考官华丽雅思大作文详解 1：原因分析题型电影话题

Simon 是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界的
考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的建议，
甚至还有不少 Simon 本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英国考官之
手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相比，着实让
人眼前一亮。小站的 Phoebe 老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正可以提分的
好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，相信大家都
可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文!

今天我们来看一篇大作文，题目是：
Many people prefer to watch foreign films rather than locally produced
films. Why could this be?
Should governments give more financial support to local film industries?

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为什么人们更喜欢外国电影?政府应该支持本土电影吗?Simon 管这种题目叫
“Two-Part Question”，并且建议大家这种文章要写成四段，每段具体内容：
1. Introduction: topic + general answer to both questions
2. Answer the first question
3. Answer the second question
4. Conclusion: paraphrase the answer you gave in the introduction
Simon 说，Introduction 段可以只写两句，第一句引入主题，第二句表明立场。
如：It is true that foreign films are more popular in many countries than
domestically produced films. There could be several reasons why this is
the case, and I believe that governments should promote local film-making
by subsidizing the industry.
第二段和第三段为主体段落，Simon 建议大家每段各写五句话，写之前大家可以
发散一下思维，简要列出每一句的论据分别写什么。下面是 Simon 给出的每段的
大纲：
First main paragraph: Why could this be?
1. Topic sentence - several reasons
2. First reason - budgets for action, special effects, spectacular
locations
3. Example - Hollywood blockbusters like Avatar or James Bond films
4. Second reason - the most famous actors, actresses and directors
5. Final reason - poor quality local filmmaking in many countries
Second main paragraph: Should governments give financial support?
1. Topic sentence - governments should support local film industries
2. Explain why - talented local film-makers need opportunities
3. Explain more - they need money to pay film crews, actors etc.
4. Explain consequences - would lead to employment, income, tourism
5. Example - invent an example about your country!
想好这五点之后，就很容易把这五句话串连成一个段落了，来看看 Simon 是如何
将大纲中的词汇短语转化成一个个完整的句子的：There are several reasons
why many people find foreign films more enjoyable than the films produced
in their own countries. Firstly, the established film industries in
certain countries have huge budgets for action, special effects and to
shoot scenes in spectacular locations. Hollywood blockbusters like
‘Avatar’ or the James Bond films are examples of such productions, and
their global appeal is undeniable. Another reason why these big-budget
films are so successful is that they often star the most famous actors
and actresses, and they are made by the most accomplished producers and
directors. The poor quality, low-budget filmmaking in many countries
suffers in comparison.
结论段 Simon 是这样写的：
In conclusion, I believe that increased financial support could help to
raise the quality of locally made films and allow them to compete with
the foreign productions that currently dominate the market.
我们可以看出：1，结论段是在改述 Introduction 段; 2，他在结论段中有改两
个 Part 的顺序——先说 Financial Support 再说外国电影的流行。对于不知道
结尾段落该写什么的同学，这两点可以是非常好的借鉴。

接下来 Phoebe 老师就帮大家贴出完整版的满分作文供大家参考背诵：

It is true that foreign films are more popular in many countries than
domestically produced films. There could be several reasons why this is
the case, and I believe that governments should promote local film-making
by subsidizing the industry.
There are various reasons why many people find foreign films more
enjoyable than the films produced in their own countries. Firstly,
the established film industries in certain countries have huge budgets
for action, special effects and to shoot scenes in spectacular
locations. Hollywood blockbusters like ‘Avatar’ or the James Bond
films are examples of such productions, and their global appeal is
undeniable. Another reason why these big-budget films are so successful
is that they often star the most famous actors and actresses, and they
are made by the most accomplished producers and directors. The poor
quality, low-budget filmmaking in many countries suffers in comparison.
In my view, governments should support local film industries financially.
In every country, there may be talented amateur film-makers who just need
to be given the opportunity to prove themselves. To compete with
big-budget productions from overseas, these people need money to pay for
film crews, actors and a host of other costs related to producing
high-quality films. If governments did help with these costs, they would
see an increase in employment in the film industry, income from film sales,
and perhaps even a rise in tourist numbers. New Zealand, for example, has
seen an increase in tourism related to the 'Lord of the Rings' films, which
were partly funded by government subsidies.
In conclusion, I believe that increased financial support could help to
raise the quality of locally made films and allow them to compete with
the foreign productions that currently dominate the market.
(294 words, band 9)
Last but not the least, Phoebe 老师又要帮大家分析满分作文里面的词汇啦~
Subsidizing 这个词大家眼熟吗?其名词形式 Subsidy 在剑七 Test2 的阅读中有
出现过，和 Allowance 做同义替换，意为补贴。
Established 的动词形式大家用得比较多，加 ed 变为形容词，意为既有的。
Accomplished 同样是 v.变 adj.，意为精通的，熟练的。大家要学会灵活使用这
类形容词。
Blockbuster 和 Shoot Scenes 这些和电影有关的词汇大家要记牢，可以用于口
语表达中。
Financially 不仅是对题目表达的替换，而且形容词变副词的用法也很灵活。
Dominate 大家背完这个单词不知道怎么用的话就背下来这个短语 Dominate the
market，“在市场占据主导地位”。
今天小站的 Phoebe 老师先帮大家整理到这，下期见！需要更多写作技巧的点击
这里！

考官华丽雅思大作文详解 2：同意与否题型

Simon 是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界的
考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的建议，
甚至还有不少 Simon 本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英国考官之
手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相比，着实让
人眼前一亮。小站的 Phoebe 老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正可以提分的
好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，相信大家都
可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文!
今天我们来分析一篇在观点上 partly agree 的大作文。以一篇大家经常会遇到
的有关 Traditional Views 的作文为例，题目如下：
The older generations tend to have very traditional ideas about how people
should live, think and behave. However, some people believe that these
ideas are not helpful in preparing younger generations for modern life.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this view?
看到这种问 agree 还是 disagree 的题目，大家先不要急于写作，Simon 建议大
家先来回答以下三个问题并做些笔记：
1. What arguments and examples could you use to agree?
2. What arguments and examples could be used to disagree?
3. Which answer would you find easier: agree, disagree or partly agree?
Plan Your Idea
当同意和不同意都有一样多的论据可以陈述时，那我们在第一段 Introduction
段落中，就要表明自己对该问题 partly agree。然后就要进行 Plan Your Idea，
即把每段要写的内容列成大概题纲。可能有同学会觉得这样会浪费时间，但
Simon 认为，如果你不 plan your idea 的话，很可能写到一半就不知道该写什
么好，甚至会写跑题。接下来看一下对于这篇文章 Simon 是如何 plan his idea
的：
4-paragraph plan:
1. Introduce the topic of 'traditional ideas and modern life', then partly
agree: some ideas are outdated, but others are still helpful
2. Paragraph about ideas which are not so helpful nowadays:
Work - having a career for life is no longer normal
Relationships - 'rules' about who and when to marry are changing
Gender roles - traditional fixed roles of men and women have changed
3. Paragraph about traditional ideas which we shouldn't forget:
Work - work hard, do your best, take pride in your work
Behaviour - politeness, good manners, respect for others
Community - help others, be a good neighbour, look after local area
4. Conclusion: repeat / summarise the answer
Structure 有多重要？
首先大家可能已经发现，Simon 写的大作文基本都是四个段落，小站老师在整理
Simon 给学生留学做回复时发现这样的问答：
"Hi Simon. I used your 4-paragraph structure with short introduction and
conclusion, but I only got band 6.5. I need a band 7, so should I try a
different structure?"
Simon：Can you see what is wrong with this question? The student is assuming
that essay structure is the secret to a high score. But remember: even
a great essay structure is nothing without good content (ideas, vocabulary,
correct grammar). If you're stuck on band 6 or 6.5, you probably need to
improve the content, not the structure.
小站老师认为 Simon 说得非常对，作文的结构只是骨骼，其内容才是肉肉，观点、
词汇、正确的语法方能让作文美观饱满。
Introduction 段落的写法
然后，我们看一下对于 partly agree 的作文 Simon 是如何写 Introduction 段落
的：
It is true that many older people believe in traditional values that often
seem incompatible with the needs of younger people. While I agree that
some traditional ideas are outdated, I believe that others are still
useful and should not be forgotten.
Simon 用了 It is true that…. While I agree…, I believe that…句型来分
别陈述两边观点，这个句型非常灵活好用，建议大家立刻记在小本本上。
主体段落的写法
再来看 Simon 是如何写一个主体段落的：
In my opinion, some traditional views and values are certainly applicable
to the modern world. For example, older generations attached great
importance to working hard, doing one’s best, and taking pride in one’
s work, and these behaviours can surely benefit young people as they enter
today’s competitive job market. Other characteristics that are perhaps
seen as traditional are politeness and good manners. In our globalised
world, young adults can expect to come into contact with people from a
huge variety of backgrounds, and it is more important than ever to treat
others with respect. Finally, I believe that young people would lead
happier lives if they had a more ‘old-fashioned’ sense of community and
neighbourliness.
主体段落依然是五句话(topic sentence and 3 points),将上面 ideas 里面的核
心词汇有逻辑地串连起来。
接下来 Pheobe 老师帮大家贴出完整的范文：
It is true that many older people believe in traditional values that often
seem incompatible with the needs of younger people. While I agree that
some traditional ideas are outdated, I believe that others are still
useful and should not be forgotten.
On the one hand, many of the ideas that elderly people have about life
are becoming less relevant for younger people. In the past, for example,
people were advised to learn a profession and find a secure jobfor
life, but today’s workers expect much more variety and diversity from
their careers. At the same time, the ‘rules’ around relationships are
being eroded as young adults make their own choices about who and when
to marry. But perhaps the greatest disparity between the generations
can be seen in their attitudes towards gender roles. The traditional roles
of men and women, as breadwinners and housewives, are no longer
accepted as necessary or appropriate by most younger people.
On the other hand, some traditional views and values are certainly
applicable to the modern world. For example, older generations attach
great importance to working hard, doing one’s best, and taking pride in
one’s work, and these behaviours can surely benefit young people as they
enter today’s competitive job market. Other characteristics that are
perhaps seen as traditional are politeness and good manners. In
ourglobalised world, young adults can expect to come into contact with
people from a huge variety of backgrounds, and it is more important than
ever to treat others with respect. Finally, I believe that young people
would lead happier lives if they had a more ‘old-fashioned’ sense
of community and neighbourliness.
In conclusion, although the views of older people may sometimes seem
unhelpful in today’s world, we should not dismiss all traditional ideas
as irrelevant.
(299 words, band 9)
Last but not the least,来帮大家总结分析范文中的词汇，供大家参考背诵。
incompatible:中文意为不和谐，容易让学生以为这个词只能用来形容社会，而
英文释意 two actions, ideas, etc. that areincompatible are not acceptable
or possible together because of basic differences,所以建议大家背单词时
多看英文释意，有助于准确运用词汇。
relevant:一对反义词，即可表示和...紧密相关，也可以表示有重要价值或意义。
反义 irrelevant
profession:我们背过很多表示专业的单词，如 major,subject,当表达学习一个
专业本领去找工作时用 profession
disparity:差异，不同，比 difference 高级多了
globalised world:常用基本表达，需背熟
sense of:表达抽象意义的感觉，如 sense of direction 方向感，sense of
satisfaction 满足感
dismiss:大家最熟悉的意思是“解雇”，记住这个短语 dismiss...as,英文释意
to decide that sb/sth is not important and not worth thinking or talking
about
今天就到这里，大家下期见！需要更多写作技巧的点击这里！
考官华丽雅思大作文详解 3：家庭中男女分工

Simon 是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界的
考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的建议，
甚至还有不少 Simon 本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英国考官之
手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相比，着实让
人眼前一亮。小站的 Phoebe 老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正可以提分的
好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，相信大家都
可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文!

今天我们来讲一篇大作文，以一些 Family Topic 的作文为例，重点讲一下什么

是文章的 Skeleton。
Simon 说，the skeleton (or framework or basic structure) of a task 2 essay
is:
- the introduction
- topic sentences for main paragraphs
- and the conclusion
就是说，他认为文章的 Skeleton(就是文章的框架或基本结构)就是开头介绍、
主体段落和结论段落。在写作文之前先写 Skeleton 我们来看一下 Simon 写的一
个 Skeleton：
..........
People have different views about whether parents or schools should bear
the responsibility for helping children to become good citizens. In my
view, this responsibility should be shared.
On the one hand, parents certainly have a vital role to play in the
upbringing of their children.
On the other hand, school teachers may contribute almost as much as parents
to the development of a child.
In conclusion, both parents and schools should work together to ensure
that young people become polite and productive members of society.
..........
大家可以看出，Simon 写的 Skeleton 已经把这篇作文的信息表达得非常清楚了，
惟一缺失的就是主体段落，即第二、三段中的细节。Simon 建议大家在写作文之
前都把 Skeleton 写到这种程度。
接下来给大家带来 Simon 最著名的建议之大作文只要写 13 句。分布在各个段落
中的名子数量如下：
· Introduction: 2 sentences
· First main body paragraph: 5 sentences
· Second main body paragraph: 5 sentences
· Conclusion: 1 sentence
有的同学可能会担心字数太少，Simon 说如果大家看他的作文看多了, you'll
see that I usually manage to write 250 words or more in this way. I think
it seems a lot less scary if you think that your task is to write just
13 sentences!
雅思考官的满分作文都写 250+，所以大家也不必一味追求字数，重点还是在于
文章的内容，当然了，13 句话也不是绝对的，Simon 提醒大家: It is not a 'rule'
that you must write 13 sentences. This is just my approach or method.
大家写作文的时候要根据自己的情况而定。
接下来以这篇作文为例，大家先自己试着写一下 Skeleton，然后和 Simon 写的
做下比较
These days more fathers stay at home and take care of their children while
mothers go out to work. What could be the reasons for this? Do you think
it is a positive or a negative development?
Here's Simon’s sample essay skeleton:
Introduction
It is true that men are increasingly likely to take on the role of
househusband, while more women than ever are the breadwinners in their
families. There could be several reasons for this, and I consider it to
be a very positive trend.
Main body 1, topic sentence
In recent years, parents have had to adapt to various changes in our
societies.
Main body 2, topic sentence
In my view, the changes described above should be seen as progress.
Conclusion
In conclusion, the changing roles of men and women in the family are a
result of wider changes in society, and I believe that these developments
are desirable.
大家的 Skeleton 是否清晰表达了整篇文章的观点和结构呢?是否发现自己写的
文章比以往更加精简了呢?Simon 说，For many of the students I've taught,
a breakthrough (or big improvement) came when they found the confidence
to write in a more 'simple' way. Simon 认为，当你不再纠结文章中是否包
含 passives, conditionals or 'difficult academic words' 的时候，you are
free to focus on answering the question and explaining your ideas
coherently.你就会将注意力放在如何顺畅地表达你的观点。 It takes
confidence to change your approach and to believe that the 'simple' way
will work.这会更加自信用更加 simple 的方式来写作。
小站老师提醒大家，这里说的 Simple，绝对不是 Easy!要想写出高分文章，还是
要在 Vocabulary、Grammar、Idea 三个方面下苦功!
这就贴出完整范文：
It is true that men are increasingly likely to take on the role of
househusband, while more women than ever are the breadwinners in their
families. There could be several reasons for this, and I consider it to
be a very positive trend.
In recent years, parents have had to adapt to various changes in our
societies. Equal rights movements have made great progress, and it has
become normal for women to gain qualifications and pursue a career. It
has also become socially acceptable for men to stay at home and look after
their children. At the same time, the rising cost of living has meant that
both marriage partners usually need to work and save money before starting
a family. Therefore, when couples have children, they may decide who works
and who stays at home depending on the personal preference of each partner,
or based on which partner earns the most money.
In my view, the changes described above should be seen as progress. We
should be happy to live in a society in which men and women have equal
opportunities, and in which women are not put under pressure
to sacrificetheir careers. Equally, it seems only fair that men should
be free to leave their jobs in order to assumechildcare responsibilities
if this is what they wish to do. Couples should be left to make their own
decisions about which parental role each partner takes, according to their
particular circumstances and needs.
In conclusion, the changing roles of men and women in the family are a
result of wider changes in society, and I believe that these developments
are desirable.
(274 words, band 9)
Last but not the least,小站的 Phoebe 老师来帮大家整理一下范文中的重点词
汇~
breadwinners:非常有趣的合成词，字面上“挣面包的人”，引申为“养家糊口
的人”
equal rights movements:这个词组也经常被用到女性话题的大作文中，“平等
权利运动”
qualifications:“资历，资格”，非常高频的单词，它的各种形式都要背牢。
sacrifice their careers:“牺牲事业”。小站老师建议大家单词最好放到词组
里背，这样才能知道怎么单词怎么用
assume:这里表示“承担”。另外一个意思在雅思考试中也很常见，“假定”
今天就到这里，希望能够对大家有所帮助，下期见！需要更多写作技巧的点击这
里！

simon 考官华丽雅思大作文详解 4：野生动物篇

Simon 是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界的
考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的建议，
甚至还有不少 Simon 本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英国考官之
手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相比，着实让
人眼前一亮。小站的 Phoebe 老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正可以提分的
好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，相信大家都
可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文!
 今天我们来看一篇以 Wild Animal 为 Topic 的大作文。 首先看一下题目：
Wild animals have no place in the 21st century, so protecting them is
a waste of resources. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
显然这道题是属于 agree or disagree 类型的，对于这种题型，第一步就是要确
定你是 agree, disagree 还是 partly agree. 就这道题目而言，要么选择保护
动物，珍视动物资源，要么选择无需保护动物资源，似乎很难做到 partly agree。
Simon 也建议大家选择“Completely disagree”。
确定观点之后，我们一如既往地，need a 4-paragraph plan.大家先试着写一下
自己的 plan，写好后来看一下 Simon 写的：
• Introduce the topic (rights and protection of wild animals), then answer the question (completely
disagree)
• First reason why we disagree e.g. our duty to protect animals, their rights and place in the world
• Second reason why we disagree e.g. the resources we should use to protect animals, and why this
is not a waste
• Conclusion: repeat / summarise our answer

如果把写作文比作盖房子的话，那 Structure 就是房梁，房梁搭建好了接下就是

最重要的环节，填补 Ideas。你能不能为第二段和第三段想到有深度有见解的
Ideas 将直接决定你的考试分数。所以大家平时要多多练习写作，尽量多的去为
想论据，丰富中心思想。
而对于 Introduction 和 Conclusion 段落，大家要记住 Simon 的话：
The introduction and conclusion should be short, quick and direct. If you
want a high score, spend your time on the main body.
我们来看一下 Simon 是如何写首尾段落的：
Introduction (topic + general answer)
Some people argue that it is pointless to spend money on the protection
of wild animals because we humans have no need for them. I completely
disagree with this point of view.
Conclusion (paraphrase the answer)
In conclusion, we have no right to decide whether or not wild animals
should exist, and I believe that we should do everything we can to protect
them.
大家可以看出，Simon 写得简短直接，干净利落。首段引出 Topic 直接给出观点，
尾段复述观点。文章的重心全部放在 Body Paragraph，再次印证了那句“思想
境界有多高，分数就有多高”。

现在帮大家贴出完整范文：
Some people argue that it is pointless to spend money on the
protection of wild animals because we humans have no need for them. I
completely disagree with this point of view.
In my opinion, it is absurd to argue that wild animals have no place
in the 21st century. I do not believe that planet Earth exists only for
the benefit of humans, and there is nothing special about this particular
century that means that we suddenly have the right to allow or encourage
the extinction of any species. Furthermore, there is no compelling
reason why we should let animals die out. We do not need to exploit or
destroy every last square metre of land in order to feed or
accommodate the world’s population. There is plenty of room for us to
exist side by side with wild animals, and this should be our aim.
I also disagree with the idea that protecting animals is a waste of
resources. It is usually the protection of natural habitats that ensures
the survival of wild animals, and most scientists agree that these
habitats are also crucial for human survival. For example, rainforests
produce oxygen, absorb carbon dioxide andstabilise the Earth’s climate.
If we destroyed these areas, the costs of managing the resulting changes
to our planet would far outweigh the costs of conservation. By
protecting wild animals and their habitats, we maintain the natural
balance of all life on Earth.
In conclusion, we have no right to decide whether or not wild animals
should exist, and I believe that we should do everything we can to protect
them.
(269 words, band 9)
最后是本文重点词汇总结，很多单词大家都认识，但是却不知道如何使用地更加
地道，小站老师再次建议大家通过记词组的形式去背单词，总结如下：
it is pointless to do 做...无意义
it is absurd to do 做...很荒谬
extinction=die out 动物类写作、阅读、听力都非常常见的词汇，“灭绝”
compelling reason 令人信服的原因，compelling 可替换为 convincing
feed or accommodate the world’s population 通过这个词组掌握 feed 和
accommodate 的具体用法
stabilise:stable 大家都很熟悉，它的动词形式也应该掌握，”使稳定“
far outweigh:远远超过，注意副词 far 的使用
今天到这里，大家发现 Simon 的文章已经精简到不屑于用连词了吗？到底就不应
该过多使用连词呢，小站老师下期帮大家讲解！需要更多写作技巧的点击这里！
考官华丽雅思大作文详解 5：所谓幸福

Simon 是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界的
考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的建议，
甚至还有不少 Simon 本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英国考官之
手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相比，着实让
人眼前一亮。小站的 Phoebe 老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正可以提分的
好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，相信大家都
可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文!

今天帮大家分析的这篇大作文出自剑桥雅思 4，很多同学认为这道题目很难
Happiness is considered very important in life.Why is it difficult to
define?What factors are important in achieving happiness?
首先，从题目可以看出，这是一篇非辩论类的关于 happiness 的作文，大家可能
平时练习的比较少，缺乏写作素材，这里就帮大家带来很多来自 Simon 的 Ideas：
� Happiness means different things to different people.
� It can be described as a feeling of pleasure or enjoyment.
� People enjoy spending time with family and friends.
� Hobbies, sports and games can be a source of fun and enjoyment.
� Some people see money as a source of happiness.
� Other people define happiness as something deeper.
� They need to feel that they are doing something useful with their lives.
� Some people get a sense of achievement from their work.
� Others find happiness in bringing up their children.
然后，和以往只有一个题目的大作文相比，这道题包含了两个问题，这种题型被
Simon 叫做 two-part question，同时也给出了这种题型的 4 段式结构：
Use the following 4-paragraph essay structure for this kind of question:
1. Introduce the topic and give an overall answer to both questions
2. Answer the first question
3. Answer the second question
4. Conclude by summarising both answers
和我们前几期讲的大作文结构相比，主体段由 Details 变成了 Answer questions，
结尾再总结一下每个答案即可。开头的 Introduction 段落 Simon 建议写两句话，
引入主题并做出简要回答。来看一下 Simon 是怎么写的：
It is no doubt true that the majority of people would like to be happy
in their lives. While the personal nature of happiness makes it difficult
to describe, there do seem to be some common needs that we all share with
regard to experiencing or achieving happiness.
大家可以看出，Simon 一如既往地用了 it is … that 名型作为开篇第一句，第
二句由 while 引导，前半句回答了第一个问题：很难定义，后半句引出第二个问
题的回答：确实有获得快乐的的办法。
为什么快乐很难定义呢?这种抽象的问题让学生很伤脑筋，还是来看 Simon 是如
何回答的吧：
Why is happiness difficult to define?
Happiness is difficult to define because it means something different to
each individual person. Nobody can fully understand or experience another
person’s feelings, and we all have our own particular passions from which
we take pleasure. Some people, for example, derive a sense of satisfaction
from earning money or achieving success, whereas for others, health and
family are much more important. At the same time, a range of other feelings,
from excitement to peacefulness, may be associated with the idea of
happiness, and the same person may therefore feel happy in a variety of
different ways.
Simon 给出的原因非常 convincing:由于个体差异，对快乐感知程度不同，定义
则不同;快乐可以和多种感觉有关，如兴奋或平静。大家可以看到，Simon 在做
解释的时候，时刻不忘举例子，让回答变得更加具体，有说服力。所以小站老师
也建议大家多在举例子方面下功夫。

现在贴出完整范文：
It is no doubt true that the majority of people would like to be happy
in their lives. While the personal nature of happiness makes it difficult
to describe, there do seem to be some common needs that we all share
with regard to experiencing or achieving happiness.
Happiness is difficult to define because it means something different to
each individual person. Nobody can fully understand or experience
another person’s feelings, and we all have our own particular passions
from which we take pleasure. Some people, for example, derive a sense
of satisfaction from earning money or achieving success, whereas for
others, health and family are much more important. At the same time, a
range of other feelings, from excitement to peacefulness, may be
associated with the idea of happiness, and the same person may therefore
feel happy in a variety of different ways.
Although it seems almost impossible to give a precise definition of
happiness, most people would agree that there are some basic preconditions
to achieving it. Firstly, it is hard for a person to be happy if he or
she does not have a safe place to live and enough food to eat. Our basic
survival needs must surely be met before we can lead a pleasant life.
Secondly, the greatest joy in life is usually found in shared experiences
with family and friends, and it is rare to find a person who is content
to live in complete isolation. Other key factors could be individual
freedom and a sense of purpose in life.
In conclusion, happiness is difficult to define because it is particular
to each individual, but I believe that our basic needs for shelter, food
and company need to be fulfilled before we can experience it.
(292 words, band 9)
最后来做词汇总结：
the majority of:其反义词组 the minority of 也要记牢
regard of:关于
individual:个体，个性
derive:重点词汇，在阅读中也很常见，常和 step from/come from 替换
a range of:重点词组，在听力中也极其常见，常和 a variety of/a series of
替换
今天先到这儿，下期见！需要更多写作技巧的点击这里！

考官华丽雅思大作文详解 6：道路安全

Simon 是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界的
考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的建议，
甚至还有不少 Simon 本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英国考官之
手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相比，着实让
人眼前一亮。小站的 Phoebe 老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正可以提分的
好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，相信大家都
可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文！

今天带来一篇大作文，题目是：
Some people think that strict punishments for driving offences are the
key to reducing traffic accidents. Others, however, believe that other
measures would be more effective in improving road safety. Discuss both
these views and give your own opinion.
从这道题目可以看出，这篇文章是属于大作文四种类型中的 Discussion opinion。
Simon 把大作文分成四种类型，分别是：
Here are the four types of question:
1. Opinion
2. Discussion opinion
3. Problem solution
4. 2-part question
针对不同类型，大家需要记住的要点是：
1. An 'opinion' question asks for your view, not the views of other people,
and you don't have to give both sides of the argument. Just make your
opinion clear in the introduction, then explain it in the rest of the
essay.
Opinion 类是询问你的观点，而不是其他人的观点，所以你不必给出双方论据。
只需在 Introduction 段落中澄清自己的观点，然后在后面解释就可以了。
2. A 'discussion' question requires you to write about both sides of the
argument, and you should write a similar amount for each view. If the
question also asks for your opinion, you don't need an extra paragraph.
Just make it clear in the introduction and conclusion which of the two
views you agree with.
Discussion 类要求你写出双方观点，双方字数相近，不要偏颇。如果问题中有
征询你的意见，你无需另起一段，只需在首尾段中陈述即可。
3. Type 3 is easy. Simply write a paragraph explaining the problem(s) and
a paragraph explaining the solution(s). Some questions ask about 'causes'
or 'effects': these would be part of the 'problem' paragraph.
Problem Solution 类很简单。主体段落只需一段解释问题一段给出解决方案即
可。有些问题会问到“起因”或“影响”，这些只需写进“problem”段落。
4. For type 4, just answer the two questions. Write one paragraph about
each.
2-part question 类，只需主体段每段各回答一个问题即可。
这四种类型都可以用 Simon 的 4 段式结构来写，但是不同类型的文章每个段落内
容会有所不同。小站老师提醒大家在写作的时候，首先要先看好题目类型，再选
择合适的段落结构进行写作。
现在贴出满分范文
People have differing views with regard to the question of how to make
our roads safer. In my view, both punishments and a range of other measures
can be used together to promote better driving habits.
On the one hand, strict punishments can certainly help to encourage people
to drive more safely. Penalties for dangerous drivers can act as a
deterrent, meaning that people avoid repeating the same offence. There
are various types of driving penalty, such as small fines, licence
suspension, driver awareness courses, and even prison sentences. The aim
of these punishments is to show dangerous drivers that their actions have
negative consequences. As a result, we would hope that drivers become more
disciplined and alert, and that they follow the rules more carefully.
On the other hand, I believe that safe driving can be promoted in several
different ways that do not punish drivers. Firstly, it is vitally
important to educate people properly before they start to drive, and this
could be done in schools or even as part of an extended or more difficult
driving test. Secondly, more attention could be paid to safe road design.
For example, signs can be used to warn people, speed bumps and road bends
can be added to calm traffic, and speed cameras can help to deter people
from driving too quickly. Finally, governments or local councils could
reduce road accidents by investing in better public transport, which would
mean that fewer people would need to travel by car.
In conclusion, while punishments can help to prevent bad driving, I
believe that other road safety measures should also be introduced.
(269 words, band 9)
词汇总结：
deterrent:阻碍物，英文释意”sth that deters”，deter 常和 stop 作同义替
换，意为阻止
licence suspension:执照吊销，重点记忆 suspension，意为暂时中止
disciplined: 名词 discipline 变化来的，英文释意”obeying the rules”,
alert:警觉的，可理解为”watchful”
vitally:至关重要的
investing in:投资于，注意介词搭配 in
今天先到这里，下期见！需要更多写作技巧的点击这里！

考官华丽雅思大作文详解 7：青少年义务社区工作

Simon 是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界的
考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的建议，
甚至还有不少 Simon 本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英国考官之
手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相比，着实让
人眼前一亮。小站的 Phoebe 老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正可以提分的
好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，相信大家都
可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文!
今天要分析的是一篇大作文。题目：
Some people think that all teenagers should be required to do unpaid work
in their free time to help the local community. They believe this would
benefit both the individual teenager and society as a whole.
Do you agree or disagree?
在写作之前先帮大家带来 Simon 的一个非常有用的建议。很多学生都会问 Simon
这样一个问题 Is there any specific study order that you recommend?为此
Simon 给出了非常具体的回答，相信大家看完之后对于写作文不会再一头雾水。
以下是他建议的 study order：
1. Essay structure and paragraphs
The first thing to do is find an essay structure that works for you. You
probably know that I prefer to write 4 paragraphs, and maybe you've seen
how I write 2-sentence introductions, 5-sentence main paragraphs and
1-sentence conclusions. Try this: take some essays that you have already
written, and rewrite them so that they all have the same number of
paragraphs and sentences.
首先要想好文章的 Structure。Simon 喜欢写 4 段式——开头两句，主体段落各
五句，结尾一句。大家可以尝试将之前写好的作文都重新写成这种结构。
2. Question types
You need to see examples of the four question types, and make sure you
know how to answer each type using your preferred essay structure.
平时多看大作文四种类型的范文，针对题目类型，选用合适的 Structure。
3. Planning, and isolated paragraph practice
Take several different questions, and practise planning ideas. Then spend
some time focusing only on introductions e.g. write an introduction for
five different questions. Then do the same with conclusions. Then try
writing different types of main paragraph e.g. an 'advantages' paragraph,
an 'opinion' paragraph, a 'problem' paragraph etc.
选一些题目，练习 planning ideas.比如可以写五篇不同题目的 introduction，
或者写不同类型题目的主体段落。
4. Topic ideas
When you are confident that you know how to write an essay, it's time to
start working through as many common IELTS writing topics as possible.
Even if you don't write a full essay for each topic, you should at least
plan some ideas and opinions.
当你足够自信到知道如何写文章的时候，你就可以尽可能多地写各种不同题材的
常见写作题目。参考见链接
5. Mistakes, corrections and improvements
Try to find someone who can check your writing, highlight and explain your
mistakes, and show you how to improve your essays.
找个能帮你检查作文的小伙伴，能指出错误并告诉你如何改善。
以上就是 Simon 对于 study order 的建议，接下大家按照 Simon 的指示，写一下
今天的作文，写好之后可对照范文。
满分范文：
Many young people work on a volunteer basis, and this can only be
beneficial for both the individual and society as a whole. However, I do
not agree that we should therefore force all teenagers to do unpaid work.
Most young people are already under enough pressure with their studies,
without being given the added responsibility of working in their spare
time. School is just as demanding as a full-time job, and teachers expect
their students to do homework and exam revision on top of attending
lessons every day. When young people do have some free time, we should
encourage them to enjoy it with their friends or to spend it doing sports
and other leisure activities. They have many years of work ahead of them
when they finish their studies.
At the same time, I do not believe that society has anything to gain
from obliging young people to do unpaid work. In fact, I would argue
that it goes against the values of a free and fair society to force a group
of people to do something against their will. Doing this can only lead
to resentment amongst young people, who would feel that they were being
used, and parents, who would not want to be told how to raise their children.
Currently, nobody is forced to volunteer, and this is surely the best
system.
In conclusion, teenagers may choose to work for free and help others, but
in my opinion we should not make this compulsory.
(250 words, band 9)
词汇总结：
on a volunteer basis:on a … basis“以…为基础”，是一个非常常见且好用
的词组，如 charge on an annual basis 以年基础收费，take care of your skin
on a regular basis 定期护理面部
revision:动词是 revise,也常见于阅读，修改，修定
obliging:形容词，乐于助人的;其动词是 oblige，意为强迫
resentment:怨恨，可替换 hate
compulsory:强制的，Compulsory education 义务教育
今天先到这儿，需要更多写作技巧的点击这里！

考官华丽雅思小作文详解 8：传统音乐与国际音乐

Simon 是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界的
考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的建议，
甚至还有不少 Simon 本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英国考官之
手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相比，着实让
人眼前一亮。小站的 Phoebe 老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正可以提分的
好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，相信大家都
可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文!
今天要分析一篇大作文，题目：
There are many different types of music in the world today. Why do we
need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than
the international music that is heard everywhere nowadays?
大家平时做练习的时候，对于艺术类的话题练习比较少，所以很多学生考试遇到
这类题目的时候会无从下笔。Simon 建议大家平时要练习尽可能多的不同类型的
写作素材，以下是他给的 Topic List,大家在看到这些话题的时候想想可写的内
容：
1. Advertising
2. Animal Rights: testing on animals, vegetarianism, zoos
3. Cities: urbanisation, problems of city life
4. Crime: police, punishments/prisons, rehabilitation, capital
punishment
5. Education: studying abroad, technology in education, education in
developing countries, higher education, home-schooling, bad behaviour,
corporal punishment, single sex education, streaming (grouping children
according to ability)
6. Environment: global warming, impact of humans on the environment,
solutions to environment problems, waste/rubbish, litter, recycling,
nuclear power
7. Family: family size, working parents, negative effects on children,
divorce, care for old people
8. Gender: gender and education, gender and work, women’s and men’s role
in the family
9. Genetic Engineering: positives, negatives, genetically modified foods
10. Global Issues: problems in developing countries, how to help
developing countries, immigration, multi-cultural societies,
globalisation
11. Government and Society: what governments can do, public services,
censorship, video cameras in public places
12. Guns and Weapons: gun ownership and possession, police and guns,
nuclear weapons, armed forces
13. Health: diet, exercise, state health systems, private healthcare,
alternative medicine, stress
14. Housing and Architecture: state housing, old buildings, modern/green
buildings
15. International Language: English as an international language
16. Money: money and society, consumerism
17. Personal Development: happiness, success, nature or nurture
18. Sport and Leisure: professional/competitive sport, sport salaries,
sport and politics
19. Tourism: positives, negative effects on environment, future of
tourism
20. Traditions and Modern Life: losing traditional skills, traditional
customs
21. Transport: traffic problems and solutions, public transport, road
safety
22. Television, Internet and Mobile Phones: positives and negatives,
Internet compared to newspapers and books
23. Water: importance of clean water, water supply, water should be free,
bottled water
24. Work: same job for life, self-employment, unemployment, work/life
balance, technology and work, child labour
Simon 建议大家打上面的 Topic List 打印出来，以供平时练习。

满分范文：
It is true that a rich variety of musical styles can be found around the
world. Music is a vital part of all human cultures for a range of reasons,
and I would argue that traditional music is more important than modern,
international music.
Music is something that accompanies all of us throughout our lives. As
children, we are taught songs by our parents and teachers as a means of
learning language, or simply as a form of enjoyment. Children delight
insinging with others, and it would appear that the act of singing in a
group creates a connection between participants, regardless of their age.
Later in life, people’s musical preferences develop, and we come to see
our favourite songs as part of our life stories. Music both expresses and
arouses emotions in a way that words alone cannot. In short, it is
difficult to imagine life without it.
In my opinion, traditional music should be valued over the international
music that has become so popular. International pop music is
often catchy and fun, but it is essentially a commercial product
that is marketed and sold by business people. Traditional music, by
contrast, expresses the culture, customs and history of a country.
Traditional styles, such as ...(example)..., connect us to the past and
form part of our cultural identity. It would be a real pity if pop music
became so predominant that these national styles disappeared.
In conclusion, music is a necessary part of human existence, and I believe
that traditional music should be given more importance than international
music.
(261 words, band 9)
词汇总结：
delight in: delight in doing sth 非常喜欢做某事
enjoyment: 愉快，享受
essentially: 基本上，常和 basically/fundamentally 替换
marketed: 这里 market 做动词，意为“卖”
catchy: 可以指音乐悦耳易记
cultural identity: 文化认同
predominant: 突出的，显著的
今天先到这里，了解更多关于雅思写作信息点击这里，下期见!

考官华丽雅思小作文详解 9：私立教育与公立教育

Simon 是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界的
考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的建议，
甚至还有不少 Simon 本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英国考官之
手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相比，着实让
人眼前一亮。小站的 Phoebe 老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正可以提分的
好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，相信大家都
可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文！
今天要讲一篇 Family Topic 大作文。题目如下：
Families who send their children to private schools should not be required
to pay taxes that support the state education system.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
对于这种问你同意与否的作文，Simon 做出如下指示：
If the question asks whether you agree or disagree, you need to make your
opinion very clear. You can either have a strong opinion or a balanced
opinion.
今天我们先来说一下如何写一篇 Strong Opinion 的作文。Simon 说，When you
have a strong opinion, you don't need to mention the opposite view. 是
的，你没有看错，Simon 说你若表达 Strong Opinion，则无需提反方观点！现在
开始写作文，按照前几期讲过的写作的顺序，第一步，Plan Structure:
1. Introduction: 1 sentence to introduce the topic, 1 sentence to make
your opinion clear (e.g. I completely disagree...)
2. Main paragraph: support your opinion with a reason
3. Main paragraph: support your opinion with another reason
4. Conclusion: repeat/summarise your opinion
第二步: brainstorm then organise
大家一起来头脑风暴 the ideas for a “completely disagree” answer. 以
下是 Simon 想到的 Ideas:
� difficult to calculate the tax reduction
� more government staff would be required for this process
� we all pay for public services that we may not need e.g. police
� poorer people would pay more tax than wealthy people
� state schools benefit the whole of society
� high quality state education leads to equal opportunities for all
� a well-educated workforce is the key to a prosperous nation
� companies need educated staff
� we should all be happy to contribute to public services
头脑风暴之后，我们要将它们组织归纳成两个段落，从上面这些 Ideas 来看，似
乎可以把它们分成两大主题：
1. Reasons why we think the idea would not work, or would be unfair.
2. Reasons why everyone should pay taxes that support state education.
在给出完整范文之前，再跟大家讲解一下 Simon 是如何建议大家规划整个大作文
的写作时间的：
You have 40 minutes for writing task 2, and I suggest that you:
� Spend the first 10 minutes planning your essay structure and
brainstorming ideas for the two main body paragraphs.
� Spend 5 minutes writing your 2-sentence introduction.
� Spend 20 minutes on the main body (10 minutes for each paragraph).
� Spend the last 5 minutes writing your conclusion and checking
everything.
希望同学们在写今天的文章的时候都按照 Simon 的建议，平时练习的时候也养成
定时写作文的好习惯，考场上也一定能发挥地游刃有余。
完整范文：
Some people believe that parents of children who attend private schools
should not need to contribute to state schools through taxes. Personally,
I completely disagree with this view.
For a variety of reasons, it would be wrong to reduce taxes for families
who pay for private education. Firstly, it would be difficult to calculate
the correct amount of tax reduction for these families, and staff would
be required to manage this complex process. Secondly, we all pay a certain
amount of tax for public services that we may not use. For example, most
people are fortunate enough not to have to call the police or fire
brigade at any time in their lives, but they would not expect a tax
reduction for this. Finally, if wealthy families were given a tax discount
for sending their children to private schools, we might have a situation
where poorer people pay higher taxes than the rich.
In my opinion, we should all be happy to pay our share of the money that
supports public schools. It is beneficial for all members of society to
have a high quality education system with equal opportunities for all
young people. This will result in a well-educated workforce, and in
turn a more productive and prosperous nation. Parents of children in
private schools may also see the advantages of this in their own lives.
For example, a company owner will need well qualified and competent staff,
and a well-fundededucation system can provide such employees.
In conclusion, I do not believe that any financial concessions should
be made for people who choose private education.
(269 words, band 9)
词汇总结：
tax reduction: 削减税收
fire brigade: 消防局
well-educated: 受良好教育的
concession: 妥协
well-funded: 资金充裕的
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simon 考官华丽雅思大作文详解 10：电脑游戏

Simon 是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界的
考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的建议，
甚至还有不少 Simon 本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英国考官之
手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相比，着实让
人眼前一亮。小站的 Phoebe 老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正可以提分的
好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，相信大家都
可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文!
今天要分析一篇大作文。同学们在写大作文的过程中一定会有一些疑问，我在整
理 Simon 和学生问答的时候发现了两个非常常见有用的问题，所以在这里跟大家
讲一下，相信对大家有所帮助。
Firstly, Secondly, Finally 这样的单词用多了好吗?
Simon 是这样回答的，It's best not to use "Firstly, Secondly, Finally"
twice in one essay. If we wanted to write a second main paragraph with
three ideas, what could we used instead of "Firstly, Secondly, Finally"
to organise them?
也就是说，这组词最好不要用两次。那么有什么能替代它们呢?然后 Simon 写了
一个 Example，让大家找一下他用了哪些词语替换的这组顺序词：
Three main factors are affecting health in modern societies. One problem
is the lack of awareness among many people of the negative consequences
of an unhealthy diet. This is made worse by the prevalence of fast food
and processed food, which are full of fat, salt and sugar. Another key
factor is the changing trend in lifestyles. For example, children’s
hobbies now involve much less outdoor activity, and adults are less active
as jobs have shifted towards sedentary office work instead of manual
labour. In addition to this, time-saving technologies, such as cars,
elevators, dishwashers and washing machines, have made people lazier.
Simon 写得这段完全没有用到 Firstly，Secondly，Finally，但是整个叙事逻辑
有序，原因就是他第一句就表明有 three main factors。介绍这三个因素的时
候依次用 one problem is…another key fator is…in addition to this…来
表达，连贯清晰，大家可以充分借鉴，避免过多重复。
学生问，I am confused about the question "Do the advantages outweigh the
disadvantages?". Is this an opinion question or discussion opinion
question?
之前我们有讲过 Simon 把文章分成四大类，不同类型的作文其段落内容是不同的，
所以有学生问了，像这种问法的作文是属于哪个类型的。以下是 Simon 的回答：
Strictly speaking, "Do the advantages outweigh the disadvantages?" is
asking for your opinion (do you think there are more advantages or
disadvantages?). Technically, you could give a one-sided "opinion" answer
e.g. you could argue that there are many advantages and almost no
disadvantages.
However, I think the examiner would expect and prefer to see a balanced
discussion of both sides as well as your opinion. Therefore, I think it's
best (and easiest) to write a discussion opinion essay.
总结一下，这是 Discussion Opinion 类型的，那接下来我们就来练一篇同种问
法的大作文，题目如下：
Some people regard video games as harmless fun, or even as a useful
educational tool. Others, however, believe that videos games are having
an adverse effect on the people who play them. In your opinion, do the
drawbacks of video games outweigh the benefits?
完整范文：
Many people, and children in particular, enjoy playing computer games.
While I accept that these games can sometimes have a positive effect on
the user, I believe that they are more likely to have a harmful impact.
On the one hand, video games can be both entertaining and educational.
Users, or gamers, are transported into virtual worlds which are often more
exciting and engaging than real-life pastimes. From an educational
perspective, these games encourage imagination and creativity, as well
as concentration, logical thinking and problem solving, all of which are
useful skills outside the gaming context. Furthermore, it has been shown
that computer simulation games can improve users’ motor skills and help
to prepare them for real-world tasks, such as flying a plane.
However, I would argue that these benefits are outweighed by the drawbacks.
Gaming can be highly addictive because users are constantly given scores,
new targets and frequent rewards to keep them playing. Many children now
spend hours each day trying to progress through the levels of a game or
to get a higher score than their friends. This type of addiction can have
effects ranging from lack of sleep to problems at school, when homework
is sacrificed for a few more hours on the computer or console. The rise
in obesity in recent years has also been linked in part to the sedentary
lifestyle and lack of exercise that often accompany gaming addiction.
In conclusion, it seems to me that the potential dangers of video games
are more significant than the possible benefits.
(258 words, band 9)
virtual worlds: 虚拟世界
perspective: 观点，视角
logical thinking: 逻辑思维
ranging from…to: 重点词组，表示范围
console: 操纵台;安慰
obesity: 肥胖
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考官华丽雅思大作文详解 11：平等与个人成就

Simon 是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界的
考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的建议，
甚至还有不少 Simon 本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英国考官之
手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相比，着实让
人眼前一亮。小站的 Phoebe 老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正可以提分的
好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，相信大家都
可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文！
今天带来一篇巨难的大作文，大家先看题目感受下：
In recent years, there has been growing interest in the relationship
between equality and personal achievement. Some people believe that
individuals can achieve more in egalitarian societies. Others believe
that high levels of personal achievement are possible only if individuals
are free to succeed or fail according to their individual merits.
What is your view of the relationship between equality and personal
success?
从题目来看，篇幅长于普通大作文，内容上信息量大，关键词多，更难于理解。
Simon 说，这是一个学生发给他的问题，他也表示很难。还帮大家解释了题目中
这个单词的释意: 'egalitarian' refers to the principle that people are
equal, and deserve equal rights and opportunities. 可理解为平等主义。
所以这属于关于平等话题的作文。对于这种超难的问题，Simon 给了大家三个建
议：
1. Have a strong opinion (e.g. I completely agree that people can achieve
more in egalitarian societies.) You can ignore the other view.(你可以
采取强硬的立场，如完全支持其中一方，然后可以忽略过反方观点)
2. Focus on the last line of the question (What is your view of...?). This
line sums up the whole question very clearly. Just answer this
question.(重点关注问题的最后一句，只要将问句回答出来就好了)
3. Use examples as the basis of your argument e.g. free university
education ensures equality of opportunity, and therefore allows
individuals to achieve more.(用实例作为论据，如免费高等教育保证了机会
的平等，因为使得个人取得更大成就)
大家自己试着写一下这篇文章，再和 Simon 的范文做对比。Simon 提醒大家，他
不确定这是否是一篇雅思作文，可能是这位同学弄错了，但是，他的范文还是会
对大家有帮助。

完整范文：
In my opinion, an egalitarian society is one in which everyone has the
same rights and the same opportunities. I completely agree that people
can achieve more in this kind of society.
Education is an important factor with regard to personal success in life.
I believe that all children should have access to free schooling, and
higher education should be either free or affordable for all those who
chose to pursue a university degree. In a society without
free schooling or affordable higher education, only children and young
adults from wealthier families would have access to the best learning
opportunities, and they would therefore be better prepared for the job
market. This kind of inequality would ensure the success of some but harm
the prospects of others.
I would argue that equal rights and opportunities are not in conflict with
people’s freedom to succeed or fail. In other words, equality does not
mean that people lose their motivation to succeed, or that they are not
allowed to fail. On the contrary, I believe that most people would feel
more motivated to work hard and reach their potential if they thought that
they lived in a fair society. Those who did not make the same effort would
know that they had wasted their opportunity. Inequality, on the other hand,
would be more likely to demotivate people because they would know that
the odds of success were stacked in favour of those
from privileged backgrounds.
In conclusion, it seems to me that there is a positive relationship between
equality and personal success.
(260 words)
词汇总结：
schooling: 学校教育，与之对应的是 Parenting,家长教育
prospects: 前途
demotivate: 使失去动力。
odds: 机率，odd 奇怪的;奇数
privileged: 特权的
今天先到这儿，下期见！

考官华丽雅思大作文详解 12：寿命延长
Simon 是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界的
考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的建议，
甚至还有不少 Simon 本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英国考官之
手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相比，着实让
人眼前一亮。小站的 Phoebe 老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正可以提分的
好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，相信大家都
可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文！

今天我们要来看一篇大作文。在这之前呢，Simon 老师想展示大家看的是，当他
看到雅思大作文题目的时候大脑是如何运转的。
以下是他的思考步骤：
1. I read the question very carefully, maybe three times. I ask myself
"What's the topic? What is the question asking me to write about?"(我
会非常仔细地读问题，读上三遍，并自问“topic 是什么，这个问题让我写什么
内容？”)
2. I underline the key things that must be included in the essay. I always
answer every part of the question.(我会画出重点部分，不会忽视任何一部
分的问题)
3. Now I think about my 4 paragraph structure. I can write any type of
essay in 4 paragraphs; I just need to decide what to put in each
paragraph.(现在我思考我的 4 段式结构——此结构适用于任何类型的大作文，
我只需考虑每段放哪些内容即可)
4. If I need to give my opinion, I think "What is the easiest opinion to
explain? What good vocabulary could I use?"(如果我需要给出自己的意见，
我会想“什么样的意见是最好解释的?我能用哪些高级词汇？”)
5. Then I write down some vocabulary ideas that are related to the
topic.(然后我写下一些和 topic 相关的词汇)
6. I try to write 2 sentences for the introduction: I introduce the topic,
then give a simple answer (including my opinion if the question asks for
it).(我试着为 Introduction 段写两句话，引进主题，给出答案，如需要会给出
自己的意见)
7. I write short 'topic sentences' to start each paragraph, then develop
my ideas by explaining and supporting with examples.(我写主题句引出每
个段落，然后通过解释和举例来延伸观点)
8. I look at the question from time to time in order to check that I'm
answering every part of it.(我不时看一遍问题为了确保回答了每一个部分)
9. I know that I write about 10 words per line; I can quickly check the
approximate number of words that I've written.(我知道我每句写 10 个单词，
我能快速计算出我大概写的字数)
10. If I need more words (to reach 250), I expand one of my examples in
the main body paragraphs. If necessary, I draw an arrow to show where I
want to add the extra words.(如果我需要写到 250 字，我会扩展主体段中的
例子。如有必须，我画个箭头标记我想插入内容的位置)
今天的任务就是请按照此步骤完成这篇大作文并和 Simon 的范文做比较。题目如
下：
In the developed world, average life expectancy is increasing. What
problems will this cause for individuals and society? Suggest some
measures that could be taken to reduce the impact of ageing populations.
完整范文：
It is true that people in industrialised nations can expect to live longer
than ever before. Although there will undoubtedly be some negative
consequences of this trend, societies can take steps to mitigate these
potential problems.
As people live longer and the populations of developed countries grow
older, several related problems can beanticipated. The main issue is that
there will obviously be more people of retirement age who will be eligible
to receive a pension. The proportion of younger, working adults will be
smaller, and governments will therefore receive less money in taxes in
relation to the size of the population. In other words, an ageing
population will mean a greater tax burden for working adults. Further
pressures will include a rise in the demand for healthcare, and the fact
young adults will increasingly have to look after their elderly relatives.
There are several actions that governments could take to solve the
problems described above. Firstly, a simple solution would be to increase
the retirement age for working adults, perhaps from 65 to 70. Nowadays,
people of this age tend to be healthy enough to continue a productive
working life. A second measure would be for governments to encourage
immigration in order to increase the number of working adults who pay taxes.
Finally, money from national budgets will need to be taken from other areas
and spent on vital healthcare, accommodation and transport facilities for
the rising numbers of older citizens.
In conclusion, various measures can be taken to tackle the problems that
are certain to arise as the populations of countries grow older.
(265 words, band 9)
词汇总结：
mitigate: 减轻，常见搭配有 mitigate the risk/effects of…
anticipate: 预见，预料
pension: 养老金
今天先到这儿，下期见！

考官华丽雅思大作文详解 13：政府资助艺术家

Simon 是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界的
考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的建议，
甚至还有不少 Simon 本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英国考官之
手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相比，着实让
人眼前一亮。小站的 Phoebe 老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正可以提分的
好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，相信大家都
可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文！
今天来看一篇大作文，题目如下：
Some people think that governments should give financial support to
creative artists such as painters and musicians. Others believe that
creative artists should be funded by alternative sources. Discuss both
views and give your own opinion.
在写作之前，先解答同学的疑问。有学生问 Simon 怎样能快速写出一篇大作文呢？
来看看 Simon 的建议：
A student asked me for some tips about how to write task 2 essays faster.
Here's my advice:
1. The first step is to write better, not faster. If you can't get the
score you need when it takes you 2 hours to write an essay, you won't be
able to write a good essay in 40 minutes.(写作文首先要好，而不是快。如
果给你两个小时也写不出高分作文的话，那你也不可能在 40 分钟内写出来)
2. One of my students was worried that it took her 4 hours to write a band
7 essay for homework. In my opinion, spending 4 hours to write an essay
is a good idea. This kind of hard work leads to great results! The important
thing is to be able to write your first band 7 essay. At first it might
take you 4 hours, but you will get faster with practice.(一个学生很担
心因为她花 4 个小时才能写出一个 7 分作文。在 Simon 看来，花 4 个小时写作文
是个好主意，而且会有很好的效果。要想写得快，首先你要能写出 7 分作文。尽
管一开始耗时较长，但会越练越快。)
3. The next step is to break the 40 minutes into smaller parts. For example,
you could practise writing introductions in only 5 minutes. Don't work
on full essays yet(下一步就是把 40 分钟分成小部分。先不急于写满分作文，
比如你可以练习用 5 分钟来写 introduction 等等，具体时间规划参考 Simon 大
作文 9 的讲解)
4. Separate the 'thinking' from the 'writing'. I do all my thinking
(planning or brainstorming) in the first 10 minutes. When I'm happy with
my essay plan, I start writing. I try to stick to my plan so that I can
focus on writing rather than more thinking.(将“思考”从“写作”中分离
出来。我先用十分钟思考内容要怎么写，当我满意了我再动笔。这样我写得时候
更专注。)
5. Finally, remember that improvements happen gradually. You have to be
prepared to do the hard work: practising lots of essays and parts of essays,
preparing ideas and opinions for topics, building your vocabulary
repertoire, and learning from mistakes. Do the work and you'll get better
and faster!(最后，记住进步是逐渐发生的。你必须做些辛苦的工作：练习大量
的作文和作文的一部分，构建中心思想和意见，建立自己的词汇库，吸取教训，
这样你一定会越写越好、越写越快的！)
接下来，大家就按照 Simon 的指示来写今天的作文吧!写好和范文对照。
完整范文：
People have different views about the funding of creative artists. While
some people disagree with the idea of government support for artists, I
believe that money for art projects should come from both governments and
other sources.
Some art projects definitely require help from the state. In the UK, there
are many works of art in public spaces, such as streets or squares in city
centres. In Liverpool, for example, there are several new statues and
sculptures in the docks area of the city, which has been redeveloped
recently. These artworks represent culture, heritage and history. They
serve to educate people about the city, and act as landmarks or talking
points for visitors and tourists. Governments and local councils should
pay creative artists to produce this kind of art, because without their
funding our cities would be much less interesting and attractive.
On the other hand, I can understand the arguments against government
funding for art. The main reason for this view is that governments have
more important concerns. For example, state budgets need to be spent on
education, healthcare, infrastructure and security, among other areas.
These public services are vital for a country to function properly,
whereas the work of creative artists, even in public places, is a luxury.
Another reason for this opinion is that artists do a job like any other
professional, and they should therefore earn their own money by selling
their work.
In conclusion, there are good reasons why artists should rely on
alternative sources of financial support, but in my opinion government
help is sometimes necessary.
词汇总结：
heritage: 遗产
landmarks: 地标;标志性事件，里程碑
infrastructure: 设施
luxury: 奢侈品;奢华的享受
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考官华丽雅思大作文详解 14：拯救濒危语言

Simon 是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界的
考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的建议，
甚至还有不少 Simon 本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英国考官之
手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相比，着实让
人眼前一亮。小站的 Phoebe 老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正可以提分的
好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，相信大家都
可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文！
今天带来一篇大作文，题目如下：
Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken
by very small numbers of people. Some people say that governments should
spend public money on saving these languages, while others believe that
would be a waste of money.
Discuss both these views and give your opinion.
在写作之前，先跟大家讲一下首尾段的写作技巧，以下是 Simon 的总结和范例：
Here is a review of my advice for task 2 introductions:(introdution 段
落写法总结)
· Make the introduction short and do it quickly. The main body paragraphs
are more important.(首段要简短，快速完成，主体段才是最重要的)
· Two sentences are enough: 1) introduce the topic. 2) give a basic answer
to the question.(两句话足够了：一句引入主题，一句对问题给出基本作答)
Example question:
All high school students should be encouraged to take part in community
service programmes.
To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?
My introduction:
Some people believe that high school students would benefit from doing
unpaid work in their local communities. I completely agree that community
service programmes for teenagers are a good idea.
总结：虽然只有两句话，Simon 用了大量的同义替换，避免重复，短小精悍，值
得借鉴。
Several people have asked me about conclusions for IELTS Writing Task 2.
The main body paragraphs are much more important, so don't worry too much
about the conclusion; make it short, simple and fast.(尾段同样不如主体
段重要，也要做到简短，快速完成)
Here are some example conclusion phrases for different types of
question(以下是四种不同类型大作文的尾段写法):
1. Opinion
For the reasons mentioned above, I believe that... (+ repeat your
opinion).
2. Discussion (+ Opinion)
In conclusion, there are convincing arguments both for and against...
(topic), but I believe that... (if the question asks for your opinion).
3. Advantages and Disadvantages
In conclusion, I would argue that the benefits of... (topic) outweigh the
drawbacks.
4. Problem and Solution
In conclusion, it is clear that there are various reasons for... (topic),
and steps need to be taken to tackle this problem.
总结：不同类型的大作文要用不同句型的结尾，这样才能确保总结到位。
接下来大家按照 Simon 的指示写一下今天的作文，写好对照范文。
完整范文：
It is true that some minority languages may disappear in the near future.
Although it can be argued that governments could save money by allowing
this to happen, I believe that these languages should be protected and
preserved.
There are several reasons why saving minority languages could be seen as
a waste of money. Firstly, if a language is only spoken by a small number
of people, expensive education programmes will be needed to make sure that
more people learn it, and the state will have to pay for facilities,
teachers and marketing. This money might be better spent on other public
services. Secondly, it would be much cheaper and more efficient for
countries to have just one language. Governments could cut all kinds of
costs related to communicating with each minority group.
Despite the above arguments, I believe that governments should try to
preserve languages that are less widely spoken. A language is much more
than simply a means of communication; it has a vital connection with the
cultural identity of the people who speak it. If a language disappears,
a whole way of life will disappear with it, and we will lose the rich
cultural diversity that makes societies more interesting. By spending
money to protect minority languages, governments can also preserve
traditions, customs and behaviours that are part of a country’s history.
In conclusion, it may save money in the short term if we allow minority
languages to disappear, but in the long term this would have an extremely
negative impact on our cultural heritage.
(258 words)
词汇总结：
preserve: 保存，保护
facility: 设施
extremely: 极其地
in the long term: 长期来看
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考官华丽雅思大作文详解 15：博物馆用途

Simon 是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界的
考生中越来越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的建议，
甚至还有不少 Simon 本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英国考官之
手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相比，着实让
人眼前一亮。小站的 Phoebe 老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正可以提分的
好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，相信大家都
可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文！
今天我们来看一篇大作文，题目如下：
Some people think that museums should be enjoyable places to entertain
people, while others believe that the purpose of museums is to educate.
Discuss both views and give you own opinion.
首先，大家都知道，按照写作评分标准，要求大家在写作的时候尽量做到词汇多
变。接下来就来训练一下，先把题目中三个关键词相关的词语都写出来：
Museums:
· exhibition, exhibit (verb, like 'show'), an exhibit (noun, 'item'),
artifact, object, collection, history, science, art, culture, visitors,
members of the public, public viewing...
Entertain:
· entertainment, entertaining, enjoy, enjoyment, enjoyable, have fun,
interesting, fascinating, spectacular, impressive, leisure time, free
time, a day out, tourist attraction...
Educate:
· education, educational, teach, learn, explain, understand, know,
gain/expand/pass on/transmit knowledge, skills, experience, open your
mind, broaden your horizons...
Simon 说，Making lists of related words is a good way to generate ideas.
You might not have time to do this in the exam, but it's a useful study
technique.列出相关词是一个培养思想的好办法，你可能在考试中没有时间做这
件事，但是是一个有用的学习技巧。接下来大家写一下今天的作文，然后和范文
对照。

完整范文：
People have different views about the role and function of museums. In
my opinion, museums can and should be both entertaining and educational.
On the one hand, it can be argued that the main role of a museum is to
entertain. Museums are tourist attractions, and their aim is to exhibit
a collection of interesting objects that many people will want to see.
The average visitor may become bored if he or she has to read or listen
to too much educational content, so museums often put more of an emphasis
on enjoyment rather than learning. This type of museum is designed to be
visually spectacular, and may have interactive activities or even games
as part of its exhibitions.
On the other hand, some people argue that museums should focus on education.
The aim of any exhibition should be to teach visitors something that they
did not previously know. Usually this means that the history behind the
museum’s exhibits needs to be explained, and this can be done in various
ways. Some museums employ professional guides to talk to their visitors,
while other museums offer headsets so that visitors can listen to detailed
commentary about the exhibition. In this way, museums can play an
important role in teaching people about history, culture, science and many
other aspects of life.
In conclusion, it seems to me that a good museum should be able to offer
an interesting, enjoyable and educational experience so that people can
have fun and learn something at the same time.
(253 words, band 9)
词汇总结：
visually:视觉上地
spectacular: 壮观地，引人入胜地
interactive: 互动式的
previously: 之前地
headsets: 头戴式耳机
detailed: 详细的
commentary: 评论
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simon 考官华丽雅思大作文详解 16:环境保护

Simon 是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思考官，由于创办雅思考试学习网站而在全世界的考生中越来
越有名气。其网站上提供大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的建议，甚至还有不少 Simon
本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英国考官之手，非常地道，言简意赅，和中
国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相比，着实让人眼前一亮。小站的 Phoebe 老师深感有义
务要让孩子们接触到真正可以提分的好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分
作文的精华，相信大家都可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文!

今天带来一篇大作文，题目如下：

Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the

environment. What can governments do to address these problems?
What can individual people do?
在写作文之前，先讲一个 Simon 的非常有用的建议。Simon 说，some students were
surprised that you can get a band 9 using "Firstly, Secondly, Finally".Is the
phrase "First and foremost" better than "Firstly"?有一些学生见他的文章使
用"Firstly, Secondly, Finally"这样的词语，很吃惊，所以就问词组"First and
foremost"是否比"Firstly"要好？
The answer is NO.回答是 No。理由是：
Using simple organising language like "Firstly, Secondly" makes you focus on
the REAL CONTENT of what you are writing - topic vocabulary, collocations,
examples. This is what the examiner wants to see.（使用简单的词汇可以让你
更加专注在真正的内容上，这才是考官想看到的）
Spend your time preparing ideas, opinions and examples for IELTS topics, not
learning alternative ways to write "Firstly".（要把时间花在准备思想，意见和举
例上，而不是花心思去找 firstly 的替代词）
总之呢，内容核心是分数高低的关键。接下来大家写一下今天的作文，写好和范
文对照。
完整范文：
Humans are responsible for a variety of environmental problems, but we can
also take steps to reduce the damage that we are causing to the planet. This
essay will discuss environmental problems and the measures that
governments and individuals can take to address these problems.
Two of the biggest threats to the environment are air pollution and waste. Gas
emissions from factories and exhaust fumes from vehicles lead to global
warming, which may have a devastating effect on the planet in the future. As
the human population increases, we are also producing ever greater quantities
of waste, which contaminates the earth and pollutes rivers and oceans.
Governments could certainly make more effort to reduce air pollution. They
could introduce laws to limit emissions from factories or to force companies to
use renewable energy from solar, wind or water power. They could also
impose ‘green taxes’ on drivers and airline companies. In this way, people
would be encouraged to use public transport and to take fewer flights abroad,
therefore reducing emissions.
Individuals should also take responsibility for the impact they have on the
environment. They can take public transport rather than driving, choose
products with less packaging, and recycle as much as possible. Most
supermarkets now provide reusable bags for shoppers as well as ‘banks’ for
recycling glass, plastic and paper in their car parks. By reusing and recycling,
we can help to reduce waste.
In conclusion, both national governments and individuals must play their part in
looking after the environment.
Note:
This essay is exactly 250 words long. I've tried to make it as simple as possible,
but it's still good enough to get a band 9.
词汇总结：

exhaust fumes:汽车尾气

vehicles: 车辆，交通工具

devastating: 破坏性的

quantity: 数量

contaminate: 污染

emission: 排放物