Talk:Tasha Ghouri/GA1

GA Review

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Nominator: Launchballer (talk · contribs) 08:25, 13 April 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Sammi Brie (talk · contribs) 15:57, 21 July 2024 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)
It is reasonably well written. a (prose, spelling, and grammar): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists): It is factually accurate and verifiable, as shown by a source spot-check. a (references): b (citations to reliable sources): c (OR): d (copyvio and plagiarism): It is broad in its coverage. a (major aspects): b (focused): It follows the neutral point of view policy. Fair representation without bias: It is stable. No edit wars, etc.: It is illustrated by images, where possible and appropriate. a (images are tagged and non-free images have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
Overall: Pass/Fail:
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Lots of copy tweaks to make, but a really solid start. Two minor source things to fix as well. Ping me when done. Sammi Brie (she/her • t • c) 19:33, 21 July 2024 (UTC)

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Copy changes

Lead

• Titles of podcasts should be italicized. (There are three in the article, one in the lead and two further down, that need to be italicized.)

Fixed.

Life and career

• She was born deaf, and was initially fitted for hearing aids, before being given a single cochlear implant at Bradford Royal Infirmary just before her fifth birthday which lasted until she was sixteen and went unreplaced for five months; she later underwent speech therapy, and was unable to speak until she was five, having communicated entirely in British Sign Language until that point. What a sentence! Split this, possibly into three. Also watch for WP:CINS; I see it a few places here and in the rest of the article and will point it out.
• Ghouri took up ballet aged three, and would copy the choreography of her parents' copy of the Steps album
  • CINS (remove comma)
  • "Copy the choreography of her parents' copy"... Woof. Consider rewording.

For now, changed the second 'copy' to 'edition'. I'll take another look in the morning.

• After graduating, she moved to London, and signed to a modelling agency, and worked as a... Double CINS. Try After graduating, she moved to London, signed to a modelling agency and worked as a...
• podcast that she had previously applied for Too Hot to Handle, but had been told that she "weren't right" for the programme
  • CinS remove comma
  • Maybe "was told"
• "she weren't"? Try a [wasn't] in brackets depending on context from the original quote.
• Consider "hard-of-hearing" hyphenated as an adjective

Fixed.

• She later dated Giovanni Pernice after the pair connected via Instagram, and met in January 2022, though their try She later dated Giovanni Pernice after the pair connected via Instagram; they met in January 2022, though their

Fixed.

• Mind your British English: that should be programme

Fixed.

• She later became an ambassador for Ann Summers, for whom she featured in their Christmas advert and fronted their Luminescent collection, Sisters & Seekers, a Llay-based fashion label, and Lullabellz, a Manchester-based hair extension brand. This list is in bad need of semicolons because its list entries contain commas. She later became an ambassador for Ann Summers, for whom she featured in their Christmas advert and fronted their Luminescent collection; Sisters & Seekers, a Llay-based fashion label; and Lullabellz, a Manchester-based hair extension brand.

Fixed.

• Appearing on that day's Lorraine, Ghouri explained that she wanted to upload a video to that effect since leaving Love Island, but had not felt ready. Remove second comma (CinS)

Sourcing and spot checks

• Is there a better source than The Media Eye, a PR firm, for the LullaBellz item?

I would have said this was fine as it was being used only for what Lullabellz was (the actual BLP bit of her being involved used a different source), but replaced with The Manc.

• 14: I initially missed this because I didn't realize that the name I was looking for was "Sense". Y
• 21: But within hours of recoupling it was clear Andrew still had feelings for his former partner, Tasha Ghouri, and he quickly cooled things off with Coco, Y
• 32: Ghouri revealed her new role as the marketplace’s “pre-loved ambassador” in a post to Instagram. Partial verification: it is not said that she is the first for them, just that she is one. Y

Replaced with Grazia.

• 42: Scarlett Moffatt and Stacey Solomon featured as team captains, while guests of the most recent season included Katherine Ryan, Big Brother presenter Will Best, EastEnders' Danielle Harold, Love Island's Tasha Ghouri, and Emmerdale's Danny Miller. Y
• 44: Y

Encouragement: Convert {{Citation}} (CS2) to {{Cite AV media}} (CS1) for YouTube to be more aligned with the other CS1 citations throughout.

Images

The lone image is cropped from a CC-BY upload by the UK government. Y