NURS20160 Presentation.

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by Ronaldo Miguel Aguila

Submission date: 22-Aug-2018 09:17PM (UT C+1000)

Submission ID: 992097456
File name: 76860_Ronaldo_Miguel_Aguila_NURS20160_Presentation_724471_460168816.docx
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Thank you for the cover page Ronaldo. Could you please include a word count.
 Should this be the multidisciplinary operating theatre team?

This wording is awkward which may lead to misinterpretation. Try to reword it so that it is easy to
Writ e out in f ull
understand.
It alics
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Where in the evidence pyramid is this article?

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 This article also does not
appear to be specific to your
population - nurses.

This sentence appears incomplete.

 These studies appear to
relate to the multidisciplinary
application of the surgical
safety checklist.

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 Please use 1.5 or 2.0 spacing for all assignments.

Capit alise t it les.

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9 &
11

Good points.
Rather than listing all of these standards, you need to put them into context. Remember to reference and if you are quoting these standards, they need to
be referenced as per the APA guidelines.
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Good. It is good to see you have checked the Australian governance on this checklist.
 List all t he aut hors
(year)

List all t he aut hors

It sounds as though this article was not able to determine whether the SSC affected mortality or morbidity because there are too
many different patient factors?
(year)

List all t he aut hors

 What were the results?

List all t he aut hors

List all t he aut hors (year) (year)

Both are connected - this is not a bad thing, just makes it hard to measure results.

List all t he aut hors

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Is implementation of the SSC the intervention?

14

What will be presented at the inservices?

15

What will the staff be providing new ideas and improvements for?
Is there any evidence to support this initiative?

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 Double space the reference list.

It alics

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It alics

Six or more aut hors

Minimal capit alisat ion.

Journal art icle.

Journal art icle.

Ref erence not used Journal art icle.

Please have the reference list in alphabetical order.

 Full stops inbetween initials.

Journal art icle.

Ref erence not used

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ORIGINALITY REPORT

23 %
SIMILARIT Y INDEX
16%
INT ERNET SOURCES
11%
PUBLICAT IONS
17%
ST UDENT PAPERS

PRIMARY SOURCES

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onlinelibrary.wiley.com
Int ernet Source 3%
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Submitted to Central Queensland University
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researchonline.jcu.edu.au
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Submitted to University Of Tasmania
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whqlibdoc.who.int
Int ernet Source 1%
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www.nursingmidwiferyboard.gov.au
Int ernet Source 1%
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Submitted to Chamberlain College of Nursing
St udent Paper 1%
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Submitted to Mississippi Gulf Coast Community College
St udent Paper 1%
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wiredtreenursing.umaryland.edu
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isrn.net
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Submitted to University of Queensland
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research.jcu.edu.au
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Submitted to Southern Cross University
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Submitted to DeVry, Inc.
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Submitted to University of Newcastle
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Matthew E. Gitelis, Adelaide Kaczynski, Torin Shear, Mark Deshur
et al. "Increasing compliance with the World Health Organization
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Surgical Safety Checklist—A regional health system's
experience", The American Journal of Surgery, 2017
Publicat ion

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Wangoo, Laltaksh, Robin A. Ray, and Yik-Hong Ho. "Attitudes and
compliance to the WHO Surgical Safety Checklist; a review",
<1%
European Surgery, 2016.
Publicat ion

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Submitted to Deakin University
St udent Paper <1%
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Submitted to University of South Australia
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Submitted to University of Iowa
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Submitted to Oxford Brookes University
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www.rwjf.org
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josephnurse.blogspot.com.au
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V Cadman. "The Impact of Surgical Safety Checklists on Theatre
Departments: A Critical Review of the Literature", Journal of
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Perioperative Practice, 2017
Publicat ion

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journals.sagepub.com
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www.safetyandquality.gov.au
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Submitted to Edith Cowan University
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www.nejm.org
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Elzerie de Jager, Chloe McKenna, Lynne Bartlett, Ronny
Gunnarsson, Yik-Hong Ho. "Postoperative Adverse Events
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Inconsistently Improved by the World Health Organization
Surgical Safety Checklist: A Systematic Literature Review of 25
 Studies", World Journal of Surgery, 2016
Publicat ion

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Bergs, J., J. Hellings, I. Cleemput, Ö. Zurel, V. De Troyer, M. Van
Hiel, J.-L. Demeere, D. Claeys, and D. Vandijck. "Systematic
<1%
review and meta-analysis of the effect of the World Health
Organization surgical safety checklist on postoperative
complications : Effect of World Health Organization surgical
safety checklist on postoperative complications", British Journal of
Surgery, 2014.
Publicat ion

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Mustafa Alnaib, Ahmad Al Samaraee, Vish Bhattacharya. "The
WHO Surgical Safety Checklist: A Review", Journal of
<1%
Perioperative Practice, 2017
Publicat ion

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GRADEMARK REPORT

FINAL GRADE GENERAL COMMENTS

Instructor

61
T hank you f or your assignment Ronaldo and great work. You have chosen a very
important topic, and I can see you are passionate about it.

/100
At the start of the video presentation, you explained about f ear of the unknown.
However there was no context related to this discussion, and it did not appear to
relate to the rest of the video presentation. It is really important that you can explain
the inf ormation you are providing and demonstrate that it is addressing the
assignment tasks.

It was really good that you considered the surgical saf ety checklist and related this
to the current Australian governance. From listening to the video presentation and
reading the annotated bibliography, it appeared that the literature you f ound did not
answer your PICO research question, f or a number of reasons. You were very
specif ic about the PICO question being about nurses implementing the SSC, however
nurses will not be able to do this in isolation, and the literature also agreed with this
as there were no mention of this being isolated to nursing practice. T he SSC is
relevant to all of the operating theater team, including the patient.

T here was a section of the presentation where it appeared that you quoted parts of
the RN Standards f or Practice. While it is great that you have identif ied the
standards where care f ell short, It is really important that you are discussing this in
context, rather than simply listing these standards.
 It wasn't entirely obvious if the practice development proposal was the
implementation of the SSC.

T here were a number of ref erencing errors in this assignment. Please make sure you
f ollow the CQU Abridged guide to APA ref erencing. T his is a comprehensive and
straight f orward guide to ref erencing.

10% deducted f or late submission (2 days late) of this assignment.

T hank you again f or your hard work. Good luck with the rest of your studies.

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Text Comment. T hank you f or the cover page Ronaldo. Could you please include a word count.

PAGE 2

Text Comment. Should this be the multidisciplinary operating theatre team?

Text Comment. T his wording is awkward which may lead to misinterpretation. T ry to reword it so that it is easy to
understand.

QM Write out in f ull

Write this out in f ull, do not abbreviate this.

PAGE 3
 QM Italics
Use italics here.

PAGE 4

Comment 1
It doesn't appear that this article is specif ic to your population - nurses. T his article seems to discuss f rom a multidisciplinary
team perspective.

Text Comment. Where in the evidence pyramid is this article?

PAGE 5

PAGE 6

Comment 2
Under pressure f rom what?

PAGE 7

Text Comment. T his article also does not appear to be specif ic to your population - nurses.

Text Comment. T his sentence appears incomplete.

PAGE 8

PAGE 9

PAGE 10

Text Comment. T hese studies appear to relate to the multidisciplinary application of the surgical saf ety checklist.
 Comment 3
Were these all non urbanised countries?

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PAGE 12

PAGE 13

PAGE 14

Comment 4
What sort of assessments were missing?

PAGE 15

PAGE 16

Comment 5
What are the basic problems?

PAGE 17

PAGE 18

Text Comment. Please use 1.5 or 2.0 spacing f or all assignments.

QM Capitalise titles.
Capitalise titles.

Comment 6
It is not clear what you mean here, or the relevance to this PICO research question?
 It is not clear what you mean here, or the relevance to this PICO research question?

Comment 7
Fear of what is f oreign and unknown.

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Comment 8
It is important to explain why this inf ormation is relevant to addressing the assignment tasks.

Comment 9
I doubt this f act needs to be ref erenced.

Text Comment. &

Strikethrough.

Comment 11
avoided?

Text Comment. Good points.

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PAGE 21

Text Comment. Rather than listing all of these standards, you need to put them into context. Remember to ref erence and
if you are quoting these standards, they need to be ref erenced as per the APA guidelines.

PAGE 22
 Comment 12
T his sentence is dif f icult to read and understand. Please reword this.

Text Comment. Good. It is good to see you have checked the Australian governance on this checklist.

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QM List all the authors

List all the authors the f irst time you use this ref erence.

Text Comment. (year)

QM List all the authors

List all the authors the f irst time you use this ref erence.

Text Comment. It sounds as though this article was not able to determine whether the SSC af f ected mortality or morbidity
because there are too many dif f erent patient f actors?

Text Comment. (year)

QM List all the authors

List all the authors the f irst time you use this ref erence.

PAGE 24

Text Comment. What were the results?

QM List all the authors

List all the authors the f irst time you use this ref erence.
 QM List all the authors
List all the authors the f irst time you use this ref erence.

Text Comment. (year)

Text Comment. (year)

Text Comment. Both are connected - this is not a bad thing, just makes it hard to measure results.

QM List all the authors

List all the authors the f irst time you use this ref erence.

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Comment 13
T his doesn't make sense.

Text Comment. Is implementation of the SSC the intervention?

Comment 14
T his does not tend to be a term a transf ormational leader would use.

Text Comment. What will be presented at the inservices?

Comment 15
design?

Text Comment. What will the staf f be providing new ideas and improvements f or?
PAGE 26

Text Comment. Is there any evidence to support this initiative?

Comment 16
I cannot recall this being discussed in the assignment. No new inf ormation to be introduced in the conclusion.

PAGE 27

Text Comment. Double space the ref erence list.

QM Italics
Use italics here.

Comment 17
Paul's story was not mentioned in this assignment - it was Bethany.

QM Italics
Use italics here.

QM Six or more authors

Look at how to ref erence six or more authors as per APA. Look at page 87 of the CQU abridged guide to APA ref erencing.

QM Minimal capitalisation.
Minimal capitalisation f or article titles. See page 21 of the CQU abridged guide to APA ref erencing.

QM Journal article.
Look up how to ref erence a journal article as per APA guidelines on page 21-22, and 38-41 of the CQU abridged guide to APA.
 QM Journal article.
Look up how to ref erence a journal article as per APA guidelines on page 21-22, and 38-41 of the CQU abridged guide to APA.

QM Ref erence not used

T his resource was not used in this assignment. You can only list ref erences in the ref erence list that you have used and
ref erenced in the body of the essay.

QM Journal article.
Look up how to ref erence a journal article as per APA guidelines on page 21-22, and 38-41 of the CQU abridged guide to APA.

Text Comment. Please have the ref erence list in alphabetical order.

PAGE 28

Text Comment. Full stops inbetween initials.

QM Journal article.
Look up how to ref erence a journal article as per APA guidelines on page 21-22, and 38-41 of the CQU abridged guide to APA.

QM Ref erence not used

T his resource was not used in this assignment. You can only list ref erences in the ref erence list that you have used and
ref erenced in the body of the essay.

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EFFICACY AND D 74.5 - 84.49

5%

HD 84.5 - 100 Slides and notes are used very ef f ectively. T here is a succinct and compelling introduction which introduces the
topic and outlines the direction of the presentation. T he presentation is cogent and is brought to a compelling
conclusion.

D 74.5 - 84.49 A well constructed presentation. Slides and notes are used ef f ectively. T here is a clear and appropriate
introduction which introduces the topic and outlines the direction of the presentation. T he presentation
proceeds logically and is brought to a logical conclusion.

C 64.5 - 74.49 Appropriately presentation. Slides and notes are mostly used ef f ectivly. T here is an appropriate introduction
which mostly introduces the topic and outlines the direction of the presentation. T he presentation mostly
proceeds logically and is brought to an appropriate conclusion.

P 49.5 - 64.49 Adequately articulated presentation. Slides and notes are sometimes used ef f ectively. An introduction is
apparent and the topic is somewhat introduced. T here is an attempt made to outline the direction of the
presentation. T he essay is at times repetitive or lacks cohesion. A conclusion is evident.

F - BELOW 49.5 Slides and notes are not clear or present. T here is no recognisable introduction/ and/or direction in the
presentation and/ or no clear conclusion.

PRESENT AT ION D 74.5 - 84.49

10%

HD 84.5 - 100 Excellent presentation of assignment. T he presenter demonstrates an expert command of the topic and the
presentation is well-paced, conf ident and compelling. T he submitted written material (i.e.Script, presentation
slides, PICO and annotated bibliography templates) is very well-presented and f ree f rom errors. Script is f ree
f rom f ormatting errors.

D 74.5 - 84.49 A very good presentation. T he presenter demonstrates a comprehensive understanding of the topic and the
presentation is delivered conf idently. T he written material (i.e. presentation slides, script, PICO and annotated
bibliography) has minor errors (e.g. 1 or 2 consistent errors in spelling, grammar and paragraph structure).
Script mostly f ollows the correct f ormat.

C 64.5 - 74.49 A good presentation. T he presenter demonstrates a sound understanding of the topic and the presentation is
 delivered well. T he written material (i.e. script, presentation slides, PICO and annotated bibliography) has some
errors (e.g. 3 or 4 consistent errors with spelling, grammar and paragraph structure). Script of ten f ollows the
correct f ormat.

P 49.5 - 64.49 T he presenter demonstrates an understanding of the topic and the presentation conveys this. T he assignment
could be improved through improved pacing/ other delivery style matters etc. T he written material (i.e. script,
presentation slides, PICO and annotated bibliography) has 3 or 4 inconsistent errors (spelling, grammar and
paragraph structure). An attempt has been made to<br />comply with the correct f ormat.

F - BELOW 49.5 Poorly presented assignment. T he presentation style is not engaging/ credible and presenter does not
demonstrate a grasp of the content. T he written material (i.e. presentation slides, script, PICO and annotated
bibliogrphay) have many inaccuracies in spelling, grammar and paragraph structure. (> 5 errors).

REFERENCING C 64.5 - 74.49

5%

HD 84.5 - 100 Consistently integrates up-to-date ref erences/citations to support and ref lect all ideas, f actual inf ormation
and quotations. A minimum of 10 contemporary* journal articles have been cited. Accurate APA ref erencing. No
errors.

D 74.5 - 84.49 Generally integrates up-to-date ref erences/citations to support and ref lect ideas, f actual inf ormation and
quotations, with 1 or 2 exceptions. A minimum of 10 contemporary* journal articles have been cited. Mostly
accurate APA ref erencing. 1-2 consistent errors (may be made multiple times).

C 64.5 - 74.49 Partly integrates up-to-date ref erences/citations to support and ref lect ideas, f actual inf ormation and
quotations, with 3 or 4 exceptions. Between 8- 10 contemporary* journal articles have been cited. Somewhat
accurate APA ref erencing. 3 consistent errors (may be made multiple times).

P 49.5 - 64.49 Occasionally integrates up-to-date ref erences/citations to support and ref lect ideas, f actual inf ormation and
quotations, with 5 or 6 exceptions. Between 5-8 contemporary* journal articles have been cited. Occasionally
accurate APA ref erencing. 4 consistent errors (made multiple times).

F - BELOW 49.5 Fails to or inf requent attempts (>7 errors) to integrate up-to-date ref erences/citations to support and ref lect
ideas, f actual inf ormation and quotations. Less than 5 contemporary* journal articles have been cited. APA
ref erencing not used, or more than 5 inaccuracies.

RELEVANCY AND C 64.5 - 74.49

15%

HD 84.5 - 100 Content is entirely relevant to the topic, the approach comprehensively addresses the task and the
presentation proceeds logically and is within the set time limit and word count.

D 74.5 - 84.49 Content is very relevant to the topic, the approach clearly addresses the task and the presentation proceeds
logically and is within the set time limit and word count.

C 64.5 - 74.49 Content is appropriate to the topic, the approach mostly addresses the task and the presentation f or the most
part proceeds logically and is within the set time limit and word count

P 49.5 - 64.49 Content addresses the topic but the presentation is at times repetitive or lacks cohesion and is within the set
time limit with a 10% allowance (under or over the set limit and word count).

F - BELOW 49.5 Content is irrelevant and or does not address the topic and the presentation lacks cohesion. T he time limit and
word count are not within the 10% under or over allowance and not been adhered to.

KNOWLEDGE OF C 64.5 - 74.49

20%

HD 84.5 - 100 Practice issue clearly identif ied. Research question is relevant and clearly articulated (using PICO/PEO).
Communication of the results of literature search is clear and concise. Critical analysis of the literature is clear
and adheres to the CASP checklist. Direction regarding best practice is relevant and well-articulated.

D 74.5 - 84.49 Practice issue clearly identif ied. Research question is relevant and appropriately articulated (using PICO/PEO).
Communication of the results of literature search is clear. Critical analysis of the literature adheres to the
CASP checklist. Direction regarding best practice is relevant.

C 64.5 - 74.49 Practice issue is mostly clearly identif ied. Research question is mostly relevant and well-articulated (using
PICO/PEO). Communication of the results of literature search is mostly clear. Critical analysis of the literature
mostly adheres to the CASP checklist. Direction regarding best practice is mostly relevant.

P 49.5 - 64.49 Practice issue is addressed but not clearly identif ied. Research question is somewhat relevant and but lacks
cohesion (using PICO/PEO). Communication of the results of literature search is at times unclear. Critical
analysis of the literature sometimes adheres to the CASP checklist. Direction regarding best practice is
somewhat relevant.

F - BELOW 49.5 Practice issue is not addressed or is not relevant. Research question is not relevant and lacks cohesion (using
 PICO/PEO). Communication of the results of literature is not present or is unclear. Critical analysis of the
literature is not present, or is unclear and does not adhere to the CASP checklist. Direction regarding best
practice is not relevant.

KNOWLEDGE OF C 64.5 - 74.49

20%

HD 84.5 - 100 Well-articulated, patient-centered change management plan demonstrating excellent understanding of the
principles of Practice Development and T ransf ormational Leadership.

D 74.5 - 84.49 Well-articulated, patient-centered change management plan demonstrating good understanding of the
principles of Practice Development and T ransf ormational Leadership

C 64.5 - 74.49 Well-articulated change management plan demonstrating good understanding of the principles of Practice
Development and T ransf ormational Leadership

P 49.5 - 64.49 Change management plan lacks clarity. Understanding of the principles of Practice Development and
T ransf ormational Leadership is evident but unclear.

F - BELOW 49.5 Change management plan lacks clarity or is not present. Limited or no understanding of the principles of
Practice Development and T ransf ormational Leadership is evident.

APPLICAT ION C 64.5 - 74.49

25%

HD 84.5 - 100 Expert synthesis and application of complex inf ormation to create and def end a comprehensive Practice
Development strategy. PICO/PEO and annotated bibliography tables are very clear and comprehensive.

D 74.5 - 84.49 Mostly expert synthesis and application of complex inf ormation to create and def end an ef f ective Practice
Development strategy. PICO/PEO and annotated bibliography tables are mostly clear and comprehensive.

C 64.5 - 74.49 Some synthesis and application of complex inf ormation to create and def end a sound Practice Development
strategy. PICO/PEO and annotated bibliography tables are somewhat clear and comprehensive.

P 49.5 - 64.49 An attempt to synthesise and apply complex inf ormation is apparent. T he Practice Development strategy is
adequate. PICO/PEO and annotated bibliography tables are neither clear nor comprehensive.

F - BELOW 49.5 No apparent synthesis or application of complex inf ormation. Practice Development strategy is not apparent or
is inadequate. PICO/PEO and annotated bibliography tables are not present or is not relevant.