英語
至急！！慶応経済の英作文の添削をお願いします！ I believe that zoo in Japan should not be abolished. As noted in Anne E Malls(2010.paragraph 3):”without a doubt,keeping wild animals in captivity is morally indefensible “ Surely, tightly controll its creatures. However, if we didn’t controll animals, we would be the risk of animals attacking. Additionally,a recent government survey revealed that the number of bears sightings in the cities across Japan has been on the rise over the past several years as food scarcity for the animal worsens.But,more recently, bears are getting closer to people-to the point they are coming inside and making themselves at home. This suggests that collecting animals rather than keeping animals in the wild might offer a more practical solution. Also,as noted I O Gint (2009,paragraph,4)”modern zoos provide enriching environments in which animals can find playful and safe interactions with other species.” For these reasons, I believe that zoo in Japan should not be abolished. 文法ミスが怖くてほぼ本文の引用で文字数稼いじゃったんですけどこれってアウトですかね？？ またなにか文字数が稼げるいいフレーズがあれば教えて欲しいです！！
