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COM4805 – Additional Reading for Assignment 01

Fourth Industrial Revolution (4IR)

Tsado, A. 2020. Lost History of Africa’s Innovative Past, and Its Place in Today’s AI Revolution. [O].
Available: https://www.alliance4ai.org/lost-history-of-africas-innovative-past-and-its-place-in-the-ai-
revolution/ (Accessed 8 May 2020).

Trialogue. 2020. Business in society handbook. [O]. Available: www.trialogue.co.za (Accessed 14

January 2021). Specifically pages 214 – 216 by Dr Adheesh Budree

Artificial Intelligence (AI)

Donald, M. 2019. Leading and managing change in the age of disruption and artificial intelligence.
London: Emerald.

https://doi.org/10.1108/978-1-78756-367-420191004

Gershon, RA. 2017. Digital Media and Innovation II Personalization, Mobility, Convergence, and
Artificial Intelligence, in Digital Media and Innovation: Management and Design Strategies in
Communication, edited by RA Gershon. Thousand Oaks: Sage: 159-175.
http://dx.doi.org/10.4135/9781483399836.n9

Siau, KL & Yang, Y. 2017. Impact of Artificial Intelligence, Robotics, and Machine Learning on Sales and
Marketing, paper read at MWAIS 2017. [O]. Available: http://aisel.aisnet.org/mwais2017/48
(Accessed on 5 April 2021).

Internet of Things (IoT)

Anurag. 2020. Impact of Internet of Things on the business world. [O]. Available:
https://www.newgenapps.com/blog/impact-of-internet-of-things-on-the-business-world/

(Accessed on 5 April 2021).

Malliaris, M. 2018. Internet of Things (IoT), in The SAGE Encyclopedia of Business Ethics and Society,
edited by RW Kolb. Thousand Oaks: Sage: 1924-1926.
http://dx.doi.org/10.4135/9781483381503.n639

McKinsey Global Institute. 2015. The internet of things: mapping the value beyond the hype. [O].
Available:
https://www.mckinsey.com/~/media/McKinsey/Industries/Technology%20Media%20and%20Teleco
mmunications/High%20Tech/Our%20Insights/The%20Internet%20of%20Things%20The%20value%2
0of%20digitizing%20the%20physical%20world/Unlocking_the_potential_of_the_Internet_of_Things
_Executive_summary.pdf (Accessed on 5 April 2021)

Augmented Reality (AR)

Tom Dieck, MC & Jung, T. 2019. Augmented reality and virtual reality: the power of AR and VR for
business. Springer.

https://0-link-springer-com.oasis.unisa.ac.za/book/10.1007%2F978-3-030-06246-0

Kipper, G & Rampolla, J. 2012. Augmented reality: an emerging technologies guide to AR. Syngress.
https://doi.org/10.1016/C2011-0-04606-9

Big Data

Wiesenberg, M, Zerfass, A & Moreno, A. 2017. Big data and automation in strategic communication.
Strategic Communication, International Journal of Strategic Communication 11(2):95-114.
https://doi.org/10.1080/1553118X.2017.1285770 (Accessed on 5 April 2021).

Fink, AA. 2017. Big data: implications for organizations, in The SAGE encyclopedia of industrial and
organizational psychology, edited by SG Rogelberg. Thousand Oaks: Sage: 107-112.
http://dx.doi.org/10.4135/9781483386874.n41

Foster, B. 2018. Big data, in The SAGE Encyclopedia of Business Ethics and Society, edited by RW Kolb.
Thousand Oaks: Sage: 250-254.
http://dx.doi.org/10.4135/9781483381503.n102
 RESULTS
Total = 70 / 100 (70%)
 COMMENTS
1 Penalty will apply for next assignment
2 This assignment was assessed by External Marker : P Le Roux
3 Thank you for submitting your assignment. Please find some guiding comments inside to consider
when you revise this assignment for the examination later. Click on all yellow sticky notes and review
red blocks for additional comments. You are also welcome to contact : Prof Charmaine du Plessis, tel
no (012) 429 6525 or [email protected] direct, if you have further extraordinary / queries related to
my assessment here. Good luck with other following assignments.
4 Be careful when it comes to similarity with others' work.Use quotation marks for defintions
5 Good discussion of the theory and answers were comprehensive with theoretical depth and example.
Do not hesitate to express own opinions critically after reading and research? Technically some issues
still to notice. Well done so far.
6 this does not belong here. delete
7 conclusion is missing here. insert
8 Rephrase all highlighted areas in your own words. A penalty will apply for the next assignment
9 Here, you might want to mention the SONA address of President Ramaphosa in terms of the Fourth
Revolution which is upon us and its implications for business and our country?
10 Be careful in academic writing not to immediately start with your theoretical discussion in the
Introduction which is supposed to be an OVERVIEW of the area/s which will be covered? You will find
guidelines in Tut Letter 101/0/2021 and CMNHONE/301/2021 on how to write an Introduction and what
should be in it. Revise
11 Rather develop a heading here and don't include under Introduction as this already forms part of the
main discussion? Example: 2 MAIN FIVE NEW TECHNOLOGIES IN THE WORKPLACE
12 IoTs
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Hologram label technologies are already employed in the Cape Argus bicycle race f. e. to track cyclists
during the race
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