Talk:Cereal/GA1

GA Review

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Reviewer: Bruxton (talk · contribs) 05:16, 7 February 2024 (UTC)

Review

I am happy to review this article. Bruxton (talk) 05:16, 7 February 2024 (UTC)

Many thanks! Chiswick Chap (talk) 05:44, 7 February 2024 (UTC)

Lead

The facts in the lead are all cited in the body. Have one question below.

? "ground to flour" just checking if "to" is the what you wanted here

Yes, I mean something like "the grain can be ground down using a pair of millstones from big lumps to small particles of flour".

Spelling

? Lead, "A cereal is a grass cultivated for its edible grain." consider losing the "A" so that it is just Cereal. What do you think?

? Origins section "down for long periods of time," Seems redundant so maybe just "long periods"

? Origins "Early villages show evidence of processing of grains" might read funny.. what do you think?

? Origins section "the term cereal is derived from Latin cerealis" misspelling

? Modern section "During the second half of the 20th century there was a significant increase" consider comma after century. Also consider a link to 20th century.

? Modern "crops tend to have low quality proteins" consider hyphen for low-quality

? Botanical " A cereal grain is botanically a caryopsis" consider losing the "A" I am not sure about it.

? Nutritional "Vegetarian cultures, in order to get a balanced diet," Consider removing "in order" as the words seems to be extra

? Cultivation "are called cool season cereals" consider hyphen for cool-season

? Cultivation "Warm season cereals, in contrast" consider hyphen for Warm-season

? Cultivation Same for "Cool season cereals can be grown in highlands" Cool-season

? Planting "Other warm climate cereals" consider hyphen

? Harvesting "developed countries is by combine harvester" consider adding by "a" combine

? Preprocessing and storage "spoilt by mould fungi" I was unfamiliar with both spoilt and mould- are these British english?

? Chart " and said to resemble meat texture more than others." consider "are" said to

? "while the production of oats and rye have drastically" probably "has" works better

? "Teff, an ancient grain that is a staple in Ethiopia" consider Teff "is" an ancient.. without comma after Teff.

? still checking...

Citations

Y There is a high Earwig score and I am unable to determine who copied who. Can you help? Bruxton (talk) 05:21, 7 February 2024 (UTC)

Hmm, what a tangle. The "Cargo Handbook" has surely copied Wikipedia without attribution; the page is a short mostly chatty commercial account with a small amount of suddenly-more-technical encyclopedia-like text which remarkably happens to match bits of our article, so I'd not worry about that.

The NCBI article is similarly a very curious hotchpotch; for example, it says The first cereal grains were domesticated about 12,000 years ago by ancient farming communities in the Fertile Crescent region. Emmer wheat, einkorn wheat, and barley were three of the so-called Neolithic founder crops in the development of agriculture. Maize, wheat and rice together accounted for 87% of all grain production worldwide, (yes, sentence ends with a comma, looks like a cut-and-paste...). Notice that it jumps straight from the Neolithic to 2012 (without giving the year) in the same paragraph! This too suggests they copied fragments from us, as we have the production figures under Production and the Neolithic under History, as you'd expect. The NCBI article came out in July 2015, and sure enough the June 2015 Wikipedia article already contains the text The warm-season cereals are grown in tropical lowlands year-round and in temperate climates during the frost-free season. Rice is commonly grown in flooded fields, though some strains are grown on dry land. Other warm climate cereals, such as sorghum, are adapted to arid conditions., confirming that NCBI too copied from us. Chiswick Chap (talk) 08:55, 7 February 2024 (UTC)

Thanks for the explanation. I will continue the review today. Bruxton (talk) 14:41, 7 February 2024 (UTC)

? In origins I cannot confirm the information in the citation: "Cereals including barley, emmer, and einkorn were domesticated some 8,000 years ago in the Fertile Crescent"

? Origins How reliable is the source for paragraph four, Source

Images

The article has 12 images and ten of them appear to be properly licensed and free. I am unsure about two. I ask you opinion on the the two below.

? Unsure about the license for these images File:Main Traded Cereals, Top Importers And Exporters (Quantities, 2021).svg, File:Production Of Cereals (2021).svg

I've had a nose about the FAO website, and it seems they use a CC-by-SA-NC license, contrary to what is stated on Commons. I've asked the uploader to clarify, but since the licenses indeed seem to be wrong, I'm removing those two images for now. Chiswick Chap (talk) 16:32, 7 February 2024 (UTC)

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Rate	Attribute	Review Comment
1. Well-written:
	1a. the prose is clear, concise, and understandable to an appropriately broad audience; spelling and grammar are correct.
	1b. it complies with the Manual of Style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation.
2. Verifiable with no original research:
	2a. it contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline.
	2b. reliable sources are cited inline. All content that could reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose).
	2c. it contains no original research.
	2d. it contains no copyright violations or plagiarism.
3. Broad in its coverage:
	3a. it addresses the main aspects of the topic.
	3b. it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style).
	4. Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each.
	5. Stable: it does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.
6. Illustrated, if possible, by media such as images, video, or audio:
	6a. media are tagged with their copyright statuses, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content.
	6b. media are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions.
	7. Overall assessment.