Pattern B Thesis Sentence There are some interesting parallels between the Roman and Chinese empires even

though these empires ended differently. Outline I. The Roman Empire A. Geographical condition B. People surrounding it C. Ways to protect the empire D. Collapse The Chinese Empire A. Geographical condition B. People surrounding it C. Ways to protect the empire D. Collapse

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The Essay There are some interesting parallels between the Roman and Chinese empires even though these empires ended differently. They existed in the different era. Both have territory area which includes several large parts among the world. They also have people that surround around in their each empire which is dominated by barbarians. However, those empires collapse for different reasons in a different way. Briefly, this essay will explain further about them. The Roman Empire has wide and many territorial areas surrounded it. It ruled the Mediterranean world from about 500 B.C to about 500 A.D and it spread out to include North Africa, the Middle East, and Northern Europe. Likewise the governmental structure and bureaucracy, it is quite complex, while the people surrounding it were barbarians and nomads. These barbarians were a constant threat to the Roman Empire. Otherwise, it has three ways to protect the empire. First, they conquered territory like Rhine and Danuba Rivers whose outer boundaries were natural barriers. Second, they also built fortifications like in between Rhine and Danuba, and between Scotland and England to keep out invaders. Third, they used precautionary buffer states, like colonies, which were midway between barbarism and civilization. Then, the Roman Empire finally collapse when the German and

Slavic barbarians broke through the fortification. So, in a short 200 years, the Roman Empire fell to the power of the Germans. On the other hand, Chinese Empire grew and remained intact from 221 B.C to 1911 A.D and it spread northward to Peking, west to the Central Plain, and south to Canton. It was become a center of art and philosophy, while people surrounded it were nomads and barbarians. People who constant threats to the empire were Barbarians, Huns and Mongols. Like in Roman Empire, Chinese Empire also has three ways to protect their empires. First, they used natural boundaries like the Yellow and later the Yangtze Rivers. Second, they built the incredible Great Wall of China. Third, they used buffer states that learned much from China, becoming civilized in the process. Then, the Chinese Empire finally collapse because barbarians broke through the fortifications and the buffer states although they did not destroy the Chinese Empire because they admired the superior culture of China, they set up dynasties imitating the Chinese way of life. The Chinese Empire then continued to decline slowly until the Manchu dynasty ended in 1911 and a republic was declared. In conclusion, there is still a connection between these empires. Although they existed in different era there still an interesting parallels of them. We can classify each point of them like in case of governmental structure, the territorial area, or the chronological how those empires could be collapse. So, that is all about the history of Roman and Chinese Empires.

Pattern A Thesis Sentence There are some interesting parallels between the Roman and Chinese empires even though these empires ended differently. Outline I. Geographical condition A. The Roman Empire B. The Chinese Empire

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People surrounding it A. The Roman Empire B. The Chinese Empire

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Ways to protect the empire A. The Roman Empire B. The Chinese Empire

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Collapse A. The Roman Empire B. The Chinese Empire

The Essay There are some interesting parallels between the Roman and Chinese empires even though these empires ended differently. They existed in the different era. Both have territory area which includes several large parts among the world. They also have people that surround around in their each empire which is dominated by barbarians. However, those empires collapse for different reasons in a different way. Briefly, this essay will explain further about them. To begin with, both of them had been exist in different era and each of them has their each of territorial areas. For instance, the Roman Empire, it ruled the Mediterranean world from about 500 B.C to about 500 A.D and it spread out to include North Africa, the Middle East, and Northern Europe. Besides, the Chinese Empire grew and remained intact from 221 B.C to 1911 A.D and it spread northward to Peking, west to the Central Plain, and south to Canton. So, the Chinese Empire had existed in longer period than the Roman Empire. Next, people who lived surround them. Both have different kind of race people who lived in their territorial area. The Roman Empire, which is the governmental structure and bureaucracy is quite complex, had barbarians and nomads who are surrounding it. These barbarians were a constant threat to the Roman Empire. Otherwise, the Chinese Empire which was become a center of art and philosophy, the people who surrounded it were nomads and barbarians. People who constant threats to the empire were Barbarians, Huns and Mongols. So, the barbarians were become a dominated and a popular race who already had been live since the Chinese Empire exist until the Roman Empire had collapse.

Then, the ways they used to protect the Empire. Both of them have different ways in protecting their Empires. The Roman Empire conquered territory on its first way whose outer boundaries were natural barriers, then they built a fortifications to keep out invaders, and the last is they used precautionary buffer states, like colonies, which were midway between barbarism and civilization. Likewise, the Chinese Empire used natural boundaries like the Yellow and later the Yangtze Rivers, then they built the incredible Great Wall of China, and the last is they used buffer states that learned much from China, becoming civilized in the process. So, we can infer that they have a little similar ways to protect their Empires. The last is the chronological or the cause why those Empires could be collapse. First, the Roman Empire, it finally collapsed when the German and Slavic barbarians broke through the fortification. So, in a short 200 years, the Roman Empire fell to the power of the Germans. Second, the Chinese Empire, it finally collapse because barbarians broke through the fortifications and the buffer states although they did not destroy the Chinese Empire because they admired the superior culture of China, they set up dynasties imitating the Chinese way of life. The Chinese Empire then continued to decline slowly until the Manchu dynasty ended in 1911 and a republic was declared. So, we can conclude that the main and the big reason why those Empires could be collapse is came from their own people who were surrounding them. In brief, they both have different characteristics included the era, the structure, the ways to protect their empires, and so on and so forth. However, each of them has been described in a short way with a clear-briefly information to let you know. In addition, there are some interesting parallels between the Roman and Chinese empires even though these empires ended differently.

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