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    Education Hub Band 8 IELTS Essay - Grammarly Report

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    This document summarizes the key roles that both mothers and fathers play in raising children. While mothers are often the primary caregivers, the role of fathers is also important and should not be neglected. Fathers are responsible for financially providing for their children and serving as role models by teaching values like discipline. Both parents contribute in their own crucial ways to a child's upbringing and well-being.

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    This document summarizes the key roles that both mothers and fathers play in raising children. While mothers are often the primary caregivers, the role of fathers is also important and should not be neglected. Fathers are responsible for financially providing for their children and serving as role models by teaching values like discipline. Both parents contribute in their own crucial ways to a child's upbringing and well-being.

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    This document summarizes the key roles that both mothers and fathers play in raising children. While mothers are often the primary caregivers, the role of fathers is also important and should not be neglected. Fathers are responsible for financially providing for their children and serving as role models by teaching values like discipline. Both parents contribute in their own crucial ways to a child's upbringing and well-being.

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    This document summarizes the key roles that both mothers and fathers play in raising children. While mothers are often the primary caregivers, the role of fathers is also important and should not be neglected. Fathers are responsible for financially providing for their children and serving as role models by teaching values like discipline. Both parents contribute in their own crucial ways to a child's upbringing and well-being.

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    Band 8 IELTS
    Parenting is a tedious process which 2 requires equal i
    1

    nvolvement from both mother and father. However,


    mothers play a pivotal role in raising a child, but the r

    Unoriginal text: 287 words


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    [which that] Which or that

    ole of fathers 3 can not be neglected 4. In the modern e


    ra, equality and women empowerment is an importan

    3 Overused word: fathers

    t issue. Scientifically it is proven that fathers 5 are resp

    4 Passive voice

    onsible for making a child 6 and hence they have a


    key 7 role in a child's upbringing. Since early times, the

    5 Overused word: fathers


    6

    [child,] Missing comma in compound


    sentence

    fathers 9 have taken the role of the bread earner in mo


    st families therefore it is the responsibility of the fathe

    7 Vague word: key

    r to provide his child with better facilities such as educ


    ation, nutrition and good 10 clothing.8 Whenever possi

    8 Wordiness
    9

    Overused word: fathers

    ble the father should use this opportunity to express h


    is love for the family and his wife.

    10 Vague word: good

    Generally males 11 are associated with masculinity and


    other related work. The father also has a crusical 12 rol
    e to play when reaching the young ones

    [Generally males Males]


    11
    Redundant words
    [crusical critical] Misspelled word:
    crusical

    12

    13 values of po

    [ones one's] Plural


    13
    instead of possessive

    wer, resistance and discipline. They act as a role modl


    e 14 for their kids and inturn 15 teaching them these valu
    able qualities. They can utilize this time to bond with th
    eir children and making them feel secure and guided
    We should also consider, however, that the mother sti

    [modle model] Misspelled word:


    modle

    14

    15 Possibly confused word: inturn


    [still remains remains]
    16
    Redundant words
    17

    ll remains 16 the primary carer for her child. Woman ar


    e associated

    17

    with love, compassion and patience. For

    instance, I personaly

    18

    approach my mother

    eling low in mood or emotionaly

    20

    19

    when fe

    touched. Mums are

    move closely related to a child's needs and acts 21 as

    Passive voice
    18 [personaly personally]
    Misspelled word: personaly
    19 Overused word: mother
    20

    [emotionaly emotionally]
    Misspelled
    word: emotionaly

    building stone in one's life.


    To conclude, although mothers give birth to the child h
    owever fatherhood has come a long way and is absolu
    tely 23 essential 22 for a balanced childhood. Lack of tim
    e for males can be alleviated by utilizing weekends and

    [acts act] Incorrect verb


    21
    form with plural subject
    [absolutely essential essential]
    22
    Redundant words
    23

    time off from work.1

    [absolutely] Redundant words

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