Argumentative Essay

Salsa Fadila Zultin
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Essay Writing
FIND THREE ARGUMENTATIVE ESSAYS ONLINE AND STUDY THEM

WELL. LOOK AT HOW THE IDEAS ARE DEVELOPED, THE GRAMMAR,
COHERENCE AND COHESION.
Argumentative Essay Example 1
As online learning becomes more common and more and more resources are
converted to digital form, some people have suggested that public libraries should be
shut down and, in their place, everyone should be given an iPad with an e-reader
subscription.(TS)
Proponents of this idea state that it will save local cities and towns money
because libraries are expensive to maintain.(R) They also believe it will encourage
more people to read because they won’t have to travel to a library to get a book; they
can simply click on what they want to read and read it from wherever they are. They
could also access more materials because libraries won’t have to buy physical copies
of books; they can simply rent out as many digital copies as they need.
However, it would be a serious mistake to replace libraries with tablets. First,

digital books and resources are associated with less learning and more problems than
print resources.(SA) A study done on tablet vs book reading found that people read
20-30% slower on tablets, retain 20% less information, and understand 10% less of
what they read compared to people who read the same information in print.
Additionally, staring too long at a screen has been shown to cause numerous health
problems, including blurred vision, dizziness, dry eyes, headaches, and eye strain, at
much higher instances than reading print does. People who use tablets and mobile
devices excessively also have a higher incidence of more serious health issues such as
fibromyalgia, shoulder and back pain, carpal tunnel syndrome, and muscle strain. I
know that whenever I read from my e-reader for too long, my eyes begin to feel tired
and my neck hurts. We should not add to these problems by giving people, especially
young people, more reasons to look at screens.
Second, it is incredibly narrow-minded to assume that the only service libraries

offer is book lending. Libraries have a multitude of benefits, and many are only
available if the library has a physical location. Some of these benefits include acting
as a quiet study space, giving people a way to converse with their neighbors, holding
classes on a variety of topics, providing jobs, answering patron questions, and keeping
the community connected. One neighborhood found that, after a local library
instituted community events such as play times for toddlers and parents, job fairs for
teenagers, and meeting spaces for senior citizens, over a third of residents reported
feeling more connected to their community. Similarly, a Pew survey conducted in
2015 found that nearly two-thirds of American adults feel that closing their local
library would have a major impact on their community. People see libraries as a way
to connect with others and get their questions answered, benefits tablets can’t offer
nearly as well or as easily.
While replacing libraries with tablets may seem like a simple solution, it would
encourage people to spend even more time looking at digital screens, despite the
myriad issues surrounding them. It would also end access to many of the benefits of
libraries that people have come to rely on. In many areas, libraries are such an
important part of the community network that they could never be replaced by a
simple object.(C)
The Grammar
1. Using present tense: We should not add to these problems by giving people,
especially young people, more reasons to look at screens.
2. Using transitional word: Similarly, a Pew survey conducted in 2015 found that
nearly two-thirds of American adults feel that closing their local library would have a
major impact on their community.
3. Using phrases to give own opinion: I know that whenever I read from my e-reader
for too long, my eyes begin to feel tired and my neck hurts.
4. Using action verb: It would also end access to many of the benefits of libraries that
people have come to rely on.
5. Using passive voice: First, digital books and resources are associated with less
learning and more problems than print resources.
The coherence is pretty clear and the cohesion is not good.
School Uniform
The idea of school uniforms seems like an antiquated concept for many North
Americans. Unless a child attends private school, it is not normally practiced by
children and families. Yet around the world, wearing school uniforms is the norm.
Students studying in schools requiring school uniforms generally perform very well
academically and seem happy wearing the same outfit every day. There are many
benefits to wearing school uniforms that schools in Canada and the United States
should incorporate into their public schools.(TS)
One of the biggest concerns in schools these days is bullying. Students are
harassed physically, verbally, and socially. The latest trend in bullying is cyber
bullying. Often, the cause of bullying stems from people being different for not
wearing the “right” clothes. If someone looks richer, most people feel like they have a
higher social status or more power. To the contrary, uniforms allow children to learn
on a more level playing field, with less judgment about clothing choices, brands of
clothing, or physical appearance.(SA)
A lot of students who wear uniforms claim that they feel more proud of their
school. Wearing school colors gives students a feeling of being more connected to
their school and classmates. If there is a sense of community and connectedness
among the students, the use of foul language, gang behavior, and crimes like
vandalism are largely eliminated. Wearing school uniforms can also help people gain
more self-confidence because they know they are a part of something bigger.
One of the main concerns people have about wearing school uniforms is
conformity. People fear that by making children look the same, their individuality will
be suppressed. However, this is not the case. Accessories, such as bracelets and hair
clips, can jazz up a school uniform. Besides, students can wear their own clothing
after school and during weekends. An individual’s personality is not wholly expressed
by fashion alone. Personality is determined by the way a person moves, feels, thinks,
and talks. Wearing a school uniform neither defines a child’s personality nor erases it.
(R)
There are even more advantages to wearing school uniforms in public schools in
addition to those previously mentioned. It means lower costs for parents during back-
to-school shopping. However, the idea that bullying might be alleviated is the leading
reason why schools should implement the wearing of uniforms. (C)The other is the
fostering of school pride. Students will not lose their personality but will merely learn
new ways to express themselves.
The Grammar
1. Using present tense: It means lower costs for parents during back-to-school
shopping.
2. Using transitional word: However, this is not the case. Accessories, such as
bracelets and hair clips, can jazz up a school uniform.
3. Using phrases to give own opinion: However, this is not the case.
4. Using action verb: Besides, students can wear their own clothing after school and
during weekends.
5. Using passive voice: An individual’s personality is not wholly expressed by fashion
alone.
Both the coherence and cohesion is not clear.
Using Mobile Phones

At present, mobile phones are popular for everyone in our society. Mobile
phones are common facilities for all ages. They can be used to communication
between two persons or more than two persons everywhere and every time. So,
mobile phones are important equipment for people nowadays. And mobile phones
have many disadvantages. To have good health and live happily in our society, we
should not use mobile phones.(TS)
The most important advantage of using mobile phones is that mobile phones
are convenient communication tools that we can use to communicate with our friends.
(C)Besides, you can carry mobile phones everywhere by keeping them in shopping
bags and school bags because mobile phones are small and easy to carry.
Furthermore, mobile phones have a lot of good functions such as cameras, music
players, radio, the Internet, games, dictionaries, sound recorders, video players,
calculators, map, bluetooth devices, notes, calendars and etc.
(SA)In contrast, mobile phones have many disadvantages. The first one is they
have effects to our health. Mobile phones have microwave radiation, so they will be
dangerous for our ears and brain. Besides, they also affect our children. Children may
use mobile phones in wrong ways. This may cause them to leave school. Moreover,
using mobile phones while driving is one of the main causes of road accidents.
Finally, using mobile phones affects our society. Living together in a society, we must
respect others. So, using mobile phones in public such as in classrooms, in cinemas,
on buses is not good and proper. Although using mobile phones is disadvantagous, we
can protect ourselves from the dangers of the mobile phones by using them properly.
In summary, using mobile phones is disadvantagous.(C) Using mobile phones
affects our health and society. So we should not use them.
The Grammar
1. Using present tense: Mobile phones have microwave radiation, so they will be
dangerous for our ears and brain.
2. Using transitional word: Besides, you can carry mobile phones everywhere by
keeping them in shopping bags and school bags because mobile phones are small and
easy to carry
3. Using phrases to give own opinion: In summary, using mobile phones is
disadvantagous.
4. Using action verb: So we should not use them.
5. Using passive voice: They can be used to communication between two persons or
more than two persons everywhere and every time.
Both coherence and cohesion are pretty good.

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Salsa Fadila Zultin

FIND THREE ARGUMENTATIVE ESSAYS ONLINE AND STUDY THEM

Argumentative Essay Example 1

However, it would be a serious mistake to replace libraries with tablets. First,

Second, it is incredibly narrow-minded to assume that the only service libraries

The coherence is pretty clear and the cohesion is not good.

Argumentative Essay Example 2

Both the coherence and cohesion is not clear.

Argumentative Essay Example 3

Using Mobile Phones

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