economies to knowledge and information based service
economies, whilst manufacturing has been moving to low wage countries. In a
knowledge and information based economy, knowledge and information are the key
ingredients in creating wealth.
transformed = _______________________
whilst = _______________________
ACTIVITY 4
Build a paraphrase. Read the original text below and build a paraphrase from the selection
of phrases provided on the next page.
Information systems make it possible for business to adopt flatter, more decentralised
structures and more flexible arrangements for employees and management. Organisations
are trying to become more competitive and efficient by transforming themselves intro digital
firms where nearly all core business process and relationships with customers, suppliers and
employees are digitally managed (Laudon & Laudon 2002).
How would you begin your paraphrase?
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You can also compare your paraphrase with a sample version overleaf.