1) Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative

impact on both individual and society. To what extent do you agree?

Answer:

It is believed by many that social sites have had adverse ramifications on a person as well as on the
community. I totally agree with this assertion.

Undoubtedly, social platform has its benefits. Most important of them all is that it provides connectivity
to people, especially those who stay at a longer distance. For instance, most of my friends are living in a
foreign country. I often use social platforms such as Skype or Facebook to chat and see them at the with
a touch of a button. On the other hand, Tthis type of interaction was never possible before the social
sites.

Nevertheless, the negative impacts social sites have brought far outweigh the benefits. For example,
individual who uses a social site more makes his life more sedentary. By using these sites every day, one
would gets addicted to their alluring functions and spend most of the time sitting ideal. Before the
invention of such sites, I used to spend my leisure time playing outdoor games, but now I mostly stay
online on social platforms. This means that I do not exercise and my life has becomes inactive.

Furthermore, social sites have also increased the crime rates in the society. Most people upload their
photos, on these sites, that can be which are being misused. One of my female friends has found that
someone has had stolen her identity and created her fake account on Facebook just to blackmail her for
some money. Police were unable to catch the person because he hads malfunctioned modified the IP
address of a computer. Therefore, it can be said that social sites have also given birth to the social
crimes.

In conclusion, social networking platforms are putting substantial negative influences on both an
individual and the society. Usage of these platforms would not only make someone lazy, but it also
increases the social misdeeds.

Full marks for structure. Very well articulated with intro para, first body para taking side of social media,
and next two body paras in favour of it's negative impact, and then conclusion. Another big plus is use of
examples and personal example. Use of linking words before each paragraph is great as well.

Plus, your use of vocab is very high as well which will benefit you, except one word 'malfunctioned' that
is used wrongly.

Also, your sentences are short and comprehensive, which will greatly benefit you.

Things to improve:

- Use of has/had is slightly off. When telling a story in the past (your friend's story), use had.

It's a solid 7.5 essay. If you avoid mistakes above, it's a 8/8.5 essay
Many people believe that social networking site like Facebook have had a huge negative impact on
both individuals and society.

Do what extent do you agree?

It is of great concern in society that our general public has been negatively influenced by innumerable
social networking websites. Though, this comes with a benefits of being in touch with friends all over the
world, but drawbacks relates to the additional screen time, less productivity, low tax collection, and
small minimal interaction between family members at home. All these factors make me to agree with
the statement.

Since the innovation of the latest social networking websites like Instagram, Facebook, and Twitter,; it is
more convenient and easy for the masses to be in direct contact with any of their friends or
communicate to anyone anywhere inall over the world within. For example, ever since I came back from
the United Kingdom, I have nothad never faced any difficulty to be in constant touch with any of my
foreign friends. Everyone is just a call away. and wWhat’s even more delightful is the luxury of free calls
worldwide through these websites.

Nevertheless, the disadvantages of these websites far outweigh the advantages. For instance, current
generation is already consuming most of the time on laptops, tablets, and mobile. These websites are
distracting youth from their true educational engagements. The latest stats from the department of
education show that the children a decade ago were 30% more productive and competent in their
content and approach as compared to the students todaythese days. This is one of the leading factors
affecting countries'y economic and social growth.

Moreover, with free calls worldwide via whatsapp, IMO, Facebook, and Skype, etc. the government is
losing a handsome amount of revenue in terms of tax collection from local and foreign calls. If people
use landline or mobile for communication all over the world, government can generate enough tax that
can be to invested in public welfare projects. For example, in UAE these websites are banned for general
public to encourage the usage of landline. Furthermore, it has been observed that there is an increasing
level of miss less communication between family members living in the same house. Time families used
to spend together while sharing daily routines and experiences isare now being passed on social
websites in front of the screen.

In conclusion, it is truly worrisome to see our society getting badly impacted by the social networking
websites. As a nation, we must focus on our professional growth while spending more time on the
productive activities, rather than wasting it to scroll down the screens on websites like Facebook. etc.

Full marks for structure. Very well articulated with intro para, first body para taking side of social media,
and next two body paras in favour of it's negative impact, and then conclusion. Use of linking words
before each paragraph is great as well.

Also, your sentences are short and comprehensive, which will greatly benefit you. I will give it a 7 Band.
To improve:

- Though/Although and But don't come together. So when you write a sentence that starts with
Although/Though, just write the first part, followed by a comma, and then second part.

- Several singular/plural errors that I've corrected. You are losing probably half a band just because of
these.

- Use the, a, or an, more to make your sentence more coherent. Read out loud to understand where it
needs to be. For examples in one sentence 'the disadvantages far outweigh the disadvantages', you used
the's really well. Just like in that sentence, use it more often.

- Some grammatical errors that I've corrected above. Your biggest error is using extra words. See the
words I've cut. It makes it compact and well-written.

- Never use etc in essay or speaking. Such list 2-3 things in a solid way. Etc doesn't represent anything.
It's informal and slang. Words like 'only' and 'so on' are slang words and not used in essays. When listing
things, just like 2-3 things, instead of saying 'A, B, and so on'.
Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have a huge negative impact on
both individuals and society.

To what extent do you agree?

With the increased use of social media in the recent years, many people are becoming more concerned
about the adverse effect the networking media have has on the individuals and the society. While there
are countless of benefits of using social media, like Facebook and Instagram, in my opinion, uncontrolled
and excessive use of such media have has its toll on both the individuals and the society.

Undoubtedly, the advantages of using social media are many. Firstly, social media have has brought
friends and relatives together more than ever before. This is especially true for those who live far away.
We can now instantly reach to the dear ones and get and share latest updates of each other, even if we
are located in the different continent. Secondly, social media provides a positive platform to share
knowledge with each other in the community or in an institution. For example, sStudents can now easily
share their notes and ideas with their classmates and even with their teacher using these platforms.

However, the disadvantages of social media outweigh the advantages in several ways. Younger
generations spends a significant amount of time each day on social networking. To give an example, my
16-year-old niece uploads a minimum of ten pictures every day, and share multiple statuses and
moments on the Facebook. This, consequently, has affected her productivity and ledad to a decrease in
study time, which in turn ledad to a poorer grade in college.

In addition, sharing excessive personal information and moments publicly leads to a breach of an
individual's privacy. People with bad intentions can now easily track individuals to do harm. For
example, Ssocial networking provides a huge platform for cyberbullying. Young girls committing suicide
after experiencing cyberbullying is a common news in the newspapers around the world.

To sum up, social networking is an inescapable reality of the modern civilization. Despite significant
positive aspects of such media, the disadvantages of the platforms are many and need to be looked for.

Individuals, especially younger generation, should always use the networking site in moderation and
keep their personal information private as much as possible.

This is a rather well structured essay. Full marks for structure and arguments, and linking words and
vocabulary. This is a 7-7.5 Band essay, but can easily be made 8+ essay if above corrections are worked
upon.

- Your has/have are usually off. Always see what is the actual thing that you are going to describe with
has/have or is/are.

- There are a lot of places where we need to write 'the'.

- I avoid many mistakes by reading my paragraph loud to myself to see how it feels in saying. We make
mistakes in writing that we don't in speaking. Reading out loud and listening to it help us catch those
mistakes.

Many people believe that social networking site like Facebook have had a huge negative impact on
both individuals and society.

Do what extent do you agree?

As wWe all know that social networking websites, such as Facebook, Whatsapp, and IMO, have become
the part of our lives. like Facebook, Whatsapp, Imo etc. I think they have more negative influence on
individuals and society as a whole.our public individually and as a whole.

On one hand, some people found find these sites as modern technologicaly advancements that provides
, an easiest easy way to communicate with others in the outer world. That’s why they are gaining
popularity day by day. For instance, today a five- year-sold kid knows well about Facebook or Google.

On the other hand, drawbacks of social websites, such as (Facebook,) far outweigh its benefits. Firstly,
people are becoming Facebook addicts. This trend is visible in people of all ages. addiction users that
actually distract people of all ages. Secondly, misuses of such sites is becominge more common. For
exampleTo illustrate this, youngsters are trying to seek real friendships and relations over these sites,
here rather than using them for as information tools. point of view.

Thirdly, usage of Facebook and other sites for long hours can be considered as is just the wastage of
time. Fourthly, instead of having privacy rules, a lot of users are still unaware of setting their personal
information. As a consequence, their data remains open and sometimes get hacked. Unfortunately , I
have been the victim of it. Lastly, some people use these social networking sites to violate religions,
nationalities and personalities. even, Tthus, negatively disturbing the social environment. For example,
likewise cartoonish paintings of religious and political persons created a lot of violation on social media
last year.

To sum up, I think that the use of social websites has have more negative impression on our community,
both personally and collectively. It is being a wastage of time and energy, and prevent concentrating our
youth from concentration on their tasks and goals.

This essay unfortunately won't get a 7 even. There are several issues with it. The biggest one is structure.

1) For the structure, either use 2 reasons per paragraph and explain them, or use 1 reason and 1
example of it. For example, your last reason is well-explained. But your reason number 1 and 3 are just
mere one-liners. Your reason number 2 and 4 are more than one-line but still just mere description.
Instead of giving many reasons, explain each reason in more detail with context.
Your paragraph in favour of social media doesn't follow this rule either. You started well by saying that
'it provides easy way of communication' but didn't build upon that point. You should have given an
example of how it is solving communication problem rather than getting distraction to children knowing
about Facebook.

2) There are a lot of grammatical errors which I've corrected. Do analyse them and learn from them.

3) You will greatly benefit by reducing the sentence sizes. Sometimes one sentence of yours has as much
as 3. Try using shorter sentences, and starting new sentences instead of connecting many sentences.

4) I avoid many mistakes by reading my paragraph loud to myself to see how it feels in saying. We make
mistakes in writing that we don't in speaking. Reading out loud and listening to it help us catch those
mistakes. In your essay, there are several errors in how a sentence is written. Read out loud to yourself to
see if the flow seems right.

5) Never use etc. in essay or speaking. Such list 2-3 things in a solid way. Etc. doesn't represent anything.
It's informal and slang. Words like 'only' and 'so on' are slang words and not used in essays. When listing
things, just like 2-3 things, instead of saying 'A, B, and so on'.

6) Just be aware of your tone. You are not lecturing so don't use words like, 'This WILL make this
happen'. Instead say, 'This CAN make this happen'.
Many people believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact
on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

Socialising online is great fun and a trend these days. It can be beneficial but at the same time, it may
prove fatal as well. I partially agree that use of social sites, like Facebook, can adversely impact a person
or the community.

In On one hand, the networking on social websites helps people to be connected and , know what's
happening in one’s world, as it is an easy way of staying in touch with one another. For instance, I met
one of my graduation friends on Facebook almost after almost twelve years. I tried all my sources to find
him before, but only this helped.

On the other hand, this showcases your personal life in front of public or people whom you probably do
not know. Some can become jealous or some would and think you are showing off. Additionally,
Children children can get addicted and attracted to some of these networking sites. For example, in
2016, 18 children died playing a game called ‘Blue Whale’ on Facebook, which basically motivates and
encourages you to do dangerous activities like suicide.

Moreover, your personal data and profile can be leaked or processed by an external entity for their own
use. There has have been incidents where profile pictures were downloaded and then used unethically.
A good illustration on example of this is the latest news of data leak by a company called ‘Cambridge
Analytica’ where they which stole Facebook user’s data and sold it to many companies and political
parties.

In conclusion, one should limit the use of social sites just to browse and connecting to friends rather
than divulging their personal information to anyone. Authorities and government should try and
regulate the content so that it is not exposed to wider public or business entities. If necessary steps are
not taken, then I agree to some extent that this can negatively affect a person or the society.

This is the most well-written essay. A 7.5 band. Even 8 is possible if some mistakes are reduced.

- Always 'on one hand' not in one hand.

- I think you will greatly benefit by reducing the sentence sizes. Sometimes one sentence of yours has as
much as 3 parts that are connected by 'and' 'so' 'as'. Try using shorter sentences, and starting new
sentences instead of connecting many sentences.

- One more mistake that is common is using words out of order. For example, not 'almost after 12 years'.
Instead, 'After almost 12 years'. I avoid these mistakes by reading my paragraph loud to myself to see
how it feels in saying. We make mistakes in writing that we don't in speaking. Reading out loud and
listening to it help us catch those mistakes.
Many people believe that social networking websites such as FB have had a huge negative impact on
both individuals and society . To what extent do you agree?

These days, Tthere is an ongoing debate between people that whether the usage of different websites is
beneficial owing to the changing trends of the society, while others opine or the usage of such
applications and websites can be detrimental for to the society. While there are strong arguments on
both sides, I personally believe there are more down sides of using the social media. In this essay, I shall
discuss both facets of the argument while presenting my point of view.

Firstly, what the inception of internet and websites have done, is that it has brought people together.
People, especially the elderly, who had lost contact with their mates after schools and colleges can now
stay be in contact with each otherthem. A recent research suggests that, almost 60% of the inhabitants
of the world have active accounts on Facebook and all such applications , while and 50% of thesem are
being active users. Furthermore, Facebook and social media websites are also being could be used as a
primary tool for advertisement and media campaigns, providing opportunities to earn livelihood for
several people..

However, children these days , spend a lot of their precious time in using these websites. As a result,
their studies are badly affected. and Even worse, they no longer take part in outdoor games , or indulge
in physical activities. Taking part in extra-curricular activities was once considered a key part in a child’s
upbringing. A cousin of mine, who was a very studious student at school lost his focus way in college,
and eventually dropped out due to excessive time wasteage on using computer and all such websites.

In addition, since the inception of the internet and social media in particular, people prefer to staying in
contact with their friends and families on Facebook ,Whatsapp , Twitter and all such websites in general
to avoiding social contact. As a consequence, relationship bonding, once considered a pillar of strength
is no longer a pivotal part in the society. In my country , during the religious events and festivals, people
even prefer to greet one another on Facebook or Whatsapp on religious events and festivities, instead
of rather than visiting each other.

While there are strong arguments on both sides , I believe usage of the social networking sites should be
minimized and it should be used only as a leisure activity, or when one has an ample spare time.

This is in the range of 6.5-7 Band.

Many people believe that social networking sites (such as facebook) have had a huge negative impact
on both individuals and society.

To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In the last few years, social networking sites are becoming extremely popular among in the people of all
ages. Some people think that it has indulged some negative effects on the prospect of individual and
social life. In my opinion, productivity and importance of social value are affected severely by the heavy
adoption usage of the popular social websites like Facebook.

Social networking sites may not have been would not be so popular if they dido not have any positive
side attributes. By utilizing their large enormous big network on social media and various facilities,
people are easily becoming entrepreneurs. to many new businesses. When those these sites were not
available, it was very difficult to bear the expenses of marketing and as a result, new businesses were
not created significantly common. But after the introduction of websites introducing the site like
fFacebook, it has become is very easier to come up with any new business idea, and introduce thatit in
front of the massive end-users who eventually become a customers for the business. personnel. In my
country, I have found many successful businessmen in last few years, who have become famous only
because of the sites like Ffacebook. According to a recent study by a popularfamous business magazine,
in every year 10% of the graduates who have completed their graduation creates their own identity in
the competitive business world by using fFacebook. They are not only contributing to the countries’
economy but also creating new job opportunitiess which help to lower down the unemployment rate.

Nevertheless, the negative effect of using the demanding social networking sites outweighs its positive
impact. For example, people have become less productive in their assigned tasks for their integrity
withbecause of the social websites like facebook, twitter, snapchat and so on. Introductionce with
strangers h unknown people and interest in diverse culture has always been a fascination for the people
of various ages. HavingBy using ed it in their everyday life, people are moving towards the addictive
zone. As a result, it harms their study, business and even personal life. Addictive people refused to
perform any responsibility what they supposed to do if the sites were not available. In my friends circle, I
have found a lots of people of them who were attached addicted/obsessed with to thesuch networking
sites so impassionately that they could not manage to pass the exam because of the lack of
concentration in their studies y.

Furthermore, because of the increasing use of the social networking site, people are not paying
attention to their family members and acquaintances. They have become antiunsocial and do not
understand the value of any relationships. Since they are concentrated only in virtual relationships and
have created a community with the people they meet virtually, they are not interested into sharing e
their feelings with their parents or any other close family member. s of the family. In addition, people
who are captivated by the popular websites where they can chat and share their personal life , do not
have any interest in face to face real relationship. As a consequence, they are treated unsocial and
detached by from the society. Recently, I read a an article news about the poor relationships within a
family relationship in which where the writer investigates and finds out that overusage ing of social sites
deteriorates the relationship among the individuals and results in nuclear families.

In conclusion, social as well as personal life is significantly affected due to the heavy influence of the
social networking site. It makes people uninterested in their job, study or any other productive activities
and also restrains them from being to be responsible to their family and society.

Full marks for structure. Very well articulated with intro para, first body para taking side of social media,
and next two body paras in favour of it's negative impact, and then conclusion. Use of linking words
before each paragraph is great as well.

A few things to improve:

- Use of proper vocabulary, it’s okay to use simple words as long as they are correctly inserted in a
sentence
- Grammatical errors which have been corrected in the essay
- Try to reduce the sentence size. In some instances, words are used and explained further which
are making sentences longer.
- You have written twice as much words as needed for Writing Task 2. This only made you prone
to more mistakes and didn't help get any more marks for extra words.
- Every time I write anything, I read it out loud to myself. This act helps me spot up to 80% of all
grammatical errors, spelling mistakes, and wrong sentence structures. I can clearly see that
you've not re-read it out loud to yourself. Please make that a habit.
Many People believe that social networking sites (such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact
on both individuals and society.

Social media websites have become a big addiction in the present era. I strongly believe that it has
more negative consequences on our society.

Undoubtedly, social media websites play a crucial role to socialise with friends and families. Due to this
these websites, nowadays, number of migrated couples come very close and stay connected even if
they are stayed staying at thousands of miles away. For example, in the present situation, many
students go to abroad for their higher studies. In this scenario, Facebook and Twitter is are very useful
for them to their shareing their feelings and ups and downs in life.

Nonetheless, the disadvantages of using social media websites are far outweighed to the advantages.
The principle negative impact is on the personal relationships. Spending countless hours time on such
websites results in begins with family disputes and even ends with divorces. In a recent survey, it was
has found that 25% of all relationships are broken due to people spending less time with their partners
as compared to spending time rather than on the Facebook.

Moreover, it also affects the study of many students. They get poor results as they investing much more
time on making new friends and chatting with their peer groups, instead of concentrating on the difficult
subjects. A person gettings notified with the posts of other friends recent other friends posts and latest
other notifications is the main reason behind spending countless hours time on such websites.
Students, generally, get distracted easily in such situations and this leads to poor grades ultimately.

In conclusion, social media websites are highly addictive and due to this, many people such as students
and couples are getting negative impact on their studiesy and relationships. If it is not stopped
currently, society would be suffered from its bad consequences in the near future.

Your structure and thoughts are well articulated, but the number of grammatical and sentence structure
mistakes has really affected your score. It would be less than 7 Band for this essay.

- All the grammatical and sentence structure errors have been pointed out. Please go through them one
by one and try to learn.

- Do not give any advice at the end of essays. Last line is not needed.
Now a days food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live.

People spendt less time in preparing food today than they used to do a few years beforeago. The impact
of this changing trend is multi-fold,ple and it is also aeffecting people's way of living in current
yearstoday. However there are some??? [What's your thesis?]

Undeniably, there are multiple advantages in spending less time in the kitchen. Super shops, like Coles
and Woolworths, sells cut and frozen vegetables, canned food and processed meats. This has
reducedcut the food processing time to half. As a result, fewer less meal preparing hours time give
individuals, particularly women, some extra hours to concentrate on other aspects of life, like family
and education. Secondly, working couples can quickly prepare on- the- go meals and still enjoy extra
hours time for spending to spend relaxing time with each other and their family. Finally, fast food chains
like McDonalds and Hungry Jacks now sells complete meals with for less money and with more options.
They areis is particularly favorite among the students and busy couples who can just drop in any of
these fast food shops and have their lunches and dinners ready in no time.

However, this new habit of eating processed and fast food hasve some disadvantages also. Frozen and
processed food contains have less nutritious value than freshly prepared meals. For example, nutrient
labels of some canned vegetables shows that the can does not contain any vitamins other than energy
and sodium. In addition, numerous research provides strong evidence that the fast food hasve
detrimental aeffect on one’s body and it increases the chance of chronic diseases, like obesity and
diabetes.

To sum up, less meal preparation time has have both advantages and disadvantages. Despite the fact
that canned, processed food provides more time for family and education, people should always try to
opt for freshly prepared food for getting maximum nutritionous benefits of the food that they consume.

This essay will receive 6 Band.

- You did not follow the structure for a two-sided essay. Please see it in the videos again.

- Also, there are too many grammatical errors that will seriously affect your score (affect, not effect! ;-)_
Please see above all the corrections and learn from these.
Nowadays food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live? Discuss
both sides and give your opinion.

People have been debating about the convenience of cooking of food in the present generation with
some merits and demerits. This essay will discuss both the views and show howIn my opinion,
prepaeration of dishes these days have has altered the human life in a better way.

Although, the availability of preservatives and colors have has made the taste of the cuisines taste
delicious and look mouth-watering, it has shown side effects on health. Moreover, some usage of
advanced equipments are is hazardous to one’s body system. As an For example, the ultra-violet rays
emmitted by the microwave oven increases cancerous probability.

However, discovery of mind blowing appliances like cooking ranges, microwaves, ovens, and blenders
etcetera have not only reduced the time of prepaeration, but also increased the easiness ease aspect of
preparing a lunch or a dinner. For instance, rice used to take about 30-40 minutes to boil in early days ,
but with pressure cooker it only takes only 5-7 minutes.

Additionally, there are many ready to eat and frozen products that are available in the market that
makes your cooking so simple that it saves a lot of time and also makes it very hassle free. For
illustrationexample, the frozen cut vegetables which is are used almost everyday, cuts on saves so much
valuable time which would otherwise would have gone in washing, cutting, and boiling in the traditional
style of making food.

In conclusion, I think am opined to the fact that advancement of technology which brings greatest and
the latest equipments in kitchen along with easy to cook food products, has have definitely converted
huaman life to more time saving and improvised way of cooking.

Just like Task 1 structure is really good. But there are some fundamental things I'd like to highlight that
will hurt your score if not improved.

- Your has/have and is/are are usually off. Always see what is the actual thing that you are going to
describe with has/have or is/are. For example, you've used a sentence 'Availability of preservatives and
colors have'. You thought that 'have' is describing preservatives and colors, but in fact 'have' is
connected to 'availability'. Hence, it will be 'has' because the word availability is singular. Just like that
see all the corrections I've made for similar error.

- In introduction for 2-sided essays, always use First Person -> In my opinion.

- Write general essay. Don't say 'your cooking'. Just say 'cooking'.

- In conclusion, don't try to be fancy with phrases like 'I am opined to the fact'. This phrase is
grammatically incorrect.

- And spelling mistakes as you've already pointed out

I think this would be 6.5 band essay.

Nowadays food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improve the way people live?

Most people would argue that today, preparing food is simpler than it was in the past. I think this has
enhanced people’s lifestyle.

Undoubtedly, modern appliances which play an important role in making food easier consume
electricity. For instance, my family has noticed a dramatic rise in electricity bill amount, by 2000 rupees,
after starting the usage of the microwave and electric stove in food making. This means anyone, whose
with low monthly income is very low such as 10000 rupees, cannot afford to pay 30% of his salary to
electricity bill in this fast-growing expensive lifestyle. where he has to manage other expenditure of
daily household. In short, some people may not be able to improve their lives by adopting easier food
making strategies.

Nevertheless, contemporary methods of food preparation has improved our livesfe in many ways. For
example, quick food preparation means savinge huge amount of time. My wife and I both work for at
least 10 hours a day. Now if she cooks without modern appliances, she will spend more time in the
kitchen only, and cannot give much attention to other activities. On the other hand, with the help of
modern cooking methods, she prepares breakfast like scrambled eggs in just a minute in the microwave.
This has helped both of us in maintaining our work-life balance.

Furthermore, citizen’s health has also improved with today’s food making techniques. When it used to
take longer was lengthier to prepare food, most people who lived far from their homes prefered to eat
outside food. This meants eating in low quality food and with fewer nutrients. This has resulted in many
dangerous diseases, such as food poisoning and stomach cancer. However, today anybody can bake
food anywhere. For instance, I prepare my evening snacks in office’s microwave. Moreover, during my
college time, my roommates and I were using electric-stove to make most of the food, like noodles and,
bread, and so on in ourt hostel-room.

In conclusion, it is clear that nowadays cooking has become very easy and this has ameliorated human’s
people's living standards by saving their vital time and improving their health.

Again full marks for structure, examples, linking words and vocab.

Things to improve:

- You will greatly benefit by reducing the sentence sizes. Especially the one in first body para. Try using
shorter sentences, and starting new sentences instead of connecting many sentences.

- Words like 'only' and 'so on' are slang words and not used in essays. When listing things, just like 2-3
things, instead of saying 'A, B, and so on'.

- Avoid some grammatical errors that I've corrected above and you are 8+.

This is about 7.5/8 Band essay.

Nowadays, food is become easier to prepare. How this change improved the way people live?

Cookery, which was once thought as a mission for theof whole day, is now a mere one hour exercise
with the innovation of short recipes, new spices, and more professional and thorough approach towards
cooking. It has helped people to save time from in kitchen, and spend while spending more with family
and allowing them to focus on their professional careers.

As human, everyone in today’s life wants to cut corners, especially when it comes to the time in the
kitchen. Researchers and cooking experts have developed precise recipes. This has facilitated people to
prepare the same dish in mere an hour time that used to take 3-,4 hours to cook in the past. Like
Biryani, my My grand mom often usually shares her experiences of making biryani with natural herbs
and ingredients taking most of the time. This was also a challenge during the summers. But now, with
the availability of readymade packed spices, cooking biryaniit is a matter of maximum an hour. During
my studies in the UK, I used to make biryani with in an hour time with all the available spices and the
latest methods.

MoreoverHowever, cooking has also been taken up as a subject in the developed countries, therefore
making it easier for the chefs to teach the cuisines in a more professional and way. With a myriad of
cooking channels airing cooking shows round the clock, young kids and families are getting more
attracted towards this profession.

All these advancements have made life not only easier, but also allowed people to spend more time
with their families and focus more on their professional growth. My wife has started a part time job
from home whilst giving full attention to the kids and cooking. My mother has never been so relaxed
while we were growing up just because most of her the time of her was used to be spentd in cooking
daily meals.

In conclusion, cooking is more appropriate and easy these days as compared to that in the past. Masses
have been in great positives Lives of most people have been improved with the latest ready-made
spices and cooking methodologies.

- I see that for one-sided essay, you had difficulty in structuring your thoughts better. You found it
difficult to give 3 solid reasons and examples of 'how lives have been improved'. For instance, paragraph
2 about cooking shows doesn't give any reason, how life has been improved. I would consider this a 6.5
Band essay.

Things to improve:

- See where I add commas, the's , and correct singular / plural.

- However and therefore don't come together in one sentence. In fact, no two linking words come in one
sentence.

Nowadays food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live?

We all know that food is the basic necessity of life to survive. Around the world, with technological
advancements, now food has now become effortless to prepare. In my opinion, easy and instant ways of
cooking food has have upgraded the way people live in.

In the past, food was traditionally made on fire in the open air due to the lack of resources. There was
no availability of modern kitchen with a lot of accessories. Wood was used as a common source to ignite
the fire for cooking. This process used to take a lot of time was found to be a time taking process and
people usually prepared only one dish at a time.

However, with the passage of time, supply of gas provideds better way of food preparation. For
instance, it This resulted in savinges a lot of time in comparison to the old method at first. Secondly, it
provideds an opportunity to cook multiple dishes within a short time. Furthermore, it enableds hosts to
manage more guests on special occasions, like Eid and birthday events, organized at home.

Nowadays, electrical equipments, for example, microwave oven, electric burners and latest cooking
range, provide are the easier ways to ready cook food within minimum time. It basically follows the
scientific method of HTST (high temperature short time) cooking which ultimately prevents maximum
nutrients loss from deterioration at LTLT (low temperature long time). Moreover, the vast variety of
foods, including bakery items, pizza, puff pastries, chicken patties and roasted meat can now be
effortlessly prepared using the modern appliances.

To conclude, above mentioned modern methods haves consequently raised the pupil’s standard of
living to by many folds. Rapid shift of cooking styles, from fire to gas and then to electrical equipment,
usage shows the real advancements and positive impact on people's pupil’s lives.

This essay might get 6 Band! Why? Because you have answered the wrong question and did not even
follow the structure that I've explained in the course.

The question was 'How people's lives have improved', and you have description of modern appliances
and technological advancements. That's a big No No. There some lines in para 3 that says about saving
time, cooking multiple dishes, and hosting guests. That's the only relevant part for question.

Moreover, the structure that I explain in the course is:

Either give 2 solid reasons in detail in each paragraph, or one reason plus one personal example. Have
you followed this? In para 3 you have given reasons but just one line each for 3 reasons. Either give 2
reasons in detail, or give 1 and tell an example.

Then there are several grammatical errors which you can see above.
Q: Nowadays food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live?

Answer:

Preparing food is not a big deal nowadays. It helps people to live a healthy life. I completely agreebelieve
that, home-made food havehas had many positive impacts in people’’s livfes.

People always love to try different combinations when making food. It has some detrimental impacts on
human food habit. Sometime pizza lovers make pizza with different ingredients by using pizza-maker
devices, which they eat 3 times in a day! It is not only harmful for their body but also this trend leads
them to become fatty. In addition, by following this trend people give less attention to nutrition they
need to keep their body fit.

Nevertheless, the advantage of preparing food have more positive effects in the way people live. In
recent times, people are very conscious regarding health. To maintain a healthy lifestyle it is necessary
to add sufficient healthy meals in their daily diet. By the advancement of modern technology, one can
easily track down the protein content of each componentelement which is used to make food and based
on that they can use certain healthy ingredients to prepare their meals. For example, a patient who
hasve heart disease would always try to avoid salt as and rather they are supposed to eat less salty food
which is not possible within ready-to-eat made food.

Furthermore, these days food lovers are less dependent on restaurants because it is easy to prepare
food atin home. So, by avoiding restaurants they can save their money and cook various recipes with the
help of social networking site like Youtube or Facebook. According to a recent survey on various city
restaurants released by a food blog, the popularity and profit of some specific food jointscorners are
falling drastically because people love to follow free tutorials from where they learn to prepare delicious
foods.

In conclusion, home made foods are always preferable in modern daystimes. It seems that customized
food helps people in to remaining fit and at the same time food loversing people can taste a plethora of
recipes by making food on their own with the help of social media.

Comments:

Very well written essay with appropriate choice of words

A few preposition mistakes which have been corrected in the essay

Overall it’s a solid 7.5 – 8 band essay

Nowadays food has become easier to prepare. Has this change improved the way people live?

Due to the enhancement in the way of preparing meal, now, people spend less time to make it today
than in as comparing with the past. I strongly agree that this is a positive development.

Undoubtedly, there are some negative effects on the society due to the new ways of less timing to
preparing thee meals. One of the most considerable factor among all of them is laziness. As most of the
meals are ready to eat within the maximum of 30 minutes with the use of Mmicrowave oOven, many
people have started avoiding taking proper meals. to avoid taking their proper meal even. For example,
generally, students who live in shareding apartments, they prefer to cook Maggi frequently as it only
takes 5 minutes to prepare. Avoiding regular healthy meal, attracts results in more health problems.

Nonetheless, preparing food in less time has its own important benefits. For instance, it saves precious
time than it was in the past. Before Ffew decades ago, people have to required at least 1.5-2 hours to
make a meal, but now, it is created in just 30 minutes on averagegenerally, which offers one more free
time hours to spend with our families and friends.

Moreover, it has also created less burden on women as husbands can also prepare their meals using the
latest technology. For example, Roti maker machine makes same bread as the women used to prepared
by putting in a lot of their huge efforts. Nowadays, both partners are working to cope up with the high
cost of living. Due to this these kind of technologiesy, more husbands come forward to help their wives
in cooking which makes results in a balanced-life for both of them.

In conclusion, certainly, meal preparation in short time today has has prepared in very less time in the
present times. It offers many benefits, such as getting more time to spend with their the loved ones and
women facing get lesser burden as compared with to the past. By seeing development in the cooking
industryies, we would might receive more equipment and tools in the future, that which may require
our just 10 minutes to prepare for preparing any meal.

There are several english mistakes here. It would be a 6ish essay at max. I would advise postponing the
IELTS test day and spending more time going through everything in the course, even the 10-hour audio in
the listening section, and 60-minutes of speaking practice by making WhatsApp video messages. Only
then you will be able to improve your English in general, which would then show in the way you write
your sentences.

The larger issue is with english language. You have not been using much english in your daily life. Not
even for speaking. Hence, i again strongly recommend, using the next month or two to just speak and
listen to english. Writing will improve as a by-product of that.
In some countries, a foreign language is taught at primary school. Do the advantages outweigh the
disadvantages?

Answer:

In some parts of the world, as well as in my country, children are learning the international language in
their elementary schools. I believe that the benefits of learning a new language overshadow the
drawbacks.

Undoubtedly, there are some disadvantages of learning a foreign language. Most important of them all
is that if students were are taught international dialect in a primary school, they would not be able to
develop their mother tongue. For instance, when I was studying, my school had focused only on learning
English, and I was forced to speak it every day even outside of school hours. This has resulted in me not
developing my native language skills.

Nevertheless, despite the disadvantage above, learning a foreign language

aids in exploring to explore its culture. For example, in my country, most of its traditional art forms are
documented in its national language ’Hindi’. This means that by learning the Indian language, one can
easily understand India’s classic history. The Sstudents will can also get motivated by knowing the fact
that what a particular country has achieved in the past, and this will can boost their confidence to
achieve the same for their own country.

Furthermore, foreign language opens the door to international opportunities. Most of the international
employers seek a candidate who knows the local dialect apart from the technical abilities. Germany is
the classic example here., where mMost of the companies hire only those who have fluency in German.
If schools concentrate only on one language, a student usually will ends up working in his own country,
and at a later stage, he has to learn a foreign language to secure a job in other countries.

In conclusion, it is clear that foreign vernacular plays a vital role in understanding country’s antiquities
and exploring better jobs in other nations. These benefits far outweigh the minor drawbacks if any.

This might get an 8 Band. It's very well written for most part.

Things to improve:

- Just be aware of your tone. You are not lecturing so don't use words like, 'This WILL make this happen'.
Instead say, 'This CAN make this happen'.

- Avoid some grammatical errors that I've corrected above and you are 8+.
In some countries foreign language is taught in primary schools. Do the advantages of learning new
languages outweigh the disadvantages?

Learning a new language has become increasingly popular among several educational institutes. Foreign
language has become an essential subject in curriculum of few primary schools. This trend has not only
helped nations to come closer to each other, but also opened numerous opportunities to live, work, and
study abroad. I would argue in favor of this development, although reservations still exist with some
school of thoughts.

For some parents, a new language is not imperative for educational progress. It seems to be a burden on
students because, with no active practice after primary schools, all the efforts of learning any language
are put into waste in matter of 2 to 3 months. Therefore, according to these parents, excluding these
languages will be of great help for students to focus on compulsory subjects like science and math etc.

However, the benefits of learning new languages in primary school hasve a huge positive impact on
social growth of young students. The age of 10-12 is the best time for young ones to take up the
challenge of learning a new language with their developing minds. Thousands of new apps have also
been invented which can help students to continue practice with any foreign language. This approach
works tremendously towards reducing the misunderstandings and bringing the nations together for
better social and economic growth.

Moreover, the extra language helps people to immigrate toin any other country for living or working
purposes., It also allowing allows them to go deep into the cultures of other nations and take positives.
My father has learned German language during his early school days and just because of this possessed
skill, all of our family has since been settled in Germany. Without having lived here, we could have never
been able to know the sacrifices of this nation in building their country from scratch to top after the
world war.

To conclude, it is a positive shift by some countries to introduce foreign language as a subject in primary
education. With little efforts, this change will not only emerge as a concrete step towards world’s peace,
but also make this world a better place, to live by making and this planet a multi- culture place, to live.

- This is a pretty good essay. Worthy of even 7.5 Band.

Things to improve:

- Sentence structure has gone out of hands a couple of times. In 3rd paragraph and then again in
conclusion. Try to never join more than 2 distinct sentences together. Use a full-stop. And start new.
Otherwise, it get's complicated to handle and you end up making mistakes.

- Rest are some small errors I've corrected. Surprisingly, very few same mistakes as in the above 2 essays.
In some countries a foreign language is taught at primary school . Do the advantages of learning a new
color outweighs the disadvantages ??

Learning a second language for children at primary school is common today in the education systems
around the world. The increased trend , eventually, has eventually led to the argument on whether it is
really worth spending the extra time teaching kids a new language at an early age.

No one can deny the fact that learning a second language has numerous positive sides. Multiple
research provides evidence that kids learning a foreign language at an early age have an increasesd
cognitive and literacy skills. In addition, the findings of theseis studies show that learning a new
language increases kids communication and organizational skills by developing their ability to express
their feelings. Furthermore, studies shows that learning a second language increases develops children’s
perspective about the world and they learn to respect other cultures and difference s. For these reasons,
I think learning a second language is a must for young kids.

Nevertheless, there are some disadvantages of learning second language from a very early age. Firstly,
young kids sometimes gets confused in the middle of learning two separate languages at the same time.
This has impacts and delays the children’s speech ability. For examples, it is common in children of
bilingual immigrant families to start speaking at a later age than the children of native families.
Secondly, the tutors teaching kids the second language are often not skilled enough to teach. As a result,
this effects the overall language development. For example, although English is taught at the school
level at almost all the schools , in my country, due to inexperienced teachers, not many percentage of
educated people can speak fluent English in the country.

To conclude, it is true that learning a second language has some disadvantages , like delayed speech and
faulty language learning due to inexperienced staff. However, the benefits of the learning a second
language has its many benefits that prepares the young kids for their future in this competitive world.

This essay will receive 6-6.5 Band.

- You did not follow the structure for a two-sided essay. Please see it in the videos again.

- Also, there are too many grammatical errors (a bit less than previous one though). Please see above all
the corrections and learn from these.
In some countries, a foreign language is taught at primary schools. Do the advantages of learning a
new language outweigh the disadvantages?

We live in a globalised world which encourages all people to must learn a foreign language in order to
cope with the modern trend. So, I think that it is better to start learning a new language as early as
possible, as it has more benefits than the drawbacks.

On one hand, it is considered that the main disadvantages of teaching children another language at
primary school are that, - firstly, it could affect their ability to learn their mother tongue properly, and
they might get confused by learning multiple languages at a time. Secondly, it could be the waste of
their study time which could be spent on learning core subjects such as mathematics, technology and
sciences etc. Finally, the learning of the foreign language adds more loads on the young kids and takes
some of their fun time.

On the other hand, in some countries, knowing a foreign language at the a younger age is easier and
need less time than learning it at the an older age. Grown up kids have fresh minds and they could pick
up the pronunciation more easily. Also, they learn with no are not shy and talk freely without any fear
of making mistakes.

Moreover, early teaching of a foreign language has a positive impact on their personalities as it
broadens their horizons and improves their social skills with the great exposure to a wide range of
cultures. They will also get advantage in their upcoming studies, as well as in their and work careers as
well in the long run.

To sum up, learning an international language is a demanding skill in today's world.with the passage of
time. That is why, I think that it should be learnt at an earlier age as the benefits outweigh the
drawbacks.

This is a huge improved from previous essay. Structure is perfectly followed and I can see how 'the' are
better used and sentence structures are worked upon. This would be a 7.5 Band essay.

Few things to improve are:

- Some sentence structures and some grammar as I did above.

- Also don't use 'etc' in essays ever. It doesn't mean anything.

In some countries, a foreign language is taught at primary schools. Do the advantages of learning a
new language outweigh the disadvantages?

Nowadays, teaching foreign languages in kindergarten is common in many countries. While it has some
disadvantages, but in my opinion advantages of learning different languages outweigh its drawbacks
because students who have learnt foreign languages, have a highermore values in job market andas well
as it is easier for them to move in abroad.

Some nationalists believe that when students learn foreign languages at anin early age then it may
negatively affect badly theirin learning their own language and culture. It is important for children to
have a good grasp ofin their mother tongue inat primary level which might bring them closer to their
own culture, tradition and history. Certainly, when they are taught new languages other than their
native language, it will keep them away from their traditional values. As a result, these
childrenupbringings might not feel any affection and love for their country which is undesirable from a
national point of view. For example, according to a recent stat made by a local Bengali language club in
Bangladesh, almost 20% students of the nursery English medium schools continue their higher studies in
English background and they do not know the memorable history of freedom fight which was held in
1971.

Nevertheless, learning foreign languages have more benefits than drawbacks. Children who are taught
English, Spanish or French in primary level make their foundation at ain global standard. Many global
companies expand their businesses in different parts of the world and to do this they choose peoplethe
persons who have the ability to communicate with them. People who have the prior experience in terms
of the company's preferred language, certainly haveget an advantage and a higher probability ofof being
hired there. In this way, these students can help their nation to expand new businesses with foreigners
in their nation and professionally they get benefited as well. For example, in the last few years there are
lots of international companies that have opened their branches in Bangladesh and in most of the cases
the first man they have dealt with is highly qualified in foreign languages.

Furthermore, students who want to do their higher studies in renowned universities may find it easier to
be enrolled admitted due to their prior expertise in a language. Most of the renowned universities of the
world are asking forrequire a certain skill level in a particular language fromor their students. For this,
university goers must have tomust prove their communication skill by giving some language test. The
person who hasve completed their learning of foreign languages from childhood, will find it easier while
taking those exams. To illustrate, Bangladeshi community in Oxford university reveals that, more than
70% of Bangladeshi students have completed their primary to graduation study in English medium.
SoSo, it is clearly visible that learning foreign languages from an early age give an extra advantages for in
enrolling at renowned universities.

In conclusion, teaching second languages from an early stage of a child have many positive
consequences. It seems that, although there are some minor problems butproblems but being taught
foreign languages from the beginning will create lots of opportunities for a student in future of a
student.
This is a well-written essay with good flow and sentence structure.

However, at the same time it was a difficult to read essay because synonyms are being used in the wrong
context. Avoid using difficult vocabulary just for the heck of it.

Please see grammatical errors corrected and try to learn from them.

Overall it is a 7 band essay but your content is 8+. If you can correct these errors, there's no way you are
getting below 8.
4) More and more people prefer to read ebooks rather than paper books. What are the reasons for
this? What problems can this cause for libraries?

Answer:

It has been observed that popularity of e-books is increasing among masses. There are a lot of reasons
for choosing an e-book, but this habit will can also bring a problems to a librariesy.

Undoubtedly, the most important reason for reading an e-book is that it is easy to maintain, especially
when you are travelling. For instance, I spend almost 2-3 hours every day in travelling to my office, and I
love to read books during this time. This means if I carry paper books, I will have to add extra weight to
my bag-pack, whereas I can easily carry hundreds of e-books in my mobile and utilise the bag space for
other stuff, like a lunch box.

Another good reason is that e-books save one’s expenses. For example, when a person orders a physical
book, he has to pay for the book as well as the delivery charges. On the other hand, most of the e-books
are freely available over the Internet and easy to download via a mobile or a computer. Whenever my
favourite author Chetan Bhagat publishes any new book, I quickly get it from the Internet and start
reading it, rather than waiting for the physical copy.

Nevertheless, an e-books will also bring problems for a librariesy. One of the concerning issues is that
library will face difficulty in running its operations. As myriads of persons people are shifting towards
digital books, they may think of cancelling their membership with libraries. This will not only lower the
income of a library, but may also shut the library. This is because without enough money it is hard to
maintain the salaries of the librarians or purchase of new books.

In conclusion, although e-books bring benefits, such as portability and cost-saving, they may jeopardise
the libraries’ operations.

Full marks for one-sided structure. Very well articulated with intro para, two body paras telling reasons,
and one speaking about threat to libraries, and then conclusion. Also, examples, vocab, linking words,
are on spot.

Things to improve:

- Nothing new. Just Pay attention to some commas I've added to make it more intact. And some
grammatical issues.

It's a solid 8 essay already. Correct things above and it's 8.5 Band.
More and more people prefer to read ebooks rather than paper books. What are the reasons for this?
What problems can this cause for libraries?

Significant numbers of people are attracted towards the use of modern book reading techniques, rather
than the conventional paper books. Worldwide, this change has been taken as a matter of concern by
some, but several think it’s a blessing. There are Several several reasons have been attached to for this
change, and with identification of some associated problems with for libraries.

TodayPresently, it is preferable preferred by many to carry a book in any tablet or, mobile device as it is
which convenient to carry while travelling. Less associated weight and the provision of carrying multiple
books in one device have made people to tend towards this shift towards this change. For example,
whenever I am travelling through tram, I am reading my favorite comedian Sir Jack Bill or, fiction writer,
Mr. Edward Smith. The luxuries luxury of ebooks hashave allowed me to read any of my favorite writers
just by the touch of screen, rather than carrying both books in my bag.

Furthermore, Global warming is the biggest challenge for the whole world. and tThis is one of the a
major reasons developed countries are encouraging the usage of modern reading systems over paper
books. With more realistic approach, it is imperative to discourage the culture of traditional reading.

Nevertheless, this trend comes with a list of problems for libraries. People are losing interests in libraries
with the availability of ebooks. As a result, most of the libraries in small towns are getting closed
because of low revenue collection. It may also results in more unemployment and high frustration
among the private library owners worldwide. Recently, the stats published by the New York central
library show the decline of 20% among book readers for the current fiscal year as compared to the last
year.

To conclude, it is evident that a plethora of people are interested to opt for reading ebooks over paper
books. Personal convenience and, environmental benefits are the major reasons towards this shift.
However, it is whilst giving rise to the myriad of problems for libraries like unemployment and, library
closure etc.

After the previous essay, this one really goes down. I am looking at 6-6.5 Band for this. There are few
reasons for this:

- You are trying to get fancy with sentence structures, and they are getting really wrong. For example,
the 3rd sentence in the intro paragraph with terms like 'have been attached' and 'with identification of'
changes the entire tone of your essay. Just go for being simple. Similarly, when you start first body para,
or end conclusion para, your sentences are incorrect as well.

- You are trying to hard to put in high vocab words and they are changing not the best. It looks like it's an
essay written with thesaurus on.
- 2-3 times, I have broken your complex sentence with a full-stop and made a new sentence. Be
thoughtful of that.

- When given 2 reasons, separate them by 'and/or'. When giving 3 reasons, separate the second and the
third by 'and/or'.

- For author or any public personality's name, we don't use Sir, Mr or Ms. Just names.

- And then some are repeats from previous essays that are corrected above.
More and more people prefer to read ebooks rather than paper books. What are the reasons for this?
What problems can this cause for libraries? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant
examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Now a days, there is a huge demand in of people opting for ebooks over the physical books. The reasons
for this change areis multifold and this essay will showcase how this is negatively impacting the libraries.

Firstly, Electronic electronic books are very convenient and very handy to use. They weigh less and are
super easy to navigate too. For instance, the Kindle ebook which are is very popular these days are is
very light weighted and easy to browse. It comes with a lot of features, like including bookmarking and,
whyspersync voice technology etcetera.

Moreover, another big advantage of using an ebook is that you can purchase many titles of books and
download that to one single ebook. As an illustration For example, my ebook has 4 titles of sports that I
am interested in and also I also have 2 children story titles that my son reads when I am not using the
ebook. This is in fact a great benefit over the paper book.

Although, there are many benefits of having ebooks over a regular book, there is a constant threat to
our traditional libraries. Since there is huge demand for ebooks, there is little or no urge for many to
come to libraries. For example, less demand of physical books has lead to the unavailability of these in
the library. The old-age and other regular members who are not so tech savy are finding it difficult to get
their hardcover books. This has also increased a constant fear of libraries loosing their jobs.

In conclusion, we are witnessing that libraries are becoming less popular as the demand for ebooks is
growing over the paper books and this is due to the convenience and easiness ease it brings to the
reader.

Full marks for structure. Very well articulated with intro para, two body paras telling reasons, and one
speaking about threat to libraries, and then conclusion. Another big plus is use of examples and personal
example. Lastly, use of linking words before each paragraph is great.

Things to improve:

- Some grammatical errors that I've corrected above, such as Nowadays is one word, In fact are two
words, and use of is/are was wrong at few places.

- Since both first two paras were going to talk about reasons, it's better to start first para with a linking
word as well, such as Firstly.

- Never use etcetra in essay or speaking. Such list 2-3 things in a solid way. Etcetra doesn't represent
anything. It's informal and slang.

- Illustration is not a right word to give example. Use words like for instance, for examples, such as, only.

- 'Although' is not followed by a comma.

It's a 7 band essay.

More and more people prefer to read ebooks rather than paper books. What are the reasons for this ?
What problem can this cause for libraries?

These days, Tthere is an ongoing debate between people that ebooks have generally replaced paper
books. ,and Mmore and more people are inclined towards reading the former, which in turn, has
impacted the libraries. In this essay, I shall discuss the facets of the argument while presenting my point
of view.

Firstly , with the advent of the internet, the accessibility of ebooks are more easily accessible is a lot
easier comparing as compared to the paper books. Easily, Ddownloadable versions of ebooks are
available online , at a lower cost in comparison to paper books, which has resulted in sharing of
knowledge sharing easy for many . Google, for instance , is a search engine on which with where on a
single search, one has access to all ebooks related to a particular subjecxt or a topic.

Furthermore, cost of ebooks is lower , making them cost effective knowledge learning solution as
compareding to paper books.

Secondly, ebooks are generally easier to read , especially by our today's techy savvy youth . These are
also generally easier to store, whereas, paper books tend to take get more space , are harder to manage
and can be spolied impacted by water ,liquid or fire.

However ,ebooks have tremendously impacted libraries in a negative way. Libraries that, were once
considered a reading hub for students and, competitive exams aspirants, and to many others have gone
become deserted. In addition , it has also This in turn has resulted in job cuts for librarians and
supporting staff. , eventually causing a financial damage to the books publishers . In turn , it This trend
has also caused a financial loss to publishers, and paper and printing business, indirectly impacting the
country’s economy.

In conclusion, I would say that, although ebooks have significantly made eased people’s lives easier, but
this does not mean we should completely rule out paper books and libraries from the society. Libraries,
as a power house, represents a great knowledge tradition.

This is around 6-6.5 Band essay.

More and more people prefer to read ebooks rather than paper books. What are the reason for this?
What problem can this cause for libraries??

In this modern era of digitalization, many people are preferring ebBooks over the original printed books.
While there are many reasons behind the increase in ebook reading, many people argue that this trend
might exerthaves some negative impact on the libraries.

The causes of increased use of digital books are several. Firstly, ebBook has less environmental imprint
and usually costs less than the that of hard original copies of the samea book. Secondly, reading ebook is
much more convenient than reading paper books. It can be read anywhere in mobile or tablets, and
there is no need to carry around the heavy book. Thirdly, anyone can order an ebook anytime from
home without needing to mobilisetravel. This is particularly , very helpful for people with special
requirements.

However, this increase of ebBook reading has presented some significant challenges to the traditional
libraries. Increased use of e-books has decreased the number of people visiting the local libraries.
Hence, less participation in this community facility made has resulted in a decrease in the government
funding for a number of the small libraries. In addition, to meet the new generation readers' demand of
using ebook, libraries now are now being upgraded to include ebook options for the readers as well. This
puts extra pressure on the local councils to increase expenditure in larger community libraries.

To sum up, ebooks use has increased for several reasons,the reason increased e book use is many such
as less environmental impact, cheaper price and convenience. Nevertheless, this new trend is now
creating challenges for libraries, like less community participation and increased expenditure on libraries
to upgrade.

This essay will receive 6-6.5 Band.

- I think you have attempted essays without watching videos.

- There are too many grammatical errors that will seriously affect your score. Please see above all the
corrections and learn from these.
More are more people prefer to read ebook rather than paper books. What are the reasons for this?
What problems can this cause for libraries?

Nowadays more people like to read electronic books instead of real books. There are certain reasons
behind it and this trend creates some problems for libraries as well.

One of the reasons for whichwhy people love to enjoy reading books is portability. People carry
paper books while travelling and sometimes it’s too heavy for longer distances whereas if someone
hasve a 5 inch5-inch tablet in their bag then they can save thousands of digital books. As a result, book
lovers can continue their reading without worrying much about space.

Furthermore, availability is aa biggest concern when considering printed books. TAlthough these
days due to the globalisation, books from different publishers can be collected

from from anywherefound everywhere, but in some places thisit might not be the case. For example, iIn
rural areas, where mobile networks areis available but one can hardly find any library to collect latest
books. However,

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digital books and read that without any hassle. For this reason, people are more habituated inhabitual of
e-books.

Consequently, this trend brings a library's future under threat. People may not go to libraries
and their business will be very difficult to run in due to the financial losses that they might face.

In addition, job holders of libraries become jobless. Librarians might not find suitable jobs according to
their expertise. Moreover, some organizational book stores have a rare collections of ancient books
which

carries the history and , tradition of certain ages. Those may be lostfind extinction and hard to find if
people uses ebooks more rather than paper books.

In conclusion, books which can be read in various devices have become famous amongst book readers.
This is happening because ebooks are easier to carry and sometimes paper books are difficult to arrange
find in

rural areas. Business related to paper books like librariesy may becomeface obsolete due to the
advancement of digitalizationsed version of paper books.

Good structure and flow

Use of linking words before each paragraph is good too

Grammatical errors which have been corrected in the essay

Sentence length could be concise for more impact.

Every time I write anything, I read it out loud to myself. This act helps me spot up to 80% of all
grammatical errors, spelling mistakes, and wrong sentence structures. I can clearly see that you've not
re-read it out loud to yourself. Please make that a habit.

It’s approximately a 7-7.5 band essay

5) Cricket has become more popular than the national sports in the sub-continental countries. What
do you think are the reasons behind this?

Answer:

It has been observed that cricket is the most favourable game among masses than any other national
sport in Asian countries. I think there are a lot of reasons for this popularity.

Undoubtedly, one of the most important reasons is that majorly almost all of the educational institutes
promote cricket. This has motivated children to follow this sport. For instance, the school where I was
studying, had been organised multiple cricket tournaments every year since my first standard. This
means I was motivated to take part in those games, and as a result, I started playing cricket every day.
As the majority of children develop an interest in only one game, they would end up following cricket
the same game throughout their livesfe.

Another subtle explanation is that the media has been promoting cricket so much more than any other
sports. For example, every month sub-continental countries set multiple cricket series among their
nations, and those games are broadcasted on every sports channel. Now if media focuses on only one
sport, it is unlikely that people will hold their interest just in cricket. In my country, every single match of
cricket is being televised in varioused languages on all the sports channels. Moreover, most of the major
restaurants and cafes choose to display cricket match as a mode of entertainment for their customers.

Yet another reason is that cricketers are well paid than athletes in any other sport. Most of the cricket
players of my country did not even complete their education and only concentrated on cricket since
their childhood, but still get an attractive wage for every single match. This has set an alluring example
for major students who do not like to study and still aim for high compensation jobs.

In conclusion, not only does the school and media raise the popularity of cricket, but the attractive
salaries of cricket players also become the reason why cricket is widely popular than any other game.

This might also get a borderline 8 because it's well-written for most part. A solid 7.5 though.

Overall you are standing at a solid 7.5 Band in writing but very close to 8 and if you improve the mistakes
highlighted above, even an 8.5. Your content and vocab is really good, and you've gotten good grasp on
structure, linking words, and sentences. Just 5-6 minor errors here and there in each essay that are
hurting your score.

I think you've got a serious shot at 8/8.5 in Writing.

Cricket has become more popular than the national sports in sub continental countries. What do you
think are the reasons behind this?

Cricket, once thought a gentlemen's game is more linked with the south South Asian countries these
days. South Asian giants have developed the game with so much interests and zeal that even their
national games lacks behind on popularity index. Several valid reasons like government interest,
financial stakes and revenue, and Exciting exciting new format are some of the solid reasons supporting
this fact.

There were days when governments used to have a professional approach for the national sports. Over
the yearsWith every passing year, governments have not made any serious efforts to keep the national
sports, like hockey, at par with the continuously development of cricket. For example, in the year 1994,
Pakistan was the world champion of cricket as well as, the national game, hockey. However, today
Pakistan still stands in the top 5 cricket nations, but it even failed to even qualify for the hockey world
cup in 2017.

Moreover, this change in trend is linked with huge financials and revenue collections via broadcasting
rights, tickets sales and online viewers. Cricket has become immensely popular in India and Pakistan.
This has not only brought the big sponsors, but also generated handsome earnings via TV rights., which
This has have helped respective boards to earn millions of dollars on yearly basis. Governments are also
grossing revenues in terms of tax collection. National games, on other hand, have failed to attract any
major sponsors resulting in lack of interests in masses and governments.

Innovation of exciting new formats, like T20 and T10, has also impacted positively in the favor of cricket.
Whereas, hockey's format has been remained the same since its inception. New rules and, formats have
helped the cause of cricket in sub continental countries to keep nations' interests alive.

In conclusion, it is true to say that cricket has overwhelmingly surpassed in popularity in comparison
with to the national sports in sub continent. Myriad reason but not limited to Ffinancials, government
interests, and new formats are the major ones chained with the for this increase of in attractiveness and
fame of cricket in this part of the world.

This is a better essay in many ways. The content and structure is on point with your thoughts clearly
articulated. You have not tried to go fancy with vocab to make it confusing and complex, apart from the
last line. This looks like a 7 Band essay.

Overall for all essays

- Structure is getting better. For 3 out of 5 essays, your thoughts and organisation are well-placed.
- If you don't speak some words in daily life, don't try to use them. Such as Myriad. Because you are not
confident with how they are actually used in a sentence.

- Reading out loud after writing to re-check is most critical for you. Always think while reading which
sentences are long and confusing. Where are all the places you need commas and the's.

- See a ton of grammatical errors in the above 5 essays. They are usually very similar so although they
seem a lot, there are only few rules that you are breaking and can correct quickly.

- If you can learn from mistakes and correct 80% of these mistakes in your actually IELTS exam, I am
looking at a confirm 7.5 Band.
Cricket has become more popular than the national sport in the subcontinental countries .What do
you think are the reasons behind these.

In recent years, the popularity of cricket has exceeded over that of the national sports in the
subcontinental countries. There are several, geographical, political and commercial reasons for thisese
increased popularity for the sport which will be discussed in the next few paragraphs.

Cricket was first introduced to the subcontinental region by the British empire. It was a favorite sport for
the British officers appointed in the subcontinental countries. The natives learnt thise sports from them
and begain to participate in the sports tournaments along with the British. Consequently, generation
after generation continued thise tradition and ultimately cricket became part of the subcontinental
culture.

Consequently, the subcontinental countries were able to make its mark globally inby cricket. More than
half of the top ten international cricket teams comes from the Ssouth east Asian region, like Bangladesh,
India, and Pakistan. While thise region is always the center of discussion related to overpopulation,
poverty and unemployment, cricket often becomes the reason for celebrations among the people in
thise region.

Now a days, cricket has also become a part of large commercial campaigns. It is only for thise sport that,
the international cricket teams and the world renowned commercial brands come to the subcontinental
regions to attend tournaments. This gives the subcontinental countries the an opportunity to attract
businesses and also the support regional economy can earn some by earning extra revenue.

To sum up, at present cricket plays an important part in the south subcontinental countries. Since
Decades after the introduction of cricket by the British colony, the subcontinental cricket teams areis
now globally celebrated around the world.

There's a larger issue here. Paragraph 2 does not really answer the question around 'popularity'. Only
Para 3 and 4 give reasons for cricket popularity. This would make it a 6 Band essay a t max, because of
several grammatical errors as well.

I avoid many mistakes by reading my paragraph loud to myself to see how it feels in saying. We make
mistakes in writing that we don't in speaking. Reading out loud and listening to it help us catch those
mistakes.
Some people believe that the government should not spend money on international aid when they
have their own disadvantaged people like homeless and unemployed. To what extent do you agree or
disagree?

It is believed by many people that the government should focus on the national issues such as
unemployment and, homelessness etc first, before offering financial help to other countries. Personally,
I also agree with it, since the well-being of its citizens is the primary responsibility of the government.

Undoubtedly, it is crystal clear that many underdeveloped countries require monetary support to
overcome challenges. Without any outside aid, it will be is very difficult for them to break free from the
shackles of the poverty, unemployment and malnutrition. This is because they do not have the required
machinery and manpower to change the ground conditions. Financial investment from well- to- do
countries can come in handy here. Also, with the advent of globalisation, the world has become an
interconnected place whereby problem in one part of the world will eventually affects the other. Thus, it
makes sense to help the underdeveloped countries.

Nevertheless, the primary focus of the government should be on solving the domestic issues first.
Unemployment is a burning issue today even in developed countries, such as France and, Germany etc.
To solve this problem, more industries need to open which will require financial support from the
government. If the nation spends more on the international aid, it will lack money to invest locally. Thus,
it will lead to the creation of more complex problems.

Furthermore, many people do not even have a home to live inby. They generally spend their livfes on
the streets. Ddue to which this, they are easily susceptible to the diseases like malaria, dengue, and
typhoid etc. This directly increases the health budget and consequently decreases money for the aid.
Hence, for overall good, it is quintessential that the administration channelizes its financial resources
domestically.

To conclude, a nation should look after its own people first before providing a helping hand to others.
Unemployment and homelessness are major challenges for any nation today which require huge
investments. Therefore, any government should try to resolve it first before aiding others.

You are an 8 Band candidate. This essay gets full marks for structure, articulation, and vocab. However,
it suffers from many minor grammatical issues that will result in you getting 7ish Band in Writing.

- All the grammatical and sentence structure errors have been pointed out. Please go through them one
by one and try to learn.

- Also, don't use 'etc' in essays. It's slang. Just use one or two examples separated by commas and a
'and'.

- Also, use of 'the' is greatly lacking in your writing. See places above.
- I avoid many mistakes by reading my paragraph loud to myself to see how it feels in saying. We make
mistakes in writing that we don't in speaking. Reading out loud and listening to it help us catch those
mistakes.

Free music and movies are available over the internet freely nowadays. is this a positive or negative
development? give reasons with examples in your own words

It has been observed that tToday, we can find most of the movies and songs are available over the
Internet forat free of the cost. I think this is not a positive trend.

Undoubtedly, free films and music have their benefits. The most important of them all is that it this
development can saves one's consumers a lot of money. For instance, I am a student and my college is
located 22 kms from my home. I watch free online movies to spend time while travelling. This means
that I get a free entertainment, without investing a single penny, and I can use my pocket money in
other important purchases.

Nevertheless, the disadvantages this development free music have brought far outweigh the above
benefits. For example, peopleone can jeopardise theirhis private data by watching free videos on the
internet. Last month, I watched some online movies on my smartphone. Soon after watching the movie,
my phone got hanged and I got an e-mail saying that $100 got transacted from my bank. When I
inquired about that transaction, I had comecame to know that someone had inserted a virus in my
phone and stolen the credit card details that were stored in my cellit while I was watching the movie.

Furthermore, music industries may also risk losing their business. If one people can get the new song
freely over the internet, they dohe will not purchase the song. This practice can lowers the profit of a
music firm. The recent news about prominent Yash musics, in 'Sunday Times', says that it has generated
40% lowered less profit because of the freely available music online. In short, iIf people can keep getting
access toof free entertainment, music companies may even shut their businesses.

In conclusion, it is clear that free online songs and films have brought adverse ramifications in to the
society. Usage of the free entertainment would not only risk the personal data privacy, but it also
reduces the profit of music companies resulting in employees losing their jobs.

Your structure is spot on. You didn't lose any marks there.

Few major areas to improve for next test:

- Don't call people using the generic word 'one'. For example, you say a lot: If one can get new song, he
will not purchase. One-He doesn't do together. See my corrections above.

- In the opening paragraph, you got too cheeky using the term 'it has been observed'. That term is
incorrectly used. Just be simple.
- Conclusion was unclear because just saying that 'music companies will lose profit' is not enough. What
is the negative effect on society? It is that employees will lose jobs.

- Then there are few grammatical errors that I've corrected above. Please see them. The tactic that I
suggested before: Read out loud to yourself after writing will help you see these errors.

The use of cell phones (mobile phones) has grown rapidly in the past few years. People use them for
both business and personal reasons. What are the advantages and disadvantages of the widespread
use of cell phones (mobile phones)? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples
from your own knowledge or experience.

Ever since the advent of Cellular phones, its usage among the general public has risen tremendously.
Some people believe that the invention of cell phones and its increased usage is not beneficial, while
others opine that this usage has certainly helped us in many areas. While there are strong arguments on
both sides, I believe that the advantages of mobile phones outweigh the drawbacks. In this essay, I shall
discuss both facets of the argument while presenting my point of view.

Although, mobile phones are of immense importance, but owing due to the changing trends in society,
people prefer to communicate and talk to with their friends and families through the technology while
avoiding social contact with each other. As a result, social interaction between people in society has
deteriorated. Secondly, mobile phones are dependent on the coverage of cellular networks. In case of
any outage, or a shutdown, people cannot correspond with one another. In my country , there are
repetitive occasional cellular network shutdowns on major events. This causes a lot of problems., and in
turn mobile phones are dead for several days.

However, the inception of technology and mobile phones in our lives have has helped us in academics,
medical science, banking and in many other sectors. A cell phone is an absolute replacement of a
computer, and can be used for any data collection and for official purposes. Top company executives can
even perform their official tasks while flying 8000 miles in the sky. Ranging Ffrom paying a school fee to
paying an online utility bill, everything is a possible by pressing just one button on cell -phone now.

Furthermore, during old days in the past people used to face great difficulty in reaching out to their
friends and families as the only source of communication was a letter. Mobile phone is an inexpensive
very cheap alternate of to letters and even the landline phones. and to any long distance
communication. In my city, almost every family has one or more members working or studying
overseas. Cellular connection helps them communicate with each other easily. them with ease.

In conclusion, I would say that despite having a of few down sides, effective and efficient usage of
mobile phones can be termed as extremely advantageous to us and can help us evolve more in this
digital age.
This is around 7 Band essay.