Writing Introductions

INTRODUCTIONS, How to
ef fectively
introduce and
CONCLUSIONS, conclude an
essay
AND THESIS STATEMENTS
INTRODUCTIONS AND CONCLUSIONS–
WHAT FOR?
In academic essays, introductions and conclusions are the first and
last impression of your paper – much like in real life, you should
always leave a good first and last impression to make your paper
stand out!
HINT: Write your intro + conclusion last!

It is often easier and faster to
introduce/conclude a topic you just
spent a lot of time on!
THE 3 PARTS OF AN
INTRODUCTION
THE 3 PARTS OF AN EFFECTIVE
INTRODUCTION
So what should an engaging and ef fective introduction do?
broad
1. Get the reader interested and engaged in
the general topic (“hook”)
2. Go from “general” to “more specific” (narrow

down your topic so that you can introduce a
thesis statement without too much of an abrupt
jump between hook and the specifics of your paper)
3. Give your thesis statement (what your

paper will explain or argue and the main
points) narrow
SAMPLE INTRODUCTION – ACTIVIT Y NR. 1
Read the following introduction and decide where the hook ends,
where the writer begins to “narrow,” and what the thesis
statement is.
Celebrating the revolution, French citizens sent King Louie XVI
to the guillotine. Every Halloween day in ancient Rome,
criminals were executed in the city square. In the 1880s, in an
effort to prevent crime in the US, hundreds of bank robbers,
horse thieves, and murderers were hanged in front of the
public. However, in the last half of the 20 th century, the death
penalty has faced increasing opposition. Many people,
especially members of churches, are against capital
punishment, and most advanced countries have eliminated the
death penalty. While it is true that the death penalty has some
negative points, it is still a powerful and useful tool. Therefore,
our society should keep the death penalty to deter crime, to
give fairness to victims and their families, and to punish
inhumane criminals.
|HOOK: Celebrating the revolution, French citizens sent
King Louie XVI to the guillotine. Every Halloween day in
ancient Rome, criminals were executed in the city
square. In the 1880s, in an effort to prevent crime in the
US, hundreds of bank robbers, horse thieves, and
murderers were hanged in front of the public. |NARROW:
However, in the last half of the 20 th century, the death
penalty has faced increasing opposition. Many people,
especially members of churches, are against capital
punishment, and most advanced countries have
eliminated the death penalty. While it is true that the
death penalty has some negative points, it is still a
powerful and useful tool. |THESIS: Therefore, our society
should keep the death penalty to deter crime, to give
fairness to victims and their families, and to punish
inhumane criminals.
PART 1: THE HOOK
(WAYS TO GET THE READER INTERESTED)
The “hook” is the first part of your introduction – it
should engage the reader, and not (yet) argue or explain
anything related to your writing assignment!
Be interesting, moving, or
informative!
PART 1: THE HOOK
Use these 5 techniques to engage the reader:
1. Use a quotation or surprising fact

For example, in a paper about the death penalty:
 Ever y year, 189 prisoners in the US are executed for violent
crimes...
 US Senator Russ Feingold once exclaimed, “…”
2. Ask a question or describe a problem, dilemma, or controversy

associated with your paper
For example, in a paper about assisted suicide:
 What would you do if you were diagnosed with a terminal
illness?
PART 1: THE HOOK
3. Tell an anecdote or reason for your interest in the topic
For example, in a paper about pet adoption:
 Last Christmas, my family adopted an old but loveable dog
from the animal shelter.
4. Define a word that is central to your topic

For example, in a paper on genetically modified food:
 The term “genetically modified” means…
5. Make a historical comparison or contrast

For example, in a paper on prison rates among minorities:
 Since the 1970s, the rate of African-Americans in prison has
more than doubled.
NARROWING DOWN YOUR TOPIC –
ACTIVIT Y NR. 2
What is wrong with this introduction? How could you fix it? Also,
which of the 5 introduction techniques was used here?
One Christmas, my father bought a new set of lights for the
Christmas tree. He bought them very late, on the 23 rd of December,
so we did not decorate our tree until the 24 th of December.
However, we all became very sad when we found out that the lights
were defective and would not light up. Our family had no time to
buy more lights, and as a result we had a Christmas tree without
lights that year. Consumer protection laws are necessary to ensure
that buyers have confidence in the goods they purchase, to enforce
retail standards, and to provide greater product safety.
NARROWING DOWN YOUR TOPIC –
ACTIVIT Y NR. 2
Right – the thesis statement is too abrupt! Make a smooth
transition from “hook” to thesis statement:
One Christmas, my father bought a new set of lights for the
Christmas tree. He bought them very late, on the 23 rd of
December, so we did not decorate our tree until the 24 th of
December. However, we all became very sad when we found out
that the lights were defective, and would not light up. There was
no time to buy more lights, and we had a Christmas tree without
lights that year. Like the majority of consumers in the US, my
family had placed a blind trust in the products available for
purchase in stores, but this trust is often misguided. A lack of
legal protection laws allows for low -quality products to be sold by
US retailers, and this has a number of other negative effects on
the American economy. Thus, consumer protection laws are
necessary to ensure that buyers can have confidence in the goods
they purchase, to enforce more consistent retail standards, and to
facilitate greater product safety.
WRITING AN EFFECTIVE
THESIS STATEMENT
PART 3: AN EFFECTIVE THESIS
STATEMENT
A thesis statement is in many ways the most important sentence
(or two) that you will write in any paper. It is like a blueprint or
foundation to your essay – it helps you (and the reader!) stay
focused:
- gives the main idea of the entire essay
- suggests the topic for each body paragraph (for short or 5-
paragraph essays)
- commonly has three parts (for 5-paragraph essays) that are
parallel in structure
- avoids 1 st person expressions like “I’m going to talk about…”
- the supporting points should be logically connected to your
thesis or argument
Example: To become a more inviting campus, Gainesville State
College should expand its cafeteria, offer student housing, and
offer childcare.
PART 3: WRITING AN EFFECTIVE THESIS
STATEMENT
Given the thesis statement below, how many paragraphs do you
expect in the body of the essay? What will the writer talk about
first, second, and last?
Thus, consumer protection laws are necessary ¹to ensure that
buyers can have confidence in the goods they purchase, ²to enforce
more consistent retail standards, and ³to facilitate greater product
safety.
HINT: Don’t include your evidence, quotes, or arguments in the

thesis statement – wait and do this in the body of the essay!
HINT: When writing your essay, repeatedly go back to your thesis
statement to make sure you are staying focused. The supporting
points in your thesis statement must be reflected in the essay’s
body paragraphs!
HINT: For 5-paragraph essays: One supporting point in thesis
statement = one paragraph in body essay (only a general rule!)
WRITING AN EFFECTIVE THESIS
STATEMENT – ACTIVIT Y NR. 3
Let’s practice! Choose the thesis statements that you think are
the most effective for the topic Should marijuana be legal in the
United States?
1. The use of marijuana should be legal for a number of specific

and compelling reasons.
2. As the Center for Disease Control has shown in its 2003 Drug
Abuse Repor t, marijuana should not be legal because of its
relationship to lung cancer rates in the US; 13% of lung cancer
cases can be tied to marijuana consumption (54).
3. Marijuana should not be legal because it is too dangerous.
4. Using marijuana should be against the law because it damages
the brain, causes memor y loss, and leads to bir th defects.
5. In this essay, I will explain the negative impact marijuana has
on health and cognition.
CONCLUSIONS
THE 2 PARTS OF CONCLUSIONS
Conclusions are in many ways similar to introductions: they

do not present new relevant information. Instead, they guide
the reader away from the essay. Conclusions have two
components:
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1. A final analysis or interpretation of the paper.
Either restate your thesis or sum up the general
meaning of your overall argument, explanation, or
description.
2. An ending comment, such as an interesting idea

or your personal interpretation of the entire paper.
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WRITING AN EFFECTIVE ENDING
COMMENT
Use these 4 techniques to write an effective final comment:
1. Echo or continue what you did in the intro’s “hook”:

Did you tell a personal anecdote? Finish the story or suggest
solutions! Did you use a statistic? Use the essay’s arguments to re-
interpret the numbers in a new way!
2. Use a quotation
If you opened your paper with a quote, you can finish it with one as
well!
3. Make a suggestion or prediction

In a paper discussing reasons for domestic violence, you could
offer a few suggestions for overcoming the causes.
EXAMPLE INTRO / CONCLUSION –
ACTIVIT Y NR. 4
On your handout, read the example introduction and conclusion
for an essay about globalization. Do the following:
1.) find the hook and the transition to the thesis statement
2.) underline the thesis statement
3.) find the supporting points that are restated in the conclusion
4.) underline the ending comment
What do we do when we have a problem? Leave it alone? Or tr y to

solve it? Most people say that globalization creates more and
more problems, such as increasing the gap between the rich and
the poor. However, this difference…
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INTRODUCTIONS, How to

HINT: Write your intro + conclusion last!

2. Go from “general” to “more specific” (narrow

3. Give your thesis statement (what your

1. Use a quotation or surprising fact

2. Ask a question or describe a problem, dilemma, or controversy

4. Define a word that is central to your topic

5. Make a historical comparison or contrast

HINT: Don’t include your evidence, quotes, or arguments in the

1. The use of marijuana should be legal for a number of specific

Conclusions are in many ways similar to introductions: they

2. An ending comment, such as an interesting idea

1. Echo or continue what you did in the intro’s “hook”:

3. Make a suggestion or prediction

What do we do when we have a problem? Leave it alone? Or tr y to

Thank you for attending, and make sure to

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